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@@ -63,10 +63,10 @@
   <span class="speech">Why not?</span><br />
   She steps back.<br />
   <span class="speech">Watch.</span><br />
-  He kicks it. Loud cracking follows, and the ringing of metal. A roughly
-  two meter wide section of the railing breaks loose and falls. Annie takes
-  a bigger step back. The railing crashes into the ground below with a loud
-  ringing bang.<br />
+  He pushes against it. Loud cracking follows, and the ringing of metal.
+  A roughly two meter wide section of the railing breaks loose and falls.
+  Annie takes a bigger step back. The railing crashes into the ground
+  below with a loud ringing bang.<br />
   <span class="speech">How did you know?</span><br />
   <span class="speech">I made the same mistake over there.</span><br />
   He points to another missing section in the railing that Annie
@@ -86,21 +86,41 @@
   <span class="speech">Many things are bigger than &lt;dome city&gt;.
   This is the smaller of two sister cities.</span><br />
   He points towards another urban center in the distance.<br />
-  <span class="speech">That over there is Sentinel Shores, the place I
-  used to call home.</span>
-</p>
-<p>
-  After pointing out some other notable landmarks, Jack leads Annie to the
-  end of the station that they entered it from. The balcony-like walkway
-  turns into a wide staircase where the mountain extends over the tunnels
-  and the back wall of the station. It leads down to a collapsed bridge
-  next to a large waterfall. Annie marvels at the sheer amount of water
-  flowing by, something that she&apos;s never seen before.
+  <span class="speech">That over there is Sentinel Shores, the place
+  I used to call home.</span>
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
-  At this point, the documents are still in the driver&apos;s cabin and the
-  keys are still in the train. They need to come back for them before
-  leaving for the bunker.
+  At some point before this, Jack needs to tell her something along the
+  lines of &quot;No pity. I chose this life.&quot;
+</p>
+<p>
+  After pointing out some other notable landmarks, Jack decides it is time
+  to get going. He starts to lead the way, walking to the end of the end of
+  the station that they entered it from, before abruptly turning to Annie.
+  <span class="speech">You know what we forgot?</span>
+</p>
+<p>
+  They return to the side entrance, walk down the stairs, follow the ledge,
+  back up the stairs, and end up at the train. Annie puts the documents
+  back into her bag. Jack grabs the keys from the control panel
+  <span class="speech">just for good measure</span> and uses one of them to
+  close the door from the outside.
+</p>
+<p class="comment">
+  I don't like this. It feels too contrived. Would have been better if
+  Jack had just closed the door when they left the train and left it at
+  that. That also allows for a later scene where someone realizes that
+  the documents are still in the train.
+</p>
+<p>
+  Jack leads the way again, this time walking to the end of the platform
+  where the tunnels open up into the station. There, they use another
+  underpass taking them to the end of the balcony-like walkway. It
+  connects to a wide staircase down from the end of the embankment
+  where the mountain extends over the tunnels and the back wall of the
+  station. It leads to a collapsed bridge next to a large waterfall.
+  Annie marvels at the sheer amount of water flowing by, something that
+  she has never seen before.
 </p>
 <p>
   Jack goes ahead, climbing down the wall where the bridge used to begin