diff --git a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html index 6908921..5b41304 100644 --- a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html +++ b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html @@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ door properly... Doesn't matter, too late now.
- As he passes each of the presevation chambers, he looks into them. Empty, + As he passes each of the preservation chambers, he looks into them. Empty, empty, empty - nothing unexpected here. The others would have been woken up over time. His own chamber... He presses a few buttons to fully shut it down. The lamp in the ceiling turns off, the door closes, the status diff --git a/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html b/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html index 21be3f3..7040674 100644 --- a/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html +++ b/02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html @@ -126,13 +126,12 @@ Thank you. Appreciate it. are arranged in a strange order... Annie looks around. Lots of cables, a pile of paper, an empty cup, some pens and pencils, a screwdriver and other tools, a rubber duck – what an odd place to find a rubber - duck... A phone! She picks it up – no signal. - Freizeichen? Weird. Maybe, it isn't connected. She looks on - the floor and, sure enough, there is the plug – not for much - longer as she finds a phone socket and plugs it in. Strange electrical - noises. She tries to dial a number but nothing happens. She drops the - receiver on the cradle and turns back to the terminal. A couple random - characters appear. + duck... A phone! She picks it up – no dial tone. Weird. Maybe, it + isn't connected. She looks on the floor and, sure enough, there is + the plug – not for much longer as she finds a phone socket and + plugs it in. Strange electrical noises. She tries to dial a number but + nothing happens. She drops the receiver on the cradle and turns back to + the terminal. A couple random characters appear.
%s; i cant call anyone the phone is only making weird noises @@ -163,7 +162,7 @@ AgriWorks Login: █Annie is greeted by the friendly voice of an old man. After a short exchange of "Hello, how are - you?", she begins explain the situation. He interrupts her + you?", she begins to explain the situation. He interrupts her while relaying what Jack had written:
Cryo Facility? Are you sure?
Yes, it says here: Cryo Facility 53.
@@ -353,10 +352,10 @@ AgriWorks Login: █Annie reaches the corner. She looks left and right before crossing the street but not a single car is in sight. As she enters the station and - walks up the stairs, she glances at the display - 21 minutes until the + walks up the stairs, she glances at the display – 21 minutes until the next train arrives, that's a long wait... The station is completely devoid of life, nobody else is out here this late. Annie walks up to the - vending machine at the upper end of the staircase - + vending machine at the upper end of the staircase – OUT OF ORDER... Hrm. Mildly frustrated, she sits down on one of the benches and and starts rummaging in her bag. She finds her headphones and puts them on. At the diff --git a/05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html b/05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html index 36e717e..584d080 100644 --- a/05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html +++ b/05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html @@ -167,7 +167,7 @@ you're here, we were about to discuss the call we had yesterday.
He introduces Annie and the othe group members and everyone sits down - at the table. Karl ergreift das Wort: + at the table. Then, addressing Annie, he begins to speak:TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting @@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ He reaches into his pocket and pulls out a key chain.
If you want, you can try getting it - I can't because I disappeared from a birthday party with an excuse - and they are probably waiting for me to be back.
+ and they're waiting for me to be back.
He places the keys in the center of the table.
Karl says: I would love to, but I'm afraid I can't run if things go south.
diff --git a/06-Library_At_Night.html b/06-Library_At_Night.html index 598ea3e..06ca48d 100644 --- a/06-Library_At_Night.html +++ b/06-Library_At_Night.html @@ -85,8 +85,8 @@ Maybe this one? She points at a key switch with multiple positions.
Only one way to find out.
- Isabelle grabs the keys and hands them to her. One of them fits and - turns. + Isabelle grabs the keys and tries them one by one until one of them fits + and turns.Fans come on; they hear the loud noise of air rushing through the @@ -108,7 +108,12 @@ and to enter something into the terminal. And then there's a list of hints and commands that might help us, and Good luck!...
+
- Isabelle pushes the buttons and they walk over to the terminal. + Isabelle pushes the buttons and Annie walks over to the terminal. ++ missing section, probably a <pre class="terminal"> + where Annie, following the steps, enters a few hex codes followed by + "hd2,vminux"
After a lot of typing into the terminal and figuring things out the hard @@ -139,10 +144,9 @@ struggles for a moment to get onto the crate. After she finally manages to get up, Isabelle pulls her through the window - not a moment too soon.
