From e3ecef9760c0769c6b694283de937c7a3debe77e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Wed, 25 Jun 2025 23:43:35 +0200 Subject: [PATCH] 'mc' Welcome Home: major revision, continue writing --- mc-welcome_home.html | 105 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++------------ 1 file changed, 77 insertions(+), 28 deletions(-) diff --git a/mc-welcome_home.html b/mc-welcome_home.html index 1769d62..086d1f6 100644 --- a/mc-welcome_home.html +++ b/mc-welcome_home.html @@ -4,62 +4,111 @@

I smell fire.
- We're almost there.
+ Yup, we're almost there.
Annie is slightly confused by his answer and how seemingly unfazed he is.
Don't you want to do something about it?
- Fires out here aren't all bad news. - Some are, but I'm gonna guess this one's our campfire. + Gonna guess that's our campfire – + nothing to worry about.
+ response?

Annie and Jack walk over a crest? ridge?, - revealing a view of the small valley - beyond. The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side, - with bushes to the left and right and an open area in front of it that - connects to an old, partially overgrown street. A person is sitting - next to a fire right in front of the door, cooking over the flames.
- Is there a word for a terrain feature like a very - small valley? + revealing a view of the small valley beyond. + Is there a distinct word for a terrain feature + like a very small valley?
+ The bunker is set into the mountain on the other side, the large open + door visible from afar. There is a small cleared space between it and + the road, surrounded by bushes. Someone is sitting there, next to + a fire.
+ lay of the land info (for Jack opening the door + scene): from their current PoV, there is a road below them, coming from + the right, crossing the the valley over a bridge, and turning back + to the right where it passes the bunker and continues around the other + mountain
+ They start making their way down to the road.
+ Jack takes a radio off his belt and speaks into it: + research todo: radio protocol
+ Michelle, we're just entering the + valley.
+ We? Someone came along?
+ wording? translate: mitgekommen
+ Annie.
+ I see. Am cooking – any food allergies + or other dietary restrictions I should watch out for?
+ Annie shakes her head.
+ She says no.
+ Okay, see you in a bit.
+ Jack puts the radio away and the two continue downwards.

- They make their way across and Jack introduces Michelle and Annie to each - other.
- So you join us out here after all?
+ It takes them a while to get to the road. The pavement is cracked with + plants growing out of it. Ahead of them is a bridge over a small river. + They cross it about half-way where Annie stops and turns to the railing. + She almost leans against it, before the thought + What if it breaks? shoots into her + head. She grabs on to it and shakes ... herself. The railing stands firm. +
+ At some point soon-ish after this, Annie will try + this and the floor under her will give out. From then on, she will be + afraid of going too close to railings / edges.
+ Jack joins her looking down at the small river below and says: + Learning quickly, huh?
+ + What she got to say? What she seeing? +

+

+ After a moment, they continue along the road. It makes a sharp turn to + the right into a slight incline along the hillside. They walk for a few + more minutes and reach the bunker. As they approach, the person they saw + earlier – presumably Michelle – comes out of the bunker and + adds some ingredients to a pot on a tripod over the flames. + Is there a word for these metal rings with three + legs? + Jack introduces the two to each other – it is Michelle. +
+ So you join us out here after all? +
Yeah, things kinda went south quickly.
+ Well then, welcome to your new home for the + time being. They all sit down around the fire and Annie recounts the events of the recent past while the meal continues cooking.

- A noise in the bushes around the bunker entrance gets their attention. + The ensuing conversation is interrupted by a noise in the bushes. Michelle tilts her head, then turns around.
Is that a dog? There's a dog here!
- A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, barks and then runs back into the - bushes. A moment later, it reappears, followed by a guy wearing a long, - dark green coat that has been patched a few times. He is wearing a - backpack and holds a long staff, using it as a + A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, sniffs them all, barks and then runs + off on the road, disappearing around a translate: + Felsvorsprung. A moment later, it comes back, followed by a guy + wearing a long, dark green coat that has been patched a few times. + He is wearing a backpack and holds a long staff, using it as a Wanderstab? Cane?.

- Good evening!
- They greet the stranger back and Michelle and Jack invite him to stay. -
+ The stranger says: Good evening!
+ They greet him back and Michelle and Jack invite him to join them around + the fire.
Gladly. He comes closer. I'm James, the green wizard of Siren's Edge.
- Michelle, time traveller. Can you show us - some of your magic?
- Well, currently no, my staff is broken. - He swings it around and makes some funny noises. + Michelle, time traveling witch. Show us some + of your magic, wizard.
+ Well, unfortunately, my staff is broken. +
+ He swings it around and makes some funny noises.
See? Not working.
They all have a laugh and Annie and Jack introduce themselves in a more - normal manner. Michelle asks:
+ normal manner.
+ Michelle asks: What leads you to the area?
I am searching for...    Dora! C'mere, sit!
- The dog stops sniffing the pots over the fire and returns to James.
+ The dog stops sniffing the pot over the fire and returns to James.
As I was saying, I am looking for pictures from the old world like this one...
He shows an old, crumpled photo that, while faded and discolored, still @@ -70,7 +119,7 @@ This is a new lead for Michelle and Jack.

- Michelle takes the pots off the fire and Jack gets dishes from inside + Michelle takes the pot off the fire and Jack gets dishes from inside the bunker.
(Some of) The food is unfamiliar to Annie.
While eating, they discuss their mission.