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Tony's cure – no matter what risk it posed ... – maybe
some of them would have made it.
What about you? Emily asks with a
- slither of hope in her voice.
+ sliver of hope in her voice.
No – no cure can save me, it's too
late.
Emily tears up. note: Slightly. Is there a better
@@ -86,16 +86,17 @@
it and opens the valves again. Just as she is done with that, her own
alarm goes off. Disappointed/annoyed reaction
- Emily sits down next to Lena again, but there is no conversation. -
- Emily looks at Lena – she had closed her eyes. As if she knew Emily
- was looking she opens them, looking directly at her.
- Gripping? her hand as she speaks.
- some meaningful last words? Then she lets go
- and closes her eyes again. A couple minutes later, she stops breathing.
- wording
+ Emily sits down across from Lena, radio still on, but there is only silence,
+ occasionally broken by the crackle of cosmic radiation. She looks at Lena
+ – who had closed her eyes. As if she knew Emily was looking, she opens
+ them, looking directly at her, taking her hands and holding them tightly
+ as she speaks:
+ There will come a day when you have no choice but
+ to leave. I hope that day will find you strong and brave to beat the odds
+ again. You got this, little one.
+ Then she lets go and closes her eyes again. Emily moves next to her and holds
+ her hand as Lena drifts away. A few minutes pass and she stops breathing.
Emily sits next to Lena for a while, completely out of it, her mind