- You, stop!, - rephrase!! a man yells at them from inside, - Stay where you are!
- They start running.
+ Stop! Stay where you are!, a man yells + at them from inside.
+ They start running.
I'm gonna catch you.@@ -150,17 +154,19 @@ ledge on the side of a building, helping Annie up after herself. They continue running on the ledge until reaching a wall at the end of the alley. Isabelle jumps, grabs hold of the railing at the top, pulls - herself up, and climbs over it.
- Wait here. She disappears.
- Annie looks around nervously. What if she was caught now?
+ herself up, and climbs over it.
+ Wait here.
+ She disappears. Annie looks around nervously. What if she was caught now? +
A moment later, Isabelle returns with a ladder. Annie climbs up and pulls it up after herself. Isabelle takes it and stashes it on the other side of the embankment. They find themselves on the metro tracks. Annie looks around nervously.
We need to get off of here.
- It's fine, we'll hear any approaching - train long before we see it. Isabelle points towards a close by - station and says Central Square.
+ It's fine, we'll hear any train + long before we see it. Isabelle points towards a close-by + station and says Central Square. +
They run towards it along the tracks. Just as they make their way onto the platform, the rails start ringing.
Isabelle says with a smirk on her face: diff --git a/ja-erosion-michelle_wakeup.html b/ja-erosion-michelle_wakeup.html index d359722..48c9935 100644 --- a/ja-erosion-michelle_wakeup.html +++ b/ja-erosion-michelle_wakeup.html @@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ potatoes. Want some?
Now that you ask, I'm slowly getting hungry. Did you make your usual spicy dip?
- Yup.
+ Well, as best I could...
He gets up and walks over to the kitchen area, grabs a small bowl filled with a dark red-ish paste, and sets it on the table.
I had to improvise a little due to @@ -91,8 +91,9 @@ The flakes they left us just aren't the same as fresh peppers. I had to add a lot to get even close to the usual spiciness.
- He grabs the Backblech? with potatoes - and puts it back in the oven to re-heat. + + He grabs the baking sheet with potatoes and puts it back in the oven to + re-heat.After the meal, they go to the bunker entrance and Jack opens the door @@ -109,8 +110,7 @@ The two decide to walk up to a crest? ridge? not far from them on the other side of the valley. Beyond it is Ivydale, once a large city housing just over a million people – only one of - who? whom? which? remains to behold its - overgrown ruins. + whom remains to behold its overgrown ruins.
Jack is from Sentinel Shores.
Michelle says: I mean I knew it already but @@ -123,12 +123,13 @@ After a long while, she says: Okay, let's go take a look at that uplink.
The two get up and walk back towards the bunker, looking for a path - somewhere to the left of it.
- Jack points to a structure a decent bit up the mountain and says: - I think that's it.
+ somewhere to the left of it. Jack points to a structure a decent bit up + the mountain.
+ He says: I think that's one of + the staircases.
Oh wow, there isn't much left.
- Jack points at a few other things below it.
+ Jack points at a few other things below it: I think these are also part of it.@@ -143,9 +144,9 @@ the uplink is down – it literally ...is down...
Michelle reaches the edge and and sees what Jack had stopped for: - A large wash? extends downwards - from the top of the mountain where a landslide had left nothing but - a cliff and a huge pile of rubble. At the top of the mountain, teetering + A landslide and the erosion afterwards had left a deep wash extending + downwards from the top of the mountain, leaving nothing but a cliff and + a huge pile of rubble. At the top of the mountain, teetering on the edge, are two buildings – all that's left of the ground station. The rest of the buildings and the dish lay strewn around in pieces down below. diff --git a/jc-night_watch.html b/jc-night_watch.html index 16ff0da..fd215ca 100644 --- a/jc-night_watch.html +++ b/jc-night_watch.html @@ -16,8 +16,7 @@ She runs back. Platform 6 is nowhere to be seen.- Someone grabs her by - the shoulder.
+ Someone grabs her by the shoulder.
Michelle?
She opens her eyes and lifts her head, looking around in confusion. It's dark. A tiny bit of flickering light illuminates the room @@ -93,5 +92,14 @@ for this wonderful dialog. :)
I'm not sure if I should keep it though, because this isn't gonna go anywhere. +Copyright © 2023-2025 Jan Danielzick (aka. BodgeMaster) – All rights reserved.