'km' Unhappy Engine Noises: revison

km-unhappy_engine_noises.html

@@ -37,36 +37,36 @@ going with this so I'll just leave it in here, commented out.
   Michelle pokes her head out from underneath the train.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I think that&apos;s it.</span><br/>
   She puts a large piece of leftover hose aside and crawls out.<br >
-  <span class="quote speech">That was quick &ndash; nice work.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">That was quick &ndash; nice job.</span><br />
   Jack walks over to the compartment holding the batteries, takes the
   cables off the terminals, and hooks them up to his makeshift power
   supply. Then, he starts the generator and climbs into the train.
   Michelle follows him and they go to the driver&apos;s cabin. Jack turns
-  the key switch and parts of the dashboard light up. Then, he pushes the
+  a key switch and parts of the dashboard light up. Then, he pushes the
   engine start button. While holding it, he points to the fuel pressure
-  gauge and, raising his voice to talk over the noise, he says:<br />
+  gauge and, slightly raising his voice to talk over the noise of the
+  engine turning over, he says:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s progress already.</span><br />
-  The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right as the engine turns
+  The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right.<br />
-  over.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Too slow though</span>, he adds after a
   moment.<br />
   He holds the button for a while, the engine keeps turning over,
-  but it doesn&apos;t start.
+  but it doesn&apos;t seem to fire even once.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Michelle suggests they take a look at the carburetor. Jack turns the key
+  Michelle suggests they take a look at the fuel injection. Jack turns
-  switch off again and they go to the middle of the railcar. The floor
+  the key switch off again and they go to the middle of the railcar.
-  panels above the engine bay are already missing, they had removed them
+  The floor panels above the engine bay are already missing, they had
-  earlier to replace the bits of rotting hose in the fuel line. Jack grabs
+  removed them earlier to replace the bits of rotting hose in the fuel
-  the manual from one of the seats and starts flipping through the pages
+  line. Jack grabs the manual from one of the seats and starts flipping
-  while Michelle jumps out and stops the generator. He begins to undo the
+  through the pages while Michelle jumps out and stops the generator.
-  bolts holding the case of the carburetor together. The gasket crumbles
+  He begins to undo <span class="comment">knowledge gap here: How
-  as he removes the top of the case.
+  does that work? What do you undo to fix a gunked-up fuel injection?
-  <span class="comment">Hey car people, how&apos;d you describe this?</span>
+  Also, do/did diesel engines have a carb?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  After cleaning the carburetor and replacing the gasket with a makeshift
+  After <span class="comment">cleaning out gunk and doing some makeshift
-  one made from <span class="comment">what?</span>, they try again.
+  fix</span>, they try again.
   The engine attempts to start a few times but it still doesn&apos;t run.
   Michelle notices the fuel pressure is back down to zero so they pull
   the line out to see what&apos;s going on. Michelle waits next to
@@ -78,15 +78,15 @@ going with this so I'll just leave it in here, commented out.
   He presses the button for a few seconds, then he leans out of the window
   looking at Michelle and the bucket. She looks up at him and says:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Barely a few drips. But there&apos;s pressure
-  back here.</span><br />
+  on the other side of the fuel filter.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">So we need a new filter?</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">So we need a new one?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   He walks over to the closest door and jumps out. Michelle begins
-  undoing the <span class="comment">clamps?</span> holding the fuel line
+  undoing the clamps holding the fuel line to the filter while Jack
-  to the filter while Jack starts searching all drawers and boxes in the
+  starts searching all drawers and boxes in the vicinity for a
-  vicinity for a replacement. One side of the filter comes loose and
+  replacement. One side of the filter comes loose and Michelle starts
-  Michelle starts with the other side.
+  with the other side.
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Not the right one but I found this.</span>