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-For some reason, I am thinking about what happens after the end of the story. So uhh... Here we go, I guess:
+For some reason, I am thinking about what happens after the end of the story.
+So uhh... Here we go, I guess:
 
-Emily wakes up. She's laying in bed, looking out of the panorama window - what an odd déjà-vu in a world that is so different.
-Annie and Michelle are sitting on the floor playing cards. <description of a part of Nova Metropolis that has been damaged by the impact>
+Emily wakes up. She's laying in bed, looking out of the panorama window -
+what an odd déjà-vu in a world that is so different.
+Annie and Michelle are sitting on the floor playing cards.
+<description of a part of Nova Metropolis that has been damaged by the impact>
 Michelle nods towards her, Annie turns around.
-"Good morning. How was your night?"
+"Hey, good morning. How was your night?"
 "Awful. Everything is so heavy."
-She pushes herself up and looks around.
+Emily pushes herself up and looks around.
 "Where are the others?"
+Annie turns back to the window and points outside.
 Michelle grabs a radio and talks into it:
-"Jack, she's awake."
-Annie leans back to look out of the window. Emily looks in the same direction and momentarily sees the glint of a mirroring object being held
-into the sunlight from one of the other buildings.
+"Jack, where are you? She's awake."
+They momentarily see the glint of a mirror being held into the sunlight from
+half-way up a sky scraper on the other side of the crater.
 "What are thy doing over there?"
 Annie shakes her head.
-"I forgot to turn my radio off yesterday. Cue Jack waking me up just before dawn - he supposedly heard someone talking."
+"I forgot to turn my radio off yesterday. Cue Jack waking us up just before
+dawn - he heard people talking. They're taking the big radio up to that antenna
+over there."