From 962b6f2a19228dc83ff6ba7484bbeff8ab0cc4bb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Mon, 9 Oct 2023 18:58:48 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] 03 A Simple Errand: language improvements

---
 03-A_Simple_Errand-Annie_library.html | 27 ++++++++++++++-------------
 1 file changed, 14 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-)

diff --git a/03-A_Simple_Errand-Annie_library.html b/03-A_Simple_Errand-Annie_library.html
index ca3948f..3346023 100644
--- a/03-A_Simple_Errand-Annie_library.html
+++ b/03-A_Simple_Errand-Annie_library.html
@@ -45,8 +45,8 @@
 <p>
   <span class="speech">Next stop: Central Square</span><br />
   Annie looks up. That&apos;s the station she has to get off at. She only
-  needs to be at work in the afternoon so she decided to get the manual for
-  Jack.
+  needs to be at work in the afternoon so she decided to get that manual
+  for Jack.
 </p>
 <p>
   The train comes to a halt in the station. Annie steps out onto the
@@ -61,12 +61,12 @@
 <p>
   Annie walks down the stairs and steps onto the square. It is brightly
   illuminated by a large glowing sphere made of yellow and brown glass
-  tiles suspended on steel cables hanging from four office complexes that
-  tower over the rest of the buildings. To the right is the library, a
-  large building with a facade of sandstone blocks. The front features
+  tiles, suspended on steel cables that hang from four office complexes
+  towering over the rest of the buildings. To the right is the library,
+  a large building with a facade of sandstone blocks. The front features
   large pillars and a staircase spanning the entire width of the building
-  making it look like an ancient temple. The wall behind the pillars has
-  multiple rows of windows revealing that the building has multiple stories.
+  giving it the look of an ancient temple. The wall behind the pillars has
+  multiple rows of windows.
 </p>
 <p>
   Annie makes her way up the stairs and enters through the large wooden
@@ -78,20 +78,21 @@
   <span class="speech">Uhm... Actually, no</span>, Annie replies as she
   takes her library card and a piece of paper out of her bag.<br />
   <span class="speech">I have a quite unusual request. I am looking
-  for</span> - she glances at the piece of paper - <span class="speech">a
-  manual for a B three three F Y dash A F bunker door.</span><br />
+  for</span> &ndash; she glances at the piece of paper &ndash;
+  <span class="speech">a manual for a B three three F Y dash A F bunker
+  door.</span><br />
   The guy types into his terminal for a moment. Annie places her library
   card on the counter. With a worried look, he turns back to her: <br />
-  <span class="speech">I&apos;m afraid, that information has recently been
+  <span class="speech">I&apos;m afraid, that it has recently been
   classified. There is a note about terrorism in here.</span><br />
   <span class="speech">So there is no way to get it?</span><br />
   He musters her for a second, then he takes the card and scribbles
   something on it before putting it back. <br />
   <span class="speech">I can check you against a list of people with
   security clearance. One moment, I&apos;ll get it.</span><br />
-  He gestures and nods towards the exit. Then, he turns around and walks
-  towards a door on the left, seemingly taking his sweet time. Annie gets
-  the message, grabs her library card and makes a swift exit. Just as she
+  He gestures towards the exit. Then, he turns around and walks towards a
+  door to the left, seemingly taking his sweet time. Annie gets the
+  message, grabs her library card and makes a swift exit. Just as she
   leaves, she hears him call out to someone else: <br />
   <span class="speech">Dorothy, she left. What do I put on the list?</span>
   <br />