06 Library At Night: revision

- note => notes
- change how the computer is operated
- Isabelle doesn’t just randomly grab an unused floppy first try
- only one window in the basement
- wording changes/fixes

06-Library_At_Night.html

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@
   flashlights.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Following the description Lucas had given, they find their way down to
+  Following the description Lucas had given, the two find their way down to
   the basement and into a small room. They close the door behind themselves
   and look around. To the left is a desk holding a terminal and a bunch of
   small devices. Across from the door is a row of five racks almost as tall
@@ -19,39 +19,36 @@
   To the right is a shelf holding various boxes, stacks of flat, round
   cases, and other random things.
 </p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Again, request for formatting suggestions below...
-</p>
 <p>
-  <span class="comment">TODO: change Karl&apos;s note -&gt; Karl&apos;s
-  note<b>s</b></span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">I guess this is it. Let&apos;s take a look at
-  Karl&apos;s note</span>, Isabelle says in a hushed voice.
+  Karl&apos;s notes</span>, Isabelle says in a hushed voice.<br />
-  <br />
   Annie pulls it out of her bag.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">It says to find a terminal connected to the
-  computer first... By the way, Lucas said something about taking a new
+  computer first. I guess this one will do... By the way, Lucas said
-  floppy disk from the shelf, can you search for that?</span><br />
+  something about taking a new <span class="quote non-speech"><i>floppy
+  disk</i></span> from the shelf, he described it as an eight inch square
+  thing. Can you search for that?</span><br />
   Annie goes over to the terminal; Isabelle turns to the boxes. Annie puts
   the keys on the desk and inspects the terminal for cables.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a box with cookies back
   here.</span><br />
   She pulls it out from behind the terminal. <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I want one</span>, says Isabelle. <br />
+  Isabelle says: <span class="quote speech">I want one.</span><br />
   They giggle. Both end up taking a cookie before stashing the box behind
   the terminal again.
 </p>
 <p>
   Annie reaches around the side and flips the power switch. The terminal
-  makes a bonk sound and a crackling noise. She feels the hairs on her arm
+  makes a <span class="quote non-speech">bonk</span> sound and a crackling
-  stand up as she inadvertently moves it in front of the screen. <br />
+  noise. She feels the hairs on her arm stand up as she inadvertently
-  <span class="quote speech">Whoa...</span><br />
+  moves it in front of the screen.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Whoa!</span><br />
   The screen begins to light up.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">... I guess this is supposed to happen.</span>
   <br />
-  Annie looks back at the note. <br />
+  Annie looks back at the notes.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">&#8216;Turn on main power switch on
+  <span class="quote speech">Computer main power switch to RST...</span>,
-  computer&apos;...</span>, she mumbles to herself.<br />
+  she mumbles to herself.<br />
   She looks at the racks. They are mostly filled with what looks like
   large drawers with buttons on them. The one in the center is different.
   It has a bunch of panels with all sorts of cables plugged into them, most
@@ -59,59 +56,66 @@
   panels with buttons and lights, and a few other devices.
 </p>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">I found you a new floppy disk.</span> Isabelle
+  <span class="quote speech">I found you a floppy disk.</span> Isabelle
   interrupts her.<br />
   She pulls a large, square, floppy thing, half-wrapped in a paper sleeve,
-  out of one of the boxes. She lifts it out of the sleeve. Turns out,
+  out of one of the boxes. She removes the sleeve. Turns out, it&apos;s
-  it&apos;s another sleeve made of thin plastic with openings that
+  another sleeve made of thin plastic with openings that were previously
-  were previously covered by the paper. The openings reveal something black
+  covered by the paper. The openings reveal something black and shiny.
-  and shiny.<br />
+  <br />
+  Annie notices: <span class="quote speech">Someone has written om the
+  sleeve, I guess this one has been used.</span><br />
+  Isabelle puts it back and grabs an identical box that&apos;s still
