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'va' Alone: minor revision 

- air bottle → oxygen bottle
- fixed the spelling of airlock (used to have 'air lock' in some places)
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Emily returns inside and goes to a room with a view of the sky Emily returns inside and goes to a room with a view of the sky
<ul> <ul>
<li class="comment"> <li class="comment">
following any procedures such as operating the air lock as following any procedures such as operating the airlock as
robot-like as possible robot-like as possible
</li> </li>
<li class="comment"> <li class="comment">
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Emily and Lena start putting on their space suits. Emily is done Emily and Lena start putting on their space suits. Emily is done
relatively quickly while Lena makes slow progress as she struggles to relatively quickly while Lena makes slow progress as she struggles to
keep her balance. Half-way through, she gives up, sitting down on the keep her balance. Half-way through, she gives up, sitting down on the
bench across from the air lock. Emily helps her all the way into the bench next to the airlock. Emily helps her all the way into the
suit. Lena sits there for a moment, heavily breathing, while Emily waits. suit. Lena sits there for a moment, heavily breathing, while Emily waits.
<br /> <br />
<span class="quote speech">Sorry, I can&apos;t... I feel exhausted.</span> <span class="quote speech">Sorry, I can&apos;t... I feel exhausted.</span>
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Emily takes their helmets and brings them into the airlock. She returns Emily takes their helmets and brings them into the airlock. She returns
for a life support unit, pulls it out of the rack in the wall, and sets for a life support unit, pulls it out of the rack in the wall, and sets
it down on the floor. Following a mental checklist, she makes sure that it down on the floor. Following a mental checklist, she makes sure that
the air bottle is connected properly and the gauges read what they the oxygen bottle is connected properly and the gauges read what they
should. Everything okay... or is it? She double-checks with the check should. Everything okay... or is it? She double-checks with the check
list on the wall. Yes, this unit is ready. She triple-checks everything list on the wall. Yes, this unit is ready. She triple-checks everything
&ndash; first time it actually matters. Reasonably satisfied with her &ndash; first time it actually matters. Reasonably satisfied with her
findings, she carries it over to the air lock. Then, she repeats this findings, she carries it over to the airlock. Then, she repeats this
procedure for the second unit. Finally, she helps Lena up and they get procedure for the second unit. Finally, she helps Lena up and they get
into the airlock. into the airlock.
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<p> <p>
The conversation is interrupted by the beeping of Lena&apos;s low oxygen The conversation is interrupted by the beeping of Lena&apos;s low oxygen
alarm going off. Emily gets up and walks back to the habitat. She enters alarm going off. Emily gets up and walks back to the habitat. She enters
through the airlock and looks for a full air bottle. She lifts one through the airlock and looks for a full oxygen bottle. She lifts one
out of its rack and carries it back to Lena. She opens the life support out of its rack and carries it back to Lena. She opens the life support
unit and closes the valves on it and the empty bottle, then she replaces unit and closes the valves on it and the empty bottle, then she replaces
it and opens the valves again. Just as she is done with that, her own it and opens the valves again. Just as she is done with that, her own
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<p> <p>
Her oxygen alarm goes off. Absentmindedly, she gets up and returns to Her oxygen alarm goes off. Absentmindedly, she gets up and returns to
the habitat. She opens the air lock, enters, closes the outside, and the habitat. She opens the airlock, enters, closes the outside, and
enters the inside. As she is putting away her suit, she realizes that enters the inside. As she is putting away her suit, she realizes that
she had been following the procedures from muscle memory without even she had been following the procedures from muscle memory without even
thinking about them. She walks to the <span class="comment">???</span> thinking about them. She walks to the <span class="comment">???</span>