diff --git a/ph-diesel_creek.html b/ph-diesel_creek.html index a2138a3..c687a33 100644 --- a/ph-diesel_creek.html +++ b/ph-diesel_creek.html @@ -8,59 +8,47 @@ The four are walking into a valley in a large forested area.
Jack replies: Right now, I'm not even sure this is the place – everything looks so different – but - if it is, we'll have plenty machines to choose from and a bunch - more for parts.
- James gestures to the side: - Look, over there.
- He points to a group of very rusty and completely overgrown machines. + if it is, we'll have plenty to choose from and a bunch more for + parts.
+ James takes a sudden step to the side and rips the ivy off a roughly + knee-high, square concrete post.
+ This of any use to you?
+ The post has numbers engraved in all four sides.
+ Jack reads two of them: 1581, 8480. Yup. This + is indeed the place. +

+

+ A bit further down the valley, they come across a large, rusty machine.
- Jack says: Oh yeah, so we are in the - right place.
- They walk towards them to take a closer look.
- Annie asks: How did these machines get between - the trees?
- Jack says: They didn't. This wasn't - a forest then. The machines came first, the trees grew after. -

-

- After a short look at the machines, Jack says: - Looks like these were already out of order - before they were abandoned. - He turns to Annie and James, and explains: + Annie wonders: How did this thing get + between the trees?
+ Jack says: Someone drove it here before + the they grew. There were large cleared areas and access roads through + the forest back then.
+ They walk up to it and take a look.
+ Jack turns to Annie and James, and says: This is an excavator. We're looking for - a big one like this, maybe a bit smaller, but not as small as that one - over there – and preferably without trees growing out of - it...
- He points to a mini excavator sitting askew on the trunk of a tree that - had grown through its floor and out the side.
- James asks: Why not just use this big one? - What's wrong with it?
+ a big one like this, but in better condition.
+ James asks: What's wrong with this + one?
This thing's just done for. It's - more rust than steel, missing its tracks and the hydraulics up there, - and it looks like someone got a bit carried away trying to remove the - cab.
- - They take a quick look at the other machines around them. Apart from the - two excavators, there is a dump truck, a what's - the name of that machine with a conveyor belt that sorts large rocks and - rubble from sand? - - , and two loaders. All of them - are rusted beyond repair and missing integral parts.
+ more rust than steel, missing its tracks, the hydraulics up there have + been removed, and it looks like someone got a bit carried away + trying to do the same with the cab.
+ Why'd they do that?
+ Todo: rephrase above question
+ Probably parted out to fix other + machines.
+ They continue walking.

- A bit further down the valley, they find a much larger assortment of - machines, parked in long rows and parted out just like the first ones - they saw.
+ After a while, they find themselves in a large, flattened area at the + bottom of the valley. It is full of machines standing between the trees, + forming long rows and parted out just like the excavator they saw.
Jack says: Welcome to the machine graveyard. If memory serves right, there should be a few buildings back there and one of the main parking lots behind them.
- While they make their way through between the machines, Annie asks:
+ While they make their way over, Annie asks: So these machines dug out the dome?
Well... no. That was mostly done using @@ -70,11 +58,10 @@

The buildings are in rough shape, some much worse than others. Most - don't have rooves, a few have been completely reduced to foundations - and piles of rubble. The four walk through a gap between them and find - themselves on the parking lot. Instead of a forest, they find it mostly - overgrown with bushes and young trees. They split up and start roaming - the area. + don't have rooves, a few have been completely reduced to piles of + rubble on a foundation. On the other side, as Jack had said, is a parking + lot. Instead of a forest, they find it mostly overgrown with bushes and + young trees. They split up and start roaming the area.

research that needs to be done:
@@ -94,21 +81,27 @@ rusty on the outside but looks otherwise surprisingly intact.
He says: That's ... uhhh ... kind of a historical artifact.
- James arrives as well, saying: I mean, - everything here is a historical artifact...
+ James, who is just arriving, hears it and says: + I mean, everything here is a historical + artifact...
Jack responds: Fair enough, but this thing especially so.
- They step into the building and take a closer look. Michelle climbs onto - the back of the machine and opens an access panel.
- Just about mint condition in here – - compared to the rest at least... Looks like might fire right up. - Anyone see a crank for this baby?
+ They step into the building.
+ Michelle says: Looks like it could just work + if we tried.
+ Jack says: I think we should look for a more + modern option first.
+ I agree we should look for something more + modern, but might as well take a free win.
+ She climbs onto the back of the machine and opens an access panel.
+ Just about mint condition in here. This thing + might fire right up. Anyone see a crank for this baby?
She pats the side of a small engine that sits on top of a much larger engine.

- They start looking around the place, in the rotting shelves and in the - rubble on the floor. Michelle jumps down and joins them. After a while, + They start looking around in the rotting shelves and in the rubble on + the floor. Michelle jumps down and joins them. After a while, Jack spots some rust right behind the rear end of the machine. He moves some leaves aside and picks up a metal rod with two bends.
You mean this one?
@@ -122,7 +115,7 @@ She unscrews the cap from the small fuel tank on top of it and peeks inside.
Well that can't work.
- She jumps off and checks the tank for the main engine.
+ She jumps down and checks the tank for the main engine.
Nope.