From 5a71ef30cca53c115eefaba4726af3c589419924 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Thu, 28 Aug 2025 17:54:43 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] 'ma' Escape: revision of the automated announcements on the
 train

I wrote German versions of the announcements (look at the code if you wanna
see them) and had a back and forth with ChatGPT to improve the English ones.

Note: I am not using ChatGPT to write or even help me write. But it works
great to figure out language intuition and vocabulary because English isn't
my native language.
---
 ma-Escape-from_dome_city.html | 25 +++++++++++++++++++------
 1 file changed, 19 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)

diff --git a/ma-Escape-from_dome_city.html b/ma-Escape-from_dome_city.html
index bb09f1a..2724b31 100644
--- a/ma-Escape-from_dome_city.html
+++ b/ma-Escape-from_dome_city.html
@@ -156,10 +156,15 @@
   might take a while to get used to the sunlight.</span><br />
   The train begins to move up a slight incline. An automated announcement
   comes on:<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Dear passengers, welcome to the combined
-  Sentinel&nbsp;Shores and Ivydale local transit zone! Please keep in mind
-  that the last train returning to Sunside Cove for today
-  departs from Ivydale&nbsp;South at 10:15PM. Enjoy your travel!</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Welcome to the combined Sentinel&nbsp;Shores
+  and Ivydale regional transit zone! Please note: the last train back to
+  Sunside Cove departs from Ivydale&nbsp;South at 8:15PM.
+  We wish you a pleasant journey.</span>
+  <!--
+  Herzlich willkommen im Verkehrsverbund Sentinel Shores und Efeuthal!
+  Bitte beachten Sie: Der letzte Zug zurück nach Sunside Cove fährt
+  um 20:15 Uhr. Wir wünschen Ihnen eine gute Reise.
+  -->
 </p>
 <p>
   The train leans into a curve; Annie hears the screeching of the wheels
@@ -186,9 +191,17 @@
   <span class="quote speech">We are now approaching Ivydale South. Your
   next connections are Metro line 7 to Ivydale Distillery from platform 5,
   HST1511 to Siren&apos;s Edge from platform 14, HST815 to Nova Metropolis
-  from platform 11. This train will continue on line 5 to
-  Sentinel&nbsp;Shores Sea&nbsp;Market via Ivydale&nbsp;West,
+  from platform 11. This train terminates here and will continue as line 5
+  to Sentinel&nbsp;Shores Sea&nbsp;Market via Ivydale&nbsp;West,
   Sentinel&nbsp;Shores Central Station.</span><br />
+  <!--
+  Wir erreichen in Kürze: Efeuthal Südbahnhof. Ihre nächsten Anschlüsse:
+  S7 nach Efeuthal Brauereiviertel von Bahnsteig 5, HST1511 nach
+  Siren's Edge von Bahnsteig 14, HST815 nach Nova Metropolis
+  von Bahnsteig 11. Dieser Zug endet hier und fährt weiter als S5 nach
+  Sentinel Shores Fischermarkt über Efeuthal Westkreuz,
+  Sentinel Shores Hauptbahnhof. Ausstieg in Fahrtrichtung rechts.
+  -->
   After a moment, Jack says quietly:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I wonder how much of these places is
   left...</span> Raising his voice back to a normal level, he adds: