Michelle! Guess what I found...
- She climbs through the gap between rotting cars on the adjacent track.
+ The two are exploring one of Ivydale's train yards. Michelle climbs
+ through between the rotting cars on an adjacent track, looking for him.
No idea. Where are you?
Up here.
- Jack is standing on top of one of the metro trains. Michelle climbs onto
- the link between cars, from there onto the the edge of the broken
- windshield, and Jack helps her up to the rather sketchy-looking roof.
-
+ Jack is standing on top of atop? one of the
+ metro trains. Michelle climbs onto the link between cars, from there
+ onto the the edge of the broken windshield, and Jack helps her up to the
+ rather sketchy-looking roof.
Look, over there...
He points across the deteriorating trains, towards the outermost track of
the overgrown train yard. A small roof – or in places what remains
@@ -23,13 +24,11 @@
They climb back down and make their way over to one of the tank cars. - Jack clmbs onto the side of the car and attempts to use the ladder + Jack clmbs onto the end of the car and attempts to use the ladder leading to the top. It crumbles under his feet. I guess I found the way down – hey, use - me as a ladder. He leans against the tank and helps her on top of - it. - Wording!! "ladder" and "helps" - reads weird twice in a row + me as a ladder instead. He leans against the tank and helps her + on top of it.
Michelle inspects the lid. It's held on with large nuts.
@@ -45,8 +44,8 @@
I'm afraid to see what you call very
rusty.
This thing, for example.
- He hits the ladder with it, causing a large section of it to break off
- and crumble. Then, he hands her the wrench. After a bit of fiddling, she
+ He hits the ladder with it, causing a large section to break off and
+ crumble. Then, he hands her the wrench. After a bit of fiddling, she
manages to get a good grip on one of the nuts holding the lid in place
– it doesn't budge.
Need a hammer or something?
@@ -55,34 +54,37 @@
Jack picks up a section of metal pipe and passes it to her. Putting it
over the wrench for additional leverage, she pushes against it until the
bolt snaps with a bang.
- That's certainly one of the ways to undo
- a nut, she says before moving on to the next one.
+ That's certainly one of the ways to
+ unbolt this thing... she says before moving on to the next one.
One by one, she removes the other nuts. Some of them snap off, some
unscrew with considerable force. She lets go of the pipe and attempts
to lift the lid – it's still stuck in place. Using the wrench
- as a hammer, she whacks it until it comes loose.
+ as a hammer, she whacks it until it comes loose...
There's nothing in here.
Great. I guess there are a bunch more
- we can try... needs a better reaction, may
+ we can try. needs a better reaction, may
want to state disappointment explicitly
- She jumps down onto the edge of the car.
+ She jumps back down onto the end of the car.
Looks like we'll be climbing a bunch of
tank cars today.
Let's see about that... Mind giving me
the wrench for a moment?
- She hands it back to Jack. He uses it to knock against the wall of the
- next tank.
+ She hands it back to Jack. He jumps over the gap between cars and uses
+ it to knock against the wall of the next tank.
Sounds empty.
The third tank seems more promising. It only makes a dull clunk
- when Jack hits it with the wrench. He helps Michelle on top again.
+ when Jack hits it with the wrench. Michelle climbs on top again.
The nuts on this one come off more easily and it doesn't take
long until she lifts the lid.
- Jackpot! Smells like diesel.
- Stupid idea but I need to show you
+ Jackpot! She sniffs the smell coming
+ off the liquid inside. Smells like
+ diesel.
+ Nice! Let's find a truck or something
+ to drive around in... Wait, stupid idea but I need to show you
something.
Oh no, what are you up to again?
Nothing in particular... Wanna follow me for a