From 9a5c06629f2b7ed8d9f1d85ae1eeefa7c0e981ee Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: BodgeMaster <>
Date: Thu, 28 Sep 2023 07:49:03 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] 'zb' (Reaching Nova Metropolis): Fix up what I created
 yesterday

Sometimes, I should really proofread what I write.
---
 zb--reaching_nova_metropolis.html | 26 ++++++++++++++------------
 1 file changed, 14 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-)

diff --git a/zb--reaching_nova_metropolis.html b/zb--reaching_nova_metropolis.html
index dec7f6a..301386c 100644
--- a/zb--reaching_nova_metropolis.html
+++ b/zb--reaching_nova_metropolis.html
@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
 </h1>
 <p>
   <span class="speech">Good morning, Annie! Pancakes are ready.</span><br />
-  Jack takes his hand off her shoulder. She <span class="comment">stützt
+  Jack takes his hand off her shoulder. She <span class="comment">st&uuml;tzt
   sich hoch</span> and looks around in confusion. James is driving the bus
   on a surprisingly very intact highway though a seemingly endless desert.
   <span class="comment">might benefit from a description of said desert
@@ -21,16 +21,16 @@
   <span class="speech">So when are we gonna reach the &lt;mining company&gt;
   pit?</span>, Michelle asks.<br />
   Jack looks at James. James tilts his head slightly and shrugs.<br />
-  <span class="speech">Like five hours ago?</span><br />
+  <span class="speech">Like two hours ago?</span><br />
   <span class="speech">You&apos;re kidding.</span><br />
-  <span class="speech">Didn&apos;t wanna wait you up.</span><br />
+  <span class="speech">Didn&apos;t wanna wake you up.</span><br />
   <span class="speech">Uhh...</span> Michelle is at a loss for words.<br />
   James grins.<br />
   <span class="speech">Don&apos;t worry, I won&apos;t drive from
   here.</span><br />
   <span class="speech">Can&apos;t even be mad... Wait, doesn&apos;t that
-  mean that we&apois;re way ahead of time?</span><br />
-  James shrugs again, this time holding up his hands. SHe turns to Jack:
+  mean that we&apos;re way ahead of time?</span><br />
+  James shrugs again, this time holding up his hands. She turns to Jack:
   <br />
   <span class="speech">How much ahead are we?</span><br />
   He glances at his watch.<br />
@@ -57,19 +57,21 @@
   taking a nap sounds very entising... <span class="comment">Is that how you
   spell that?</span></span><br />
   <span class="speech">Well, you&apos;ve ...</span> Michelle goes to turn
-  the key but nothing happens.<br />
-  <span class="speech"> Oh, that&apos;s been a problem. Can you open the
-  door for a sec?</span><br />
+  the key but nothing happens. She stops mid-sentence.<br />
+  James says: <span class="speech"> Oh, that&apos;s been a problem. Can you
+  open the door for a sec?</span><br />
+  <span class="speech">Sure</span>, she replies with a tone of bewilderment
+  in her voice.<br />
   James grabs a jumper cable and heads outside. They hear him opening some
   panel in the back of the bus followed by arcing noises. The engine begins
   to turn over. Michelle turns the key again. Finally, the engine starts
   running. James slams the panel shut and returns.<br />
   <span class="speech">As I was about to say: You&apos;ve definitely earned
-  that nap. Thanks for driving half of my portion.</span><br />
+  that nap. Thanks for driving part of my
+  <span class="comment">shift</span>.</span><br />
   <span class="speech">Still considering it...</span><br />
-  Michelle sets the bus in motion. The engine roars as it continues along
-  the <span class="comment">Idk what exactly to put here. Suggestions?
-  </span>
+  The engine roars as Michelle sets the bus in motion again.
+  <span class="comment">Something is missing here. Idk.</span>
 </p>
 
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