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@@ -26,13 +26,13 @@
   <span class="quote speech">You&apos;re kidding.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Nope.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">How&apos;d you get woken up then?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Technical failure. The preservation chamber
-  died.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Technical failure in my preservation
+  chamber.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">You survived that?</span><br />
   He chuckles. <span class="quote speech">That was the least of my
-  challenges.</span>
-  He briefly tells her how he found himself trapped inside and that he
-  turned to the dome city for help.
+  challenges. The failsafe worked.</span><br />
+  He briefly tells her that he found himself trapped inside and turned
+  to the dome city for help.
 </p>
 <p>
   Michelle&apos;s dizziness starts to go away and the burning sensation
@@ -41,33 +41,33 @@
   <span class="quote speech">So? What now? Any plans?</span><br />
   Jack gets up as well and picks up the glass.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I guess, for now, taking a look at the
-  uplink. I wanna see if we can get it going again.</span><br />
+  uplink. I wanna see if we can get it going again. After that, we need
+  to return a favor to the dome city people.</span><br />
   He sets the glass on the table.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Thanks.</span><br />
   She thinks for a moment.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Assuming we can fix it... Then what?</span>
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Honestly, I don&apos;t know. Maybe they have
-  something to do for us, maybe they don&apos;t. I&apos;m&nbsp;just curious
-  about the state of things up there.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Sounds good &ndash; but I don&apos;t feel
-  quite ready for a hike like that.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Honestly, I don&apos;t know. Maybe the moon
+  base has something to do for us, maybe they don&apos;t.
+  I&apos;m&nbsp;just curious about the state of things up there.</span>
+  <br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Sounds good. Though give me a bit longer,
+  I don&apos;t feel quite ready for a hike like that.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Take your time, you just woke up.</span><br />
   She pulls back one of the chairs, sits down, and takes another sip.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">If we can&apos;t fix it... The people who
-  helped you, do you think they&apos;d help us with the uplink too?</span>
-  <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t know if they would, but they
-  can&apos;t. They&apos;re stuck inside the dome city and want our
-  help.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">How? Even if the tunnels have collapsed,
-  I can think of a few other ways to break&nbsp;out.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">So what&apos;s that favor for the dome
+  city?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">They&apos;re stuck inside as well and want
+  our help.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">How? Even if the tunnels are collapsed,
+  I can think of a few other ways to get out.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">From what I know, they aren&apos;t physically
   trapped inside, the people in charge just don&apos;t want anyone to
   leave.</span><br />
-  Jack sits down across from her and retells everything that had happened
-  in detail, starting with his preservaton chamber breaking down.
-  It takes him about half an hour, including answering Michelles questions.
+  Jack sits down across from her and retells everything that had happened,
+  starting with his preservaton chamber breaking down. It takes him about
+  half an hour, including answering Michelles questions.
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">How have you been dealing with food?
@@ -143,7 +143,7 @@
   the uplink is down &ndash; it literally ...<i>is&nbsp;down</i>...</span>
   <br />
   Michelle reaches the edge and and sees what Jack had stopped for:
-  A large <span class="comment">ravine? wash?</span> extends downwards
+  A large <span class="comment">wash?</span> extends downwards
   from the top of the mountain where a landslide had left nothing but
   a cliff and a huge pile of rubble. At the top of the mountain, teetering
   on the edge, are two buildings &ndash; all that&apos;s left of the ground