01 Wake Up: Revision, formatting

01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

@@ -3,9 +3,10 @@
 <h1> Wake Up! </h1>
 <!-- perspective: Jack -->
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">Awh fuck!</span> Jack exclaims in pain as he
+  <span class="quote speech">Awh fuck!</span><br />
-  wakes up. He has a terrible headache. While moving his hands up to hold
+  Jack exclaims in pain as he wakes up. He has a terrible headache.
-  his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.
+  While moving his hands up to hold his head, he realizes that his entire
+  body hurts.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Owowowww... Ouch!</span><br />
   An automated voice comes on: <span class="quote speech">Emergency
   defrost complete. Entering low power mode.</span><br />
@@ -29,19 +30,19 @@
   air, and looks around. The light shining out of his chamber reveals a
   dirty floor. The table and chairs in front of him as well as the kitchen
   area across the room are covered in dust and all exposed bits of metal
-  have rust. The paint is starting to flake off of the walls. Red night
+  are rusty. The paint is starting to flake off of the walls. Red night
   lights on the ceiling are dimly illuminating the rest of the bunker.
   He looks to the left: The wall is lined with other preservation chambers,
   all but one of them being powered down. In the corner is the minicomputer
   controlling the bunker, a half-height rack filled to the brim with
   devices, and next to it a teleprinter, a computer-controlled typewriter.
-  Along the rear wall are desks holding a radio and a terminal, a device
+  Along the rear wall are desks holding a radio and a terminal (a device
-  comprised of a keyboard and monitor, and on the wall above them is a
+  comprised of a keyboard and monitor), and on the wall above them is a
   phone; nothing out of the ordinary here &ndash; apart from a few paint
   crumbs sprinkled on everything. He looks to the right: More preservation
   chambers. Instead of a wall, there&apos;s the bunker door &ndash; door
   is a bit of an understatement, it&apos;s a massive gate. A small slither
-  of light passes under it.
+  of light passes under it.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">These fucking idiots... They didn&apos;t
   reseal it properly.</span>
 </p>
@@ -52,54 +53,55 @@
   banging on the panel later, he turns back to the inside of the bunker,
   looking for tools, contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple
   years too soon and getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked
-  inside a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes unable to close a
+  inside a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes being unable to
-  door properly... Doesn&apos;t matter, too late now.
+  close a door properly... Doesn&apos;t matter now, too late.
 </p>
 <p>
   As he passes each of the preservation chambers, he looks into them. Empty,
   empty, empty - nothing unexpected here. The others would have been woken
   up over time. His own chamber... He presses a few buttons to fully shut
-  it down. The lamp in the ceiling turns off, the door closes, the status
+  it down. The lamp in its ceiling turns off, the door closes, the status
   lights turn off. After passing two other empty preservaton chambers, he
   reaches the one that remains active.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Hello Michelle.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Hello Michelle</span>, he says more to himself
+  than to the frozen person inside.<br />
   He checks the status lights of her chamber.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I think I&apos;m gonna leave you in there
+  <span class="quote speech">Looks good to me &mdash; I think I&apos;m
-  until I find a way out of here &mdash; should be fine...</span><br />
+  gonna leave you in there until I find a way out...</span><br />
   He continues past the remaining empty chambers to the back of the bunker.
 </p>
 <p>
   Jack opens the cabinets under each of the desks while talking to himself:
-  <span class="quote speech">Where is that fucking toolbox?</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Where is that fucking toolbox?</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">Do we have an alternative expletive to use?</span>
   Well, it isn&apos;t there. He continues with the kitchen area. Still
   nothing. He enters the bathroom through a door next to the kitchen area.
-  Nope, not here either. <span class="quote speech">Welp, time to
+  Nope, not here either.<br />
-  improvise.</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Welp, time to improvise.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Jack returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers to find
+  Jack returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers
-  anything useful. He grabs a fork. <span class="quote speech">Works as a
+  to find anything useful. He grabs a fork.<br />
-  screwdriver, I guess...</span> He proceeds to jam the handle into a
+  <span class="quote speech">Works as a screwdriver, I guess...</span><br />
-  screw on one of the kitchen cabinets to see if it will turn. It does
+  He proceeds to jam the handle into a screw on one of the kitchen cabinets
-  &ndash; barely. Using a slightly rusty knife sharpener
+  to see if it will turn. It does &ndash; barely. Using a slightly rusty
-  <span class="comment">sharpening rod?</span> he begins the long and
+  sharpening rod he begins the long and arduous process of grinding the
-  arduous process of making the fork handle more suitable as a screwdriver,
+  fork handle flat, dragging it across the rod over and over and over
-  grinding the end over the sharpener over and over and over. After a
+  again. After a while, he stops to inspect his work.<br />
-  while, he stops to inspect his work. <span class="quote speech">Meh,
+  <span class="quote speech">Meh, could work.</span><br />
-  could work.</span> He tests it on the kitchen cabinet again.
+  He tests it on the cabinet again.
 </p>
 <p>
-  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, Jack walks back to the control panel
+  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, Jack walks back to the control
-  for the door and unscrews it. After a bit of fiddling, the panel lifts
+  panel for the door and unscrews it. After a bit of fiddling with it,
-  out of the niche in the wall, pulling cables out of the box under it.
+  the panel lifts out of its niche in the wall, pulling cables out of the
-  He grabs the fork by the handle and bends the <span class="comment">
+  box under it. He grabs the fork by the handle and bends the inner prongs
-  middle? inner?</span> prongs out of the way to bridge the control
+  out of the way. Then, he bridges the switch contacts using the two outer
-  panel&apos;s switches using the outer ones. Nothing happens.
+  prongs. Nothing happens.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Of course it wasn't gonna be that easy.</span>
+  <br />
   He starts to dig into the wires, attempting to find what&apos;s wrong,
   but realizes after a moment that the wiring is more complex than expected
-  and he has no idea what he&apos;s doing.
+  and he has no idea what he&apos;s doing.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Guess I need the manual for this
   thing...</span>
 </p>
@@ -110,51 +112,65 @@
   Bonk! At least this seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to
   warm up, he walks over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front
   of it. He inspects the status lights on the various devices, thinking
-  aloud: <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle,
+  aloud:<br />
-  one active cryogenic chamber, primary hard drive is spinning &ndash;
+  <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle, one active
-  all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let&apos;s change
+  preservation chamber &ndash; all good. Primary hard drive is up, second
-  that...</span> He pushes the power button and hears the fans blow air
+  hard drive is ... powered off? Let&apos;s change that...</span><br />
-  through the drive. The spin-up button starts blinking. He waits for a
+  He pushes the power button and hears the fans blow air through the drive.
-  moment to let the fans blow away any dust that may have settled inside
+  The spin-up button starts blinking. He waits for a moment to let the fans
-  the drive, then he pushes the button. The spindle motor kicks on. There
+  blow away any dust that may have settled inside the drive, then he pushes
-  is some intermittent rattling from the drive, probably a shot bearing.
+  it. The button lights up solid and the motor inside kicks on. There
-  He hears the platters inside accelerate unusually slowly. Impatiently
+  is some intermittent rattling from the drive,
-  sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be ready. Clicking from the
+  <span class="quote non-speech">probably a shot bearing</span>, he thinks.
-  mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a ringing scratching noise.
+  He hears the spindle inside accelerating unusually slowly. Impatiently
-  <span class="quote speech">Of course...</span> He quickly presses the
+  sitting there, he waits for the drive to be ready. Clicking from inside
-  power button again. The scratching stops and the spindle motor turns off,
+  the drive followed by a ringing scratching noise.<br />
-  the spindle still rattling occasionally as the platters spin down.
+  <span class="quote speech">Of course!</span><br />
+  He quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and
+  the motor turns off, the spindle still rattling occasionally as it spins
+  down.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s gonna be an ugly head crash.
   No manuals for me, I guess...</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  He gets up and returns to the terminal. Maybe, there is a backup copy or
+  He gets up and returns to the terminal, thinking there might be
-  anything useful on the primary hard drive. He sits down in front of it
+  something useful, maybe even a backup, on the primary drive.
-  and logs on.
+  He pulls a nearby chair in front of it and sits down.
 </p>
 <pre class="terminal">
-Tue, 2106-06-01, 18:01
+EARTH-53 INUX v8.4 SMP
 
