From b6866cf371eeec9e2b9599a64fd48f983aade4f5 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Tue, 20 May 2025 21:14:38 +0200 Subject: [PATCH] 'zd' : revision --- zd--Nova_Metropolis.html | 56 ++++++++++++++++++++-------------------- 1 file changed, 28 insertions(+), 28 deletions(-) diff --git a/zd--Nova_Metropolis.html b/zd--Nova_Metropolis.html index 7112df3..5e901cd 100644 --- a/zd--Nova_Metropolis.html +++ b/zd--Nova_Metropolis.html @@ -3,8 +3,8 @@

Michelle continues driving the bus for a couple hours without further incidents. They pass a bunch of smaller towns, some of them being - basically piles of wood and rubble while others have buildings that are - still standing. James had gone to sleep and Annie is enjoying the view, + basically piles of wood and rubble while others have buildings still + standing. James had gone to sleep and Annie is enjoying the view, making occasional conversation with Michelle about landmarks or anything remarkable.

@@ -12,33 +12,35 @@ Maybe add some comment about what Annie sees/perceives?

- Look, over there!
- Michelle points to the left. An undefined shape is visible in the far - distance. She takes an exit onto another highway in that direction. After - a short while, the undefined shape turns into the unmistakable skyline of - a large city. + Michelle gets her attention: Look, over + there!
+ She getures to the left. Annie leans out of her seat and back to see what + Michelle is pointing to. An undefined shape is visible in the far + distance. Michelle takes an exit onto another highway in that direction. + After not too long, the undefined shape turns into the unmistakable + skyline of a large city.

- The bus passes a large sign "Welcome to Nova Metropolis" and - they reach the city outskirts. Many of the single family homes in the area - are still standing, some of them even in remarkably good condition. The - skyscrapers in the distance look like they're all intact. -

-

- some reaction to the fact that the city is basically intact + They pass a sign with completely washed-out colors off to the side + that still faintly reads Welcome to + Nova Metropolis. Quickly, they find themselves the city + outskirts. Many of the single family homes in the area are still + standing, some of them even in remarkably good condition. The city + center ahead of them is made up of skyscrapers that mostly look like + the day they were abandoned.

The highway ends and transitions into a large road. Michelle decelerates the bus.
Why are you going so slow?
- Im going exactly 50 - perfectly normal city - speed.
- 50 km/h? That's faster than the speed limit in - <dome city>. This feels so slow...
+ Im going exactly speed limit - 50 km/h. +
+ 50? That's faster than the speed limit in + Sunside Cove yet this feels so slow...
Michelle chuckles.
- Well Jack was right about the wind - I managed - to go 120 most of the time. Under normal circumstances, a bus like this - one would struggle with that. + This is what it feels like after doing 120 + for a while. Jack was right about the wind. Under normal circumstances, + a bus like this one would struggle to reach 100.

The buildings around them get taller and taller. The mix of smaller and @@ -46,13 +48,11 @@ turn turn into blocks of even taller buildings until the sides are lined with sky scrapers with facades of glass, concrete, and steel towering over over the road. Annie points them out:
- TODO: tie this in with the missing section - above.
- They all look like they were just - abandoned.
- You're right. Not even a smashed - window...
- Over there?
+ Looks like this was all abandoned just + recently. Not even a smashed window.
+ Over there. But you're right. Barely any + damage – and surprisingly little sand, I thought we'd find + a bunch of buried ruins.
Okay, one smashed window.
Michelle pulls up at a bus stop and parks the bus.
Time to wake up the guys.