From 43b09e986a4b640183ff4373f5147a820338b13e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Thu, 19 Oct 2023 19:41:37 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] 01 Wake Up: more revision
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01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html | 20 +++++++++-----------
1 file changed, 9 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-)
diff --git a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html
index 21ad10b..4150a79 100644
--- a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html
+++ b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html
@@ -77,15 +77,16 @@
seems to work. While waiting for the tube to warm up, he walks over to
the rack and sits down on the floor in front of it. He inspects the
status lights on the various devices thinking aloud:
- CPU is idle, serials are idle, primary hard
- drive is powered up – all good. Secondary hard drive is powered
- down, let's change that...
+ CPU is idle, serials are idle, cryogenics
+ control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is powered up
+ – all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let's
+ change that...
He pushes the power button and hears the spindle spinning up. The power
button blinks. There is some intermittent rattling from the drive,
- probably a shot bearing. It takes an unusually long time for it to get
- up to speed. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be
- ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a
- ringing scratching noise. Of course.
+ probably a shot bearing. He hears the platters inside accelerate for an
+ unusually long time. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive
+ to be ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by
+ a ringing scratching noise. Of course.
He quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the
spindle motor turns off, followed by the platters slowly decelerating.
That's gonna be an ugly head
@@ -287,10 +288,7 @@ $ █
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