From 1b93b6813f7d63d1568f53adf03a2b98fd38c247 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Mon, 20 Oct 2025 09:02:57 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] 'pa' Bare Necessities: revise chapter end (unfinished)

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@@ -133,13 +133,13 @@
   and Jack. <span class="quote speech">Follow me.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Mary says: <span class="quote speech">The closest access point is right
+  Mary says: <span class="quote speech">The closest access hole is right
   there, behind the store.</span><br />
   They walk around it and onto a field of <span class="comment">withering?
   </span> plants. A large, partially buried pipe with just the top exposed
   goes through it with an access hatch roughly in the center of the field.
   Right next to the hatch is a <span class="comment">Gestell?</span> with
-  a boom to lower a large bucket into the access hatch.<br />
+  a boom to lower a large bucket down into it.<br />
   Jack asks: <span class="quote speech">Is it all like this, buried pipes
   going to fields?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Mostly. In the greenhouses, it&apos;s just
@@ -150,28 +150,12 @@
   connects to the inlet. It&apos;s a bit of a walk but I can show
   you.</span><br />
   She gestures for them to follow but Jack stops her:<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Wait, we can take the truck.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s <i>your</i> car?</span><br />
-  Her sudden excitement seems to take Jack by surprise.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Uhh... yeah.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s so cool! I&apos;ve only ever seen
-  the broken ones by the side of the road. We gonna drive there?</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Wait, we can drive there.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s <i>your</i> car? Heck yeah!</span>
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">If you show the way.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Heck yeah!</span>
-</p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Not sure of this should be the end of a chapter or if I should continue
-  here.<br />
-  One thing that has happened is that this chapter, while written from
-  Annie&apos;s perspective, has her be a passive bystander without even
-  having any introspection for most of it. This needs to be adressed
-  somehow.
-</p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Description of the inlet: Two &lt;translate: Stauwehre&gt;, a large one
-  and a small one. The small one can be adjusted with large screws.
-  Behind the small one is a pit with a grate covering the tunnel entrance.
-  They see a railway bridge not too far upstream.
+  <span class="quote speech">Uhh... yes.</span><br />
+  He seems to be taken aback by her sudden excitement.<br />
+  <span class="comment">Missing: explanation, they go to car, Mary sits in
+  the front with Jack</span>
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