-EARTH-53 Login: jack
+Login: &#9608;
+</pre>
+<p>
+  Jack logs on and issues a command:
+</p>
+<pre class="terminal">
+EARTH-53 INUX v8.4 SMP
+
+Login: jack
 Password:
 
 Welcome to INUX!
+Last login Wed, 1994-07-20 11:34:08
 
+$ date
+Tue, 2106-06-01 18:01:55
 $ &#9608;
 </pre>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">So it&apos;s been over a hundred years.
+  <span class="quote speech">So it&apos;s been over a hundred years...
-  Hm...</span><br />
+  Hm.</span><br />
-  He goes through the files but to no avail, no backup turns up. Nothing
+  He goes through the files but nothing useful turns up. He does, however,
-  useful either. He does, however, find a note from 2030 saying that the
+  find a note from 2030 saying that the inhabitants of the dome city
-  inhabitants of Sunside&nbsp;Cove have proven to be unhelpful when asked
+  have proven to be unhelpful when asked for assistance. Too bad they are
-  for assistance. Too bad they are the ones that have a backup of the
+  the ones that have a full backup of everything &ndash; assuming there is
-  secondary hard drive &ndash; assuming there is anyone still living there.
+  anyone still living there.
 </p>
 <p>
   He gets up and reaches for the phone. It lifts off the cradle with a
   quiet click. Jack holds it to his ear and starts dialing but there is no
-  dial tone.
+  dial tone.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Welp, that&apos;s that.</span>
 </p>