+  shrink-wrapped. She opens it and takes a disk out.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">There we go.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Lucas said to put it in the computer and push
   a lever down.</span><br />
   They look back and forth between the floppy disk and the computer until
   Isabelle points to a device in the center rack with a large, flat slot.
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">It could fit in there.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Could fit in there.</span><br />
   She walks up to it and pushes the disk into it. It fits perfectly. Then,
   she pushes on the mechanism in the center of the slot. It latches in
   place.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">What&apos;s next?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">The note says to turn on the
+  <span class="quote speech">The notes say to flip the
-  <span class="quote non-speech">main power switch</span></span> &ndash;
+  <span class="quote non-speech">main power switch</span> to
+  <span class="quote non-speech">RST</span></span> &ndash;
   Annie repeats while inspecting one of the panels with buttons &ndash;
   <span class="quote speech">Maybe this one?</span>
-  She points at a key switch. <br />
+  She points at a key switch with multiple positions.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Only one way to find out.</span><br />
-  Isabelle picks up the keys and hands them to her. One of them fits and
+  Isabelle grabs the keys and hands them to her. One of them fits and
   turns.
 </p>
 <p>
   Fans come on; they hear the loud noise of air rushing through the
   computer. Some of the lights and buttons light up. Annie looks at the
-  note again: <br />
+  notes again: <br />
   <span class="quote speech"><span class="quote non-speech">Spin up boot
   drive</span>... Lucas has also written here:
   <span class="quote non-speech">HDD number two</span></span><br />
   The two look back at the racks.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">These drawer thingies here have numbers on
   them, maybe that&apos;s what they mean?</span><br />
-  Isabelle presses the power button on number two. It lights up and the
+  Isabelle presses the power button on number two. It lights up, some more
-  button next to it starts blinking. She presses it. The device makes a
+  fans come on, and the button next to it starts blinking. She presses it.
-  loud clonk noise followed by a motor accelerating inside. Clicking and
+  The device makes a loud <span class="quote non-speech">clonk</span>
-  more mechanical noises. The button stops blinking and stays lit up.<br />
+  noise followed by a motor accelerating inside. Clicking and more
-  <span class="quote speech">The last step on the note is to press
+  mechanical noises. The button stops blinking and stays lit up.<br />
-  &#8216;reset&apos; and &#8216;load&apos; and to enter something into the
+  <span class="quote speech">The last step in the notes says
-  terminal. They also wrote down a list of commands that might help us to
+  <span class="quote non-speech">hold LOAD, main power switch to RUN</span>
-  find and copy the manual, and
+  and to enter something into the terminal. And then there&apos;s a list
+  of hints and commands that might help us, and
   <span class="quote non-speech">Good luck!</span>...</span><br />
   Isabelle pushes the buttons and they walk over to the terminal.
 </p>
 <p>
   After a lot of typing into the terminal and figuring things out the hard
   way &ndash; and maybe a couple more cookies disappearing &ndash; they
-  find the manual on one of the hard drives and manage to get it onto the
+  manage to find the manual on one of the hard drives and somehow get it
-  floppy disk. They follow the instructions to turn the computer off and
+  onto the floppy disk. They follow the instructions to turn the computer
-  Annie takes the disk out of the computer.
+  off and Annie takes the disk out of the computer.
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Shhh.</span><br />
@@ -126,9 +130,9 @@
   <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Shit</span>, Isabelle whispers.<br />
   They turn around and sneak to the other end of the hallway. It opens up
-  into a room filled with crates that has small windows near the ceiling.
+  into a room filled with crates that has a small window near the ceiling.
   The footsteps are making their way down the stairs. Annie reaches for
-  one of the windows and opens it as quietly as possible while Isabelle
+  the window and opens it as quietly as possible while Isabelle
   pushes one of the crates under it - not quite as quietly. The person on
   the stairs starts running. Isabelle jumps onto the crate and quickly
   climbs through the window. Annie, trying to follow her example,