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@@ -5,15 +5,15 @@
   beep beep
 </p>
 <p>
-  What was that? Annie turns around.
+  What was that? Annie looks up.
 </p>
 <p class="light">
   beep beep
 </p>
 <p>
-  That came from the hallway. She steps outside her office to see where
-  this noise is coming from. Everyone else had already gone home and she
-  was about to leave as well so this is weird.
+  That came from the hallway. She steps outside her office to locate the
+  source of this noise. Everyone else had already gone home and she was
+  about to leave as well so this is weird.
 </p>
 <p class="light">
   beep beep
@@ -32,7 +32,7 @@
   beep beep
 </p>
 <p>
-  The sound is clearer, it comes from down there. Annie walks down the
+  It sounds clearer, it comes from down there. Annie walks down the
   stairs and turns on the lights. She rarely goes to the basement, usually
   just to add to the piles of archived paperwork on the rows of shelves,
   but she had no idea there was anything other than the archive down here.
@@ -43,20 +43,20 @@
 <p>
   The room is dimly lit by a few light fixtures on the walls. Looking
   through between the rows of binders, boxes, and loose stacks of paper,
-  she notices a small dark area in the back of the room. She starts
-  walking towards it.
+  she notices a small dark area in the back of the room. She begins to
+  walk towards it.
 </p>
 <p class="heavy">
   beep beep
 </p>
 <p>
   The noise is now very close. Behind the last shelf, sectioned off from
-  the rest of the room, she finds a corner that looks like a small office.
-  There is a large desk with a comfortable-looking though well-worn leather
-  chair in front of it. Next to the chair is a floor lamp that was
+  the rest of the room, she finds what looks to be a small office. There
+  is a large wooden desk with a comfortable-looking though well-worn
+  leather chair in front of it. Next to the chair is a floor lamp that was
   apparently placed there in the absence of a desk lamp. The desk itself is
-  a mess (apart from a neatly organized row of books at the back of the
-  desk). Front and center is a terminal...
+  a mess, apart from a neatly organized row of books towards the wall,
+  holding all sorts of tools and cables. Front and center is a terminal...
 </p>
 <p class="heavy">
   BEEP BEEP