From 91fddc2b467c34342699b0ef4c8902944bbbc199 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Tue, 7 Nov 2023 07:45:10 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] 'qa' Overdue Maintenance: reordering some events --- qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html | 92 ++++++++++++----------- 1 file changed, 50 insertions(+), 42 deletions(-) diff --git a/qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html b/qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html index 76b0bcc..7e946a2 100644 --- a/qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html +++ b/qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html @@ -5,38 +5,56 @@ Roaring water echoes from somewhere deep below. Annie grabs her bag and goes ahead. The tunnel wall to the right features doors, large gates, and windows that allow a peek into abandoned offices, storage spaces, and - control rooms. The end of the tunnel connects to a balcony with rusty - walkways connecting to either side, extending into a narrow ravine. - She steps onto it, making sure to keep her distance to the railing, and - looks around. The walkway to the right connects to the top of a dam - blocking the ravine. A couple bushes, purple flowers, and a small tree - grow on top of it and the wall is partially green from moss. Water flows - over the spillway, falling into the depths below where it joins a torrent - of water coming from two big pipes at the bottom of the ravine. + control rooms. The end of the tunnel connects to a balcony with rusted + metal walkways going to either side, extending into a narrow ravine. + She steps onto it, making sure to keep her distance to the rusty railing, + and looks around. The walkway to the right connects to the top of a dam + blocking the ravine. A couple bushes, flowers, and a small tree grow + there, partially concealing the rusty armatures? + and the wall is green from moss and small ferns. Water flows + over the spillway, falling into the depths below where it joins a + torrent of water rushing out of two big pipes at the bottom of the + ravine. The other walkway leads to a freestanding staircase going all + the way down.

- She turns around to see Jack getting a toolbox from the truck bed and - James and Michelle waiting next to a door, holding a large box full of - random spare parts. She hurries over to them and opens it by pulling a - loop of wire through the latch. + Jack walks up next to her, grabbing hold of the railing, trying to + shake it but it doesn't budge.
+ Looks like it's gonna hold.
+ He turns to the right and steps onto the walkway before having an idea. + He turns to Annie and Michelle:
+ Ladies first.
+ While Annie is still thinking about a response, Michelle's response + is immediate:
+ Thanks but you can go ahead.
+ You two are lighter though. +

+

+ They walk to the dam, look into the windows +

+

+ Some events have changed, this needs to be tied together again.

+ Annie? Michelle calls + ? her. They are standing by one of the doors + in the tunnel wall. Jack pulls a wire through the latch and opens it. Inside is the main control room. The wall to the right is lined with - metal cabinets that have levers, buttons, dials, and large gauges on + metal cabinets that have levers, buttons, switches, and large gauges on them. The wall to the left features a front of windows, allowing a view - of the spillway and the top of the dam, below which is a random - collection of furniture, primarily desks and chairs. Some of the windows - have cracks but, by some miracle, none are broken. The center of the room - is taken up by a large console with more buttons, switches, and gauges - that is facing the windows and an opening in the floor covered by a thick - glass pane. + of the spillway and the top of the dam. Some of the windows have cracks + but somehow none are broken. In front of the windows is a collection of + random furniture, mostly desks and chairs. The center of the room is + taken up by a large console with more buttons, switches, and gauges that + is facing the windows and an opening in the floor covered by a thick + glass pane. They roam around the room for a moment. Annie looks outside, + admiring the flowering lilypads floating in the water that is held back + by the dam.

- They set down their things and roam around the room. Out of nowhere, - Michelle asks:
- Jack, what's the status on that dome city - you're building? You guys only have two years to finish that - project.
+ Michelle asks: Jack, what's the status + on that dome city you're building? You guys only have two years to + finish that project.
Oh no, I guess we're gonna have to slack less while waiting for bureaucracy to take its course.
Look, the power lines are gonna get hooked up @@ -52,12 +70,12 @@ Jack looks at a clipboard that was placed on the control panel on the center console.
The next maintenence expedition is scheduled - for 2011 – I don't think anyone ever stepped foot in here - after <dome city> was closed off.
+ for 2011... I don't think anyone ever stepped foot in here after + <dome city> was closed off.
It wouldn't surprise me. Annie - leans against the center console. Apart from a - small group, the entire city is legitimately scared of the outside - world.
+ turns around and leans against the center console. + Apart from a small group, the entire city is + legitimately scared of the outside world.
I mean they're probably right, the outside world is dangerous. Look down, by the way.
Whoa!
@@ -65,25 +83,15 @@ glass pane. It allows a view down into a hall filled with machinery.

- They look down into it. Water is pouring out of a burst pipe and from - the flanges between pipes.
+ They gather around it and look down. The floor is flooded by water + rushing out of a burst pipe and spraying out from the flanges of many + other pipe sections.
It's a miracle this place is still running.

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- Jack walks up to the rusty railing, grabbing it and trying to shake it - as hard as he can but it doesn't even rattle.
- Quality engineering.
- Using the walkway to the right, they get on top of the dam. - And now what? -

-

- The other walkway connects to a freestanding staircase leading all the - way down. -

Jack turns the key and the gate starts to move up, scrathcing and squeeking as it does, revealing a bunch of crates. About half-way