From 43d3075d4602196b91637fab6bf8f602f155297b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Fri, 29 Sep 2023 08:20:13 +0200 Subject: [PATCH] 01 Unlikely Encounter: refine language around Annie rarely going to the basement --- 01-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html | 33 +++++++++++++++----------- 1 file changed, 19 insertions(+), 14 deletions(-) diff --git a/01-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html b/01-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html index 1f66231..80b0d2b 100644 --- a/01-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html +++ b/01-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html @@ -33,25 +33,30 @@
The sound is clearer, it comes from down there. Annie walks down the - stairs and turns on the lights. She rarely goes down here. - needs to be tied together better; Why is it - relevant that she is only down here rarely? Rows of shelves hold - lots of documents, some standing up vertically in folders and boxes, - others as horizontal stacks of paper. The room is dimly lit by a few - light fixtures on the walls. + stairs and turns on the lights. She rarely goes to the basement, usually + just to add to the piles of archived paperwork on the rows of shelves, + but she had no idea there was anything other than the archive down here.
beep beep
- She walks past the shelves. The noise is now very close. Behind the last - shelf, sectioned off from the rest of the room, she finds a corner that - looks like a small office. There is a large desk with a - comfortable-looking though well-worn leather chair in front of it. - Next to the chair is a floor lamp that was apparently placed there in - the absence of a desk lamp. The desk itself is a mess (apart from a - neatly organized row of books at the back of the desk). Front and center - is a terminal... + The room is dimly lit by a few light fixtures on the walls. Looking + through between the rows of binders, boxes, and loose stacks of paper, + she notices a small dark area in the back of the room. She starts + walking towards it. +
++ beep beep +
++ The noise is now very close. Behind the last shelf, sectioned off from + the rest of the room, she finds a corner that looks like a small office. + There is a large desk with a comfortable-looking though well-worn leather + chair in front of it. Next to the chair is a floor lamp that was + apparently placed there in the absence of a desk lamp. The desk itself is + a mess (apart from a neatly organized row of books at the back of the + desk). Front and center is a terminal...
BEEP BEEP