From 0ab52a039032c66a09a074a65d558dbee582629b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Tue, 7 Nov 2023 07:36:36 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] 01 Wakr up: extensive revision, remove obsolete outline --- 01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html | 131 +++++++++++++++---------------------- 1 file changed, 51 insertions(+), 80 deletions(-) diff --git a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html index 105fece..a37eb9d 100644 --- a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html +++ b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html @@ -2,18 +2,18 @@

Wake Up!

- Ahh fuck! Jack exclaims in pain as he + Awh fuck! Jack exclaims in pain as he wakes up. He has a terrible headache. While moving his hands up to hold - his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.
- Owwowwowwowwoww... Ouch!
- Emergency defrost complete. Entering low power - mode. announces an automated voice.
- He thinks: Get it together, Jack! + his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts. + Owowowww... Ouch!
+ An automated voice announces: Emergency + defrost complete. Entering low power mode.
+ Jack thinks: Get it together, Jack! You knew this was gonna happen. You have trained for this. Where are the meds again? ...

- Waiting for the painkillers to kick in, Jack stays in his preservation + Waiting for the painkillers to kick in, he stays in his preservation chamber until he is fully awake. As he stands there, looking out of the small window in the door, he notices something off. The bunker looks different from yesterday - not yesterday! That was years ago, probably @@ -24,30 +24,31 @@

The pressurized air hisses in the lines as the door of the preservation chamber swings aside. Jack steps out into the bunker, breathes the musty - air, and looks around. The light shining out of his chamber reveals the - dirty floor. The table and chairs in front of him, as well as the kitchen - across the room, are covered in dust and all exposed bits of metal have + air, and looks around. The light shining out of his chamber reveals a + dirty floor. The table and chairs in front of him as well as the kitchen + across the room are covered in dust and all exposed bits of metal have rust. The red night lights on the ceiling are dimly illuminating the rest of the bunker. He looks to the left: The wall is lined with other preservation chambers, all but one of them being powered down. - In the corner is a minicomputer in a half-height rack and next to it a - teleprinter. Along the rear wall are desks holding a radio, a terminal, - and some boxes – and above them a phone on the wall – nothing - out of the ordinary here. He looks to the right: More preservation - chambers. Instead of a wall, there's the bunker door – door is - a bit of an understatement, it's a massive gate. A small slither of - light passes under it. These fucking idiots... - They didn't reseal it properly. + In the corner is the minicomputer controlling the bunker, a half-height + rack filled to the brim with devices, and next to it a teleprinter, a + computer-controlled typewriter. Along the rear wall are desks holding a + radio and a terminal, a device with a keyboard and a screen, and above + them a phone on the wall – nothing out of the ordinary here. + He looks to the right: More preservation chambers. Instead of a wall, + there's the bunker door – door is a bit of an understatement, + it's a massive gate. A small slither of light passes under it. + These fucking idiots... They didn't + reseal it properly.

He walks over to the door's control panel. The paint is flaking off revealing the rust underneath. Jack attempts to press a couple buttons - but they get stuck and nothing happens. - Fuck. - He turns back to the inside of the bunker looking for tools, - contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple years too soon and - getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked inside a bunker due - to a bunch of apparent troglodytes who are unable to close a door + but they get stuck and nothing happens. A couple expletives and banging + on the panel later, he turns back to the inside of the bunker looking + for tools, contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple years + too soon and getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked inside + a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes unable to close a door properly... Doesn't matter, too late now.

@@ -63,7 +64,8 @@ He continues past the remaining empty chambers to the back of the bunker.

- Jack opens the boxes on the desks looking for tools. He also rummages + Jack notices the toolbox is missing. + Jack opens the drawers on the desks looking for tools. He also rummages through the cabinets and drawers in the kitchen area. After finding some object that he could use as a screwdriver, he returns to the door, taking off the control panel. He realizes that he has no @@ -72,25 +74,25 @@

Jack returns to the desk with the terminal. He flips the switch on the - desk lamp. It flickers for a moment and turns off again. He leans over - the terminal and pushes the power switch – Bonk! At least this - seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to warm up, he walks - over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front of it. He inspects - the status lights on the various devices thinking aloud: - CPU is idle, serials are idle, cryogenics - control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is powered up - – all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let's - change that... - He pushes the power button and hears the spindle spinning up. The power - button blinks. There is some intermittent rattling from the drive, - probably a shot bearing. He hears the platters inside accelerate for an - unusually long time. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive - to be ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by - a ringing scratching noise. Of course. - He quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the + desk lamp. The lamp flickers for a moment and turns off again. He flips + the switch back and leans over the terminal to turn it on – + Bonk! At least this seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to + warm up, he walks over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front + of it. He inspects the status lights on the various devices, thinking + aloud: CPU is idle, serials are idle, + cryogenics control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is + powered up – all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, + let's change that... He pushes the power button and hears + the spindle motor kick on. The power button blinks. There is some + intermittent rattling from the drive, probably a shot bearing. + He hears the platters inside accelerate for an unusually long time. + Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be ready. + Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a ringing + scratching noise. Of course. He + quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the spindle motor turns off, followed by the platters slowly decelerating. - That's gonna be an ugly head - crash. + That's gonna be an ugly head crash. + No manuals for me, I guess...

He gets up and walks over to the phone. Maybe, the lines to @@ -101,8 +103,9 @@ Welp, that's that. He puts it back on the wall.

-

- TODO: tie this together +

+ In an attempt to find anything useful, he sits down at the terminal and + logs on.

 Tue, 2106-06-01, 18:01
@@ -115,41 +118,9 @@ Welcome to INUX!
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- Over a hundred years, hm...
+ So it's been over a hundred years, + hm... He starts going through the files, hoping he misremembered + where the manuals were stored, but to no avail, they are gone.

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- Outline of missing section(s): -

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