From 76a47b1177e14139c57daa1228a827257febeee8 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Wed, 15 Nov 2023 08:50:54 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] 'ka' (finding the train): revision --- ka--finding_the_train.html | 61 +++++++++++++++++++++----------------- 1 file changed, 33 insertions(+), 28 deletions(-) diff --git a/ka--finding_the_train.html b/ka--finding_the_train.html index b3bd977..ef53441 100644 --- a/ka--finding_the_train.html +++ b/ka--finding_the_train.html @@ -10,15 +10,14 @@ track.
Where are you?
Up here.
- Jack had climbed onto the rather sketchy-looking roof of one of the - trains. Michelle climbs onto the link between cars and Jack helps her to - the top.
- Look, - Over there...
+ Jack is standing on the rather sketchy-looking roof of one of the + trains. Michelle climbs onto the link between cars and Jack helps her + to the top.
+ Look, over there...
He points across the deteriorating metro trains towards the outermost track of the overgrown train yard. A small roof - or in places what remains of it - extends over the track from the side of a large building. - Under the roof are several tank cars. Some are rusted through or missing + Several tank cars sit under it. Some are rusted through or missing parts, but a few look like they might still hold liquids.
Oh, wow! Maybe there's some gas left in there or something...
@@ -26,26 +25,27 @@

They climb back down and make their way over to one of the tank cars. - They climb onto the side of the car and Jack attempts to use the ladder - that leads to the top. It crumbles under his feet.
- I guess I found the way down - hey, use me as a - ladder.
- He leans against the car and helps her onto the tank. - something missing? Idk - Michelle inspects the lid.
+ Jack clmbs onto the side of the car and attempts to use the ladder + leading to the top. It crumbles under his feet. + I guess I found the way down - hey, use me as + a ladder. He leans against the tank and helps her up on top of it. +

+

+ Michelle inspects the lid. It's held on with large nuts.
Do we have a wrench or something?
Jack looks around.
I don't know. Lemme take a look inside there...
- He disappears through where used to be a door. After a moment, he - reappears, triumphantly holding a large adjustable wrench.
+ He disappears through an opening in the wall where used to be a door. + After a moment, he reappears, triumphantly holding a large adjustable + wrench.
It's a bit rusty but should do the job.
I'm afraid to see what you call very rusty.
This thing, for example.
- He knocks it against the ladder on the side of the tank causing more - pieces to break off. Then, he hands the wrench to her. After a bit of + He knocks it against the side of the tank causing more pieces of the + ladder to break off. Then, he hands the wrench to her. After a bit of fiddling, she manages to get a good grip on one of the nuts holding the lid in place - it doesn't budge.
Need a hammer or something?
@@ -54,8 +54,9 @@ Jack picks up a section of metal pipe and passes it to her. Putting it over the wrench for additional leverage, she pushes against it until the bolt snaps with a bang.
- Well that's one way for that to come - off. + That's certainly one of the ways to undo + a nut.
+ She moves on to the next one.

missing section: Michelle opens the lid and finds some disappointing @@ -83,7 +84,7 @@ A few rows of large industrial shelves on the other side of the hall hold partially rotting crates. On either side of the area with the shelves are spacious areas with machine tools, small cranes, and other - machinery. A few plants grow here and there. A single train tack goes + machinery. A few plants grow here and there. A single train track goes through the center of the hall with additional tracks for a gantry crane to either side of it. At the end of the hall to the right, below the rusty crane, sits a train wrapped up in tarps. @@ -91,15 +92,19 @@

Stupid idea indeed, she says while walking towards it. Then, she corrects herself: - Actually, it might not be that stupid. It - should have a generator that we can use.
- That is if we can get it to a location where - it would be useful.
- Is there a railroad close to the bunker? -
+ Actually, it might be useful. That's one + of the diesel-electric ones, right?
+ Oh, I thought we drink the diesel and push + this thing around for fun. He grins.
+ Okay, so can we use its generator?
+ Maybe, if we can get it to a location where + it's useful.
+ There is no railroad close to the + bunker?
Not that I know of, the closest would be somewhere around Ivydale South.
- Okay, not very useful. Let's go find a - truck then. + Okay, not very useful. That wasn't very + well planned, Mr infrastructure guy.
+ Let's go find a truck.

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