diff --git a/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html b/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html index b39fc7e..3b90a2a 100644 --- a/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html +++ b/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html @@ -21,7 +21,7 @@

Following the sound, she walks down the hallway. She stops to listen.

-

+

beep beep

@@ -65,8 +65,8 @@

... and apparently it is the source of the beep sound. She had never used one before but taking a quick look can't hurt – and - besides, this beeping is slowly getting annoying. She walks up to it and - begins to inspect it... wording!! + besides, this beeping is slowly getting on her nerves. She walks up to + it and begins to inspect it... wording!!

BEEP BEEP @@ -127,18 +127,15 @@ Thank you. Appreciate it. a pile of paper, an empty cup, some pens and pencils, a screwdriver and other tools, a rubber duck – what an odd place to find a rubber duck... A phone! She picks it up – no signal. - Freizeichen? Weird. Maybe it's disconnected. She looks on + Freizeichen? Weird. Maybe, it isn't connected. She looks on the floor and, sure enough, there is the plug – not for much longer as she finds a phone socket and plugs it in. Strange electrical - noises. She tries to dial a number but nothing happens. A couple random - characters appear on the terminal. She drops the receiver back on the - cradle and types into the terminal again: -

-

- add the random characters + noises. She tries to dial a number but nothing happens. She drops the + receiver on the cradle and turns back to the terminal. A couple random + characters appear.

-i cant call anyone the phone is only making weird noises
+%s;  i cant call anyone the phone is only making weird noises
 
 This modem is probably on the same line. I can disconnect for a while and
 dial in again in a bit.
@@ -155,13 +152,13 @@ AgriWorks Login: █
 
 

What's a modem? she wonders - for a second but then disregards the thought as she picks up the phone + for a second, but then disregards the thought as she picks up the phone again. Who to call though? Her coworkers would probably make fun of her or be annoyed. Also, this place, Cryo Facility 53, she had never heard of it. The only one who might know more about it is her - grandpa, as he used to work for the power company and still spends a lot - of his time studying the plans of the city. So she dials his number... + grandpa, as he used to work for the power company and had studied the + plans of the city very thoroughly. So she dials his number...

Annie is greeted by the friendly voice of an old man. After @@ -209,10 +206,11 @@ AgriWorks Login: █

A cup of juice and two cookies later, she hears the telephone ring in the - basement. She grabs another cookie and hurries back down the stairs. She - makes it to the desk just in time for the phone to stop ringing. The - text on the terminal begins to move. She sits down, reads what just - appeared on screen, and starts typing: + basement. Annie grabs another cookie and hurries back down the stairs. + She makes it to the desk just in time for the phone to stop ringing. The + text on the terminal disappears. She looks back and forth between the + phone and the terminal for a moment. A new message appears. She sits down + and replies:

@@ -220,7 +218,7 @@ Hello again.
 
 hello  i am really sorry but we cannot get to facility 53  its outside
 
-Hm. Okay. Sucks to be me, I guess...
+Okay. Sucks to be me, I guess...
 
 is there anything else i can do for you
 
@@ -246,7 +244,7 @@ no
 

Annie looks up from the terminal. She finds a piece of paper and a pen – whoever works here hopefully won't mind – and writes - down B33FY-AF door. + down Neotek B33FY-AF door.

 Are there any computer people you could ask for help?
@@ -299,9 +297,8 @@ ok thats good
 I have to go now, the bunker's daily phone usage quota is running out.
 Thank you again and looking forward to talk to you and your grandpa.
 
-B33FY-AF Bunker Door
-<phone number>
-300 baud
+Neotek Dynamics B33FY-AF Bunker Door
+<phone number> @ 300 baud
 
 I will connect back to this terminal on Friday if we haven't
 established contact before then.
@@ -344,14 +341,14 @@ AgriWorks Login: █
   the clock above the entrance... 8:25 PM - the realization of how much
   time had passed hits: Normally she'd be at home already. She starts
   walking towards the metro station at the corner. The buildings here are
-  similar to the ones in other parts of the city - three to four story
-  houses painted in different colors - but they are lacking balconies and,
-  instead of being homes, they mostly house offices. On the other side of
-  the street is an embankment that holds the rails for the metro and beyond
-  that is the outer wall of the dome. The street lights illuminating the
-  area had already switched to the lower brightness for the night giving
-  the area an eerie look. Only a couple times had she seen it like this
-  while staying late for company events.
+  similar to the ones in Wohngebieten? - three
+  to four story houses painted in different colors - but they are lacking
+  balconies and, instead of being homes, they mostly house offices. On the
+  other side of the street is an embankment that holds the rails for the
+  metro and beyond that is the outer wall of the dome. The street lights
+  illuminating the area had already switched to the lower brightness for
+  the night giving the area an eerie look. Only a couple times had she
+  seen it like this while staying late for company events.
 

Annie reaches the corner. She looks left and right before crossing the