'km' Unhappy Engine Noises: revison

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@@ -37,36 +37,36 @@ going with this so I'll just leave it in here, commented out.
   Michelle pokes her head out from underneath the train.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I think that&apos;s it.</span><br/>
   She puts a large piece of leftover hose aside and crawls out.<br >
-  <span class="quote speech">That was quick &ndash; nice work.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">That was quick &ndash; nice job.</span><br />
   Jack walks over to the compartment holding the batteries, takes the
   cables off the terminals, and hooks them up to his makeshift power
   supply. Then, he starts the generator and climbs into the train.
   Michelle follows him and they go to the driver&apos;s cabin. Jack turns
-  the key switch and parts of the dashboard light up. Then, he pushes the
+  a key switch and parts of the dashboard light up. Then, he pushes the
   engine start button. While holding it, he points to the fuel pressure
-  gauge and, raising his voice to talk over the noise, he says:<br />
+  gauge and, slightly raising his voice to talk over the noise of the
+  engine turning over, he says:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s progress already.</span><br />
-  The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right as the engine turns
-  over.<br />
+  The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Too slow though</span>, he adds after a
   moment.<br />
   He holds the button for a while, the engine keeps turning over,
-  but it doesn&apos;t start.
+  but it doesn&apos;t seem to fire even once.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Michelle suggests they take a look at the carburetor. Jack turns the key
-  switch off again and they go to the middle of the railcar. The floor
-  panels above the engine bay are already missing, they had removed them
-  earlier to replace the bits of rotting hose in the fuel line. Jack grabs
-  the manual from one of the seats and starts flipping through the pages
-  while Michelle jumps out and stops the generator. He begins to undo the
-  bolts holding the case of the carburetor together. The gasket crumbles
-  as he removes the top of the case.
-  <span class="comment">Hey car people, how&apos;d you describe this?</span>
+  Michelle suggests they take a look at the fuel injection. Jack turns
+  the key switch off again and they go to the middle of the railcar.
+  The floor panels above the engine bay are already missing, they had
+  removed them earlier to replace the bits of rotting hose in the fuel
+  line. Jack grabs the manual from one of the seats and starts flipping
+  through the pages while Michelle jumps out and stops the generator.
+  He begins to undo <span class="comment">knowledge gap here: How
+  does that work? What do you undo to fix a gunked-up fuel injection?
+  Also, do/did diesel engines have a carb?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  After cleaning the carburetor and replacing the gasket with a makeshift
-  one made from <span class="comment">what?</span>, they try again.
+  After <span class="comment">cleaning out gunk and doing some makeshift
+  fix</span>, they try again.
   The engine attempts to start a few times but it still doesn&apos;t run.
   Michelle notices the fuel pressure is back down to zero so they pull
   the line out to see what&apos;s going on. Michelle waits next to
@@ -78,15 +78,15 @@ going with this so I'll just leave it in here, commented out.
   He presses the button for a few seconds, then he leans out of the window
   looking at Michelle and the bucket. She looks up at him and says:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Barely a few drips. But there&apos;s pressure
-  back here.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">So we need a new filter?</span>
+  on the other side of the fuel filter.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">So we need a new one?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   He walks over to the closest door and jumps out. Michelle begins
-  undoing the <span class="comment">clamps?</span> holding the fuel line
-  to the filter while Jack starts searching all drawers and boxes in the
-  vicinity for a replacement. One side of the filter comes loose and
-  Michelle starts with the other side.
+  undoing the clamps holding the fuel line to the filter while Jack
+  starts searching all drawers and boxes in the vicinity for a
+  replacement. One side of the filter comes loose and Michelle starts
+  with the other side.
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Not the right one but I found this.</span>