From 011d2ef85a14db28fde4ae97cc49013ff192bc67 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Wed, 18 Feb 2026 08:42:52 +0100
Subject: [PATCH] 'zz' One Step For A Child: revision

---
 zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html | 23 +++++++++++------------
 1 file changed, 11 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-)

diff --git a/zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html b/zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html
index ba6f634..040d0af 100644
--- a/zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html
+++ b/zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 <p>
   The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
   the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
-  where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
+  where Emily would land, they had decided to wait atop one of the
   tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
   setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
   while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
@@ -22,12 +22,11 @@
   <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s time. Emily will be entering the
   atmosphere right about now.</span><br />
   They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does
-  the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her
+  the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing
   disappointment.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
-  as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
-  <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
+  Jack says <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got you.</span>
+  as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Oooh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
   start walking towards the edge.
 </p>
 <p>
@@ -42,8 +41,8 @@
   handing them back to him.<br />
   It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size.
   For a few minutes, not much seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
-  bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
-  disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer.
+  bigger, slowly turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
+  disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shields as it comes closer.
 </p>
 <p>
   Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above
@@ -55,10 +54,10 @@
   are pretty slim, but something&apos;s not right.</span><br />
   As if on cue, the rear end of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
   cloud of fragments. The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
-  multiple buildings down with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says
-  anything for a while as they watch the buildings around the impact
-  crumble and the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a
-  mix of shock and awe.
+  down multiple buildings along with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody
+  says a word as they watch the buildings around the impact crumble and
+  the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a mix of shock
+  and awe.
 </p>
 <p>
   Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over