From 53f738f2e5bd0e65e72175ad478891cefc0234f7 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Fri, 13 Oct 2023 17:21:42 +0200 Subject: [PATCH] 02 Wake Up: Fill in a gap and rewrite a good portion of the chapter to match --- 02-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html | 103 +++++++++++++++++++++++++------------ 1 file changed, 69 insertions(+), 34 deletions(-) diff --git a/02-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html b/02-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html index ab56376..b8fbfa6 100644 --- a/02-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html +++ b/02-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html @@ -7,8 +7,7 @@ head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.
Owwowwowwowwoww... Ouch!
Emergency defrost complete. Entering low power - mode. - announces an automated voice.
+ mode. announces an automated voice.
He thinks to himself: Get it together, Jack! You knew this was gonna happen. You have trained for this. Where are the meds again? ... @@ -31,7 +30,7 @@ rust. The red night lights on the ceiling are dimly illuminating the rest of the bunker. He looks to the left: The wall is lined with other preservation chambers, all except one of them being powered down. In - front of the back wall are desks holding a radio, a terminal, and some + front of the rear wall are desks holding a radio, a terminal, and some boxes. To the left of the desks in the corner is a minicomputer in a half-height rack and a teleprinter, and above it a phone on the wall – the usual Neotek equipment. He looks to the right: More @@ -73,48 +72,84 @@ the computer.

- The phone lifts off the wall with a quiet click and Jack begins to dial. - He holds the receiver to his ear - silence. Welp, another thing that - isn't working. He puts it back on the wall while turning to the - terminal. + There needs to be a mention of him trying to turn + on a lamp but it only flickers for a short moment. + He leans over the desk with the terminal and flips the power switch. + Bonk! Seems to work, at least. While waiting + for the tube to warm up, he walks over to the rack and sits down + on the floor in front of it. He inspects the status lights. + CPU is idle, serials are idle, primary hard drive + is powered up – all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, + let's change that... He pushes the power button and hears the + spindle spinning up. The power button blinks. There is some intermittent + rattling from the drive, probably a shot + bearing. It takes an unusually long time for it to get up to + speed. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be ready. + Clicking form the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a ringing + scratching noise. Of course, he thinks, + quickly pressing the power button again. The scratching stops and the + spindle motor turns off. That's gonna be an + ugly head crash. He looks around for other ways to get the manual. + He could try calling someone, maybe the lines to <dome city> still + work.

- Bonk! At least this seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to - warm up, he opens the lid on the teleprinter - only to find that - something has eaten most of the paper. He removes what remains and opens - one of the cabinets under the desks. By some miracle, the animal that ate - the paper on the printer didn't find the rest. He takes a piece of - the stack and tears it off. Then, he sets it on top of the desk with a - thump. need translation for "Staub - aufwirbeln" + Not exactly excited by the prospect of calling random people, but not + seeing another option, he reaches for the phone. It lifts off the wall + with a quiet click and Jack begins to dial. He holds the receiver to his + ear - silence. Welp, that's that. + He puts it back on the wall.

- The terminal screen reaches full brightness as Jack feeds the paper into - the printer. He makes sure the holes on the feed ribbons line up with the - mechanism, then he turns back to the terminal and begins to type. + I wonder what happened over the years... + He walks over to the the teleprinter and opens the lid to find that + something has eaten most of the paper. He removes the remains and opens + one of the cabinets under the desks. By some miracle, whatever ate the + paper didn't find the rest. He tears off a piece of the stack and + puts it into the printer, feeding the end into the tractor mechanism. + Then, he sits down at the terminal and logs on. + This should be rephrased to indicate that there + is some purpose to him opening the lid in the first place, like him + wanting to change the ribbon bc it's no doubt deteriorated or something + like that. 

-  Tue, 2106-06-01, 15:21
+Tue, 2106-06-01, 15:21
 
-  EARTH-53 Login: jack
-  Password:
+EARTH-53 Login: jack
+Password:
 
-  Welcome to INUX!
+Welcome to INUX!
 
-  $ ls
-  $ pwd
-  /home/jack
-  $ cd /var/log
-  $ ls -F
-  cron/ outpost/ dmesg.log wtmp
-  $ cd outpost
-  $ ls -F
-  comms comms_diag/ event logbook
-  $ cat logbook > /dev/ttyS1
-  $ █
+$ █

- The printer comes to life and starts printing. + Over a hundred years, huh...
+ He types a few commands. +

+
+$ ls
+$ pwd
+/home/jack
+$ cd /var/log
+$ ls
+cron outpost dmesg.log wtmp
+$ cd outpost
+$ ls
+comms comms_diag event logbook
+$ cat logbook > /dev/ttyS1
+$ █
+
+

+ The printer comes to life and starts printing. Jack gets up and walks + over to it. The printer prints. And it prints some more. The paper + reaches the floor. Jack picks up the end and holds it, folding the pages + along the perforated lines as they reach his hands. Finally, the printer + stops to print. Jack turns the wheel on the side of the printer, manually + advancing the feed mechanism, until he reaches the end of the page. Then, + he tears it off and takes the small stack of paper back to the terminal + desk. Trying his luck with the lamp again, he flips the switch multiple + times until it stays on. 

 2000-01-01 Automated Announcement: