From 1373d43b299eea4a9968f90c7b78bb5980e638e3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Sun, 3 Mar 2024 10:52:14 +0100
Subject: [PATCH] 'zz' (End): remove HTML comments

---
 zz--end.html | 16 ++++------------
 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-)

diff --git a/zz--end.html b/zz--end.html
index cee2efb..2017fad 100644
--- a/zz--end.html
+++ b/zz--end.html
@@ -6,15 +6,11 @@
   The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
   the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
   where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
-  tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer.
-  <!-- Owl feedback: change this to be two sentences -->
-  <!-- Owl feedback #2: just turn it around -->
-  The intense light of the
+  tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
   setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
-  while the moon is already coming over the horizon.
-  <!-- Owl feedback: mention the moon in its own sentence -->
-  They are engaged in a conversation about the
-  mind-boggling vastness of space and all it contains.
+  while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
+  a conversation about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it
+  contains.
 </p>
 <p class="strong">
   bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep
@@ -30,7 +26,6 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
   as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
   <br />
-  <!-- Owl feedback: describe his face -->
   <span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
   start walking towards the edge.
 </p>
@@ -57,7 +52,6 @@
   Looking at Annie, who seems visibly scared, he adds:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s not gonna hit us, the odds of that
   are pretty slim, but something&apos;s not right.</span><br />
-  <!--Owl feedback: explain why they&apos;re just waiting for it anyway -->
   As if on cue, the back of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
   cloud of fragments. <span class="comment">need a better way to say the
   very back</span> The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
@@ -86,8 +80,6 @@
   that clear at some point before this chapter. Maybe include the part where
   Jack insists on bringing it.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Emily, can you hear us? Are you okay?</span>
-  <!-- Might benefit from proper radio protocol - Owl
-  says no -->
   <br />
   They hear a slightly distorted but clearly happy response through the
   noise:<br />