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Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.
James asks her: How far is it?
A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
- highway... If it's in even somewhat decent shape, I'd say
+ highway. If it's in even somewhat decent shape, I'd say
we're gonna make it there in about that time.
She turns right at an intersection onto the on-ramp, saying:
Gonna find out very soon...
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on the uneven asphalt. James hangs on to the handle
in the door as the remains of the city outskirts fly by.
Michelle notices it:
- You don't need to hold on, that seat
- belt is gonna hold you.
+ James, relax, that seat belt is gonna hold
+ you.
How are you not absolutely terrified by the
speed you're going?
You get used to it after a while... Also,
- I know the capabilities of this car very well – I used to drive
- one like this.
+ I know very well what I can or can't do with this car –
+ I used to drive the same model.
+ wording?
Within a few minutes, they make it out of Ivydale, leaving its valley behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and shallow hills. - She takes an exit onto another highway. The large, rusty signs above - still indicate the proximity of Sentinel Shores where they haven't - faded completely. feels like something is missing - here -
-- The highway takes them north, around the western part of Ivydale's - lower side. After a while, they approach what used to be the outskirts of - Sentinel Shores and Michelle takes an exit, getting them onto a rural - road. The observatory is located on a hill, now ahead of them; a small - group of buildings in the distance. - What symbol to put where that semicolon is? - Keep the semicolon? A comma? A dash? + The large, rusty signs above still indicate the proximity of + Sentinel Shores where they haven't faded completely. Following + them, Michelle takes an exit onto another highway that takes them north, + around the western part of Ivydale's lower side.
+ After a while, they approach what used to be the outskirts of + Sentinel Shores and Michelle takes an exit, getting them onto + a rural road. The observatory is located on a hill, now ahead of them + – a small group of buildings in the distance. As they get closer, the buildings take distinct shapes. Two of them stand - out: The one in the center holds a large geodesic dome and another one off - to the side elegant description of an optical - observatory?. The other buildings look mostly unremarkable. + out: The one in the center holds a large geodesic dome and another one + off to the side is a smooth round dome with a slot cut out of it for + a telescope to peek through. Well, it was smooth at one point + – now, it has many holes with a tree growing out of the largest + one. The geodesic dome has ivy vines clinging to it but looks otherwise + surprisingly intact. The other buildings look like mostly unremarkable + ruins in various stages of decay.
- Michelle parks the truck on what remains of the large paved area between
- the buildings and they get out. Trees and bushes grow all over the place,
- some even out of the windows and through the roofs of the buildings.
+ Michelle says to James:
+ I'm sorry but it doesn't look
+ like your idea of using telescope is gonna pan out.
+ Oh well, still worth checking it out –
+ maybe, there are old photos left behind... Didn't you say you also
+ need the telescope?
+ We need the radio telescope. That's
+ a very different beast. It's in that ball made of triangles in the
+ middle there.
+
+ She drives onto what remains of the large paved space inbetween the
+ buildings and parks the truck next to the entrance to the optical
+ telescope. They get out and look around. Trees and bushes grow all over
+ the place, some even out of the buildings. Dora runs up to a bush and
+ barks at it. A young fox jumps out and runs away.
+ Dora, c'mere!
What now? They start exploring but where to they begin?