diff --git a/pa-Bare_Necessities.html b/pa-Bare_Necessities.html index 2c8b6f4..04cb81b 100644 --- a/pa-Bare_Necessities.html +++ b/pa-Bare_Necessities.html @@ -133,13 +133,13 @@ and Jack. Follow me.

- Mary says: The closest access point is right + Mary says: The closest access hole is right there, behind the store.
They walk around it and onto a field of withering? plants. A large, partially buried pipe with just the top exposed goes through it with an access hatch roughly in the center of the field. Right next to the hatch is a Gestell? with - a boom to lower a large bucket into the access hatch.
+ a boom to lower a large bucket down into it.
Jack asks: Is it all like this, buried pipes going to fields?
Mostly. In the greenhouses, it's just @@ -150,28 +150,12 @@ connects to the inlet. It's a bit of a walk but I can show you.
She gestures for them to follow but Jack stops her:
- Wait, we can take the truck.
- That's your car?
- Her sudden excitement seems to take Jack by surprise.
- Uhh... yeah.
- That's so cool! I've only ever seen - the broken ones by the side of the road. We gonna drive there? + Wait, we can drive there.
+ That's your car? Heck yeah!
- If you show the way.
- Heck yeah! -

-

- Not sure of this should be the end of a chapter or if I should continue - here.
- One thing that has happened is that this chapter, while written from - Annie's perspective, has her be a passive bystander without even - having any introspection for most of it. This needs to be adressed - somehow. -

-

- Description of the inlet: Two <translate: Stauwehre>, a large one - and a small one. The small one can be adjusted with large screws. - Behind the small one is a pit with a grate covering the tunnel entrance. - They see a railway bridge not too far upstream. + Uhh... yes.
+ He seems to be taken aback by her sudden excitement.
+ Missing: explanation, they go to car, Mary sits in + the front with Jack