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@@ -73,12 +73,12 @@
   </li>
 </ul>
 <p>
-  Emily closes the cage and puts the &lt;whatever they feed the mice&gt;
-  back into the cupboard. She <span class="comment">does something related
-  to taking care of the mice</span>, steps out into the hallway, and
-  starts walking. The entire habitat is eerily quiet. Apart from her steps,
-  just the hum of the electrical systems and the quiet whirr of the air
-  circulation are audible.
+  Emily closes the cage and puts the <span class="comment">whatever they
+  feed the mice</span> back into the cupboard. She double-checks that the
+  cage is really closed, then she steps out into the hallway, and starts
+  walking. The entire habitat is eerily quiet. Apart from her own
+  footsteps, she hears just the hum of the electrical systems and the
+  quiet whirr of the air circulation.
 </p>
 <p>
   3 &ndash; 5 &ndash; 2 &ndash; 1 &ndash; Enter. The keypad beeps with
@@ -86,20 +86,24 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Access authorized</span> and the door slides
   up. She steps through into the main control center. The module contains
   one large room with rows of integrated computer equipment desks arranged
-  <span class="comment">need a fitting description of what a mission
-  control rom looks like</span>. The wall to the left that most of the
-  seats are facing is completely taken up by a panorama window into the
-  biotope, an even larger module with a ceiling of glass and support beams,
-  completely filled with plant life, trees, small animals, and a big pond.
-  The wall to the right holds a large status panel with some seven-segment
+  in a <span class="comment">Mondsichel</span> shape with the
+  <span class="comment">W&ouml;lbung</span> to the left. Most of the seats
+  are facing that way, allowing a view of the biotope through a huge
+  panorama window taking up the entire wall. The biotope is an even larger
+  module with a ceiling of glass and support beams, completely filled with
+  plant life, trees, small critters, and a big pond. The walls across from
+  her and to the right hold large status panels with some seven-segment
   displays for information and lots of big status indicator symbols.
 </p>
 <p>
   Emily walks down the shallow stairs towards the panorama window. In
   front of the window are tables and chairs that were moved there recently
   as the room had become more of a general hangout spot for the remaining
-  people when there still more than just Lena and her. Lena sits at one of
-  them, cutting a bread into slices while waiting for her.
+  people. Now, it&apos;s just Lena and her.
+</p>
+<p>
+  Lena sits at one of the tables, cutting a piece of bread into slices.
+  In front of her is a bowl with fruit and a honey jar.
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
   missing dialog about food and starting to eat