Start writing Lena’s death, also move things around for future-proofing

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 Outline:
 - Lena and Emily put on their space suits to go outside
  - (imply that Lena is about to die)
  - Lena double-checks that Emily can get back inside
  - Emily helps Lena with her helmet
  - something to the effet of Lena is leaving for one final time
 - they go to the grave of Lena’s SO
 - once there, they sit down on the ground
  - Emily helps Lena take her life support unit off her back
  - Lena sits down leaning against a rock, her life support unit next to her
  - "You were ultimately right" conversation
    - Lena has to tell Emily that she should get in touch with Jack using the downlink
 - Emily leaves and returns with new oxygen canisters
 - Lena dies
 - Emily returns inside and goes to the top level of the base
  - following any procedures such as operating the air lock as robot-like as possible
  - she lies down on the floor and looks out the window in the ceiling
  - she remains on the floor for an absurd amount of time
 - Jack uses the uplink to dial into the station
 Emily and Lena start putting on their space suits. Emily is done relatively quickly while Lena makes slow progress as she struggles to keep her balance. Half-way through, she gives up, sitting down on the bench across from the air lock. Emily helps her all the way into the suit. Lena sits there for a moment, heavily breathing, while Emily waits.  
 "Sorry, I can’t... I feel exhausted."
 Emily takes their helmets and brings them into the airlock. She returns for a life support unit, pulls it out of the rack in the wall, and sets it down on the floor. Following a mental checklist, she makes sure that the air tank is connected properly and the status display reads what it should. Everything okay... or is it? She double-checks with the check list on the wall. Yes, this unit is ready. She triple-checks everything - first time it actually matters. Reasonably satisfied with her findings, she carries it over to the air lock. Then, she repeats this procedure for the second unit. Finally, she helps Lena up and they get into the airlock.
 *time jump? if no, missing section of putting on helmets and life support systems*
 Lena leaning on Emily, they walk over to the grave yard.
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 If you are here for reading, skip past the outline.
 *Outline:*
 * *At this point, there are three survivors on the moon base:* 
  * *Emily*
  * *Lena*
  * *other crew member*
 * *The other crew member is close to dying*
 * *Begin with dialog*
 * *Emily grabs a hammer and runs through the base followed by Lena*
 * *She reaches the lab and smashes the control panel for the dorr while running inside causing the door to close and lock*
 * *She drinks some left over chemical concoction* 
  * *possibly after messing with it following some instructions she finds*
 * *Lena starts to break the door open, the other person just arrives there*
 * *Emily’s body is filled with pain and she falls to the floor*
 * *the door gets broken open just before she drifts out of consciousness*
 * *she drifts in and out of consciousness* 
  * *getting carried down the hallway*
  * *in her bed vomiting*
 "Why not?" Emily looks back and forth between them. "Tony said he had some success with his mice, why shouldn’t we try it?"  
 "Tony also died after..." - he is interrupted by coughing - "...after trying it on himself."  
 Emily thinks for a moment while looking at him on his death bed.  
 "Not like anything else is gonna happen to us..."  
 Lena shakes her head. "I don’t want to live my remaining days alone. Just don’t do it, please."  
 Emily gets up and wanders around the module. Her eyes fall on the drawers in the adjacent maintenance module. She has an idea...  
 "Emily, where are you going?"  
 She steps inside and rummages through a bunch of drawers, leaving them open as she opens the next one.  
 "What are you doing with that hammer?"  
 She storms off into the hallway; Lena follows her.
 As she runs into the lab, she smashes the hammer into the control panel of the door. Arcing noises, the hissing of air pressure getting released, the broken equipment alarm beeps. The door comes falling down behind her, slamming into the floor and latching with a loud click. She looks around for a moment as she catches her breath. The walls are lined with work benches and cupboards above them. In the center is an additional large workbench where Tony’s lab mice are still running around in their cage, oblivious to the situation. Emily had kept them as pets after he died.
 Banging on the door - Lena is outside. Emily walks over to the Erlenmeyer flask that’s sitting next to the sink in one of the workbenches that line the walls. She lifts it up and looks through the clear, blue liquid. Tony had written some science-y words on the flask along with "cure 5x concentrated", and closed it off with a glass stopper. Emily removes the stopper and grabs a small beaker from the drying rack on the wall above the sink. She pours some of the liquid into the beaker, sets the flask aside, and tops it off with water from the tap. Holding the beaker in her hands, she hesitates.
 Buzzing noises and clicking from the door. The latching mechanism opens. Emily’s hesitation is over, she lifts the beaker to her mouth and drinks the liquid. It has a pungent smell and burns in her throat but she downs it in two gulps. The door moves up a bit. Through the opening, she hears Lena struggling on the other side. A foot appears in the door, followed by Lena’s hands. Emily begins to feel dizzy, she sets the beaker onto the center workbench and holds on to the edge of the work surface. Lena slowly lifts the door and pushes it back into the ceiling, holding a screwdriver in her mouth. The panel covering the latching mechanism has been removed and is leaning against the wall. Emily starts to move towards the door but feels too dizzy to walk. She still sees Lena jam the screwdriver in the side of the door before her knees give out and she falls. A burning sensation spreads throughout her body as she lays on the floor. Lena starts to yell at her but she drifts out of consciousness before she can process any of the words.
 She wakes up briefly while getting carried down the hallway. The pain is unbearable. In an attempt to scream, she sighs before everything goes black again. The next time she regains consciousness is while throwing up in her bed. She gasps for air, then she drifts away again.