'qa' Overdue Maintenance: revision, lots of fixes

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   Jack parks the truck just before the exit of a tunnel and they get out.
   Roaring water echoes from somewhere deep below. Annie grabs her bag and
   goes ahead. The tunnel wall to the right features doors, large gates,
-  and windows that allow a peek into abandoned offices and control rooms.
+  and windows that allow a peek into abandoned offices, storage spaces, and
-  The end of the tunnel connects to a balcony extending into a narrow
+  control rooms. The end of the tunnel connects to a balcony with walkways
-  ravine with walkways going from either side. She steps onto it, making
+  connecting to either side, extending into a narrow ravine. She steps onto
-  sure to keep her distance to the railing, and looks around. The walkway
+  it, making sure to keep her distance to the railing, and looks around.
-  to the right connects to the top of a dam blocking the ravine. Large
+  The walkway to the right connects to the top of a dam blocking the ravine.
-  flowers, a couple bushes, and a small tree grow on top of it and the wall
+  A couple bushes, purple flowers, and a small tree grow on top of it and
-  is partially green from the moss growing on it. Water flows over the
+  the wall is partially green from moss. Water flows over the spillway,
-  spillway, falling into the depths where it joins a torrent of water
+  falling into the depths below where it joins a torrent of water coming
-  coming from two big pipes at the bottom of the dam.
+  from two big pipes at the bottom of the dam.
 </p>
 <p>
-  She turns around to see the others unloading the truck. Jack is getting a
+  She turns around to see Jack getting a toolbox from the truck bed
-  large toolbox from the truck. James and Michelle are standing next to one
+  <span class="comment">one word or two?</span> and James and Michelle
-  of the doors, holding a box full of random spare parts that Jack had
+  waiting next to a door, holding a large box full of random spare parts.
-  found in the bunker. She hurries over to them and opens the door pulling
+  She hurries over to them and opens it by pulling a loop of wire through
-  a loop of wire through the latching mechanism to bypass the lock.
+  the latch.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Inside is the main control room. The walls are lines with metal cabinets
+  Inside is the main control room. The wall to the right is lined with
-  that have levers, buttons, dials, and large gauges on them. The wall to
+  metal cabinets that have levers, buttons, dials, and large gauges on
-  the left features a front of windows allowing a view of the spillway and
+  them. The wall to the left features a front of windows, allowing a view
-  the top of the dam. Some of the windows have cracks but, by some miracle,
+  of the spillway and the top of the dam, below which is a random
-  none are broken. In front of them is a ransom collection of furniture,
+  collection of furniture, primarily desks and chairs. Some of the windows
-  primarily desks and chairs. The center of the room is taken up by a large
+  have cracks but, by some miracle, none are broken. The center of the room
-  console with more buttons, switches, and gauges, facing the windows and
+  is taken up by a large console with more buttons, switches, and gauges
-  an opening in the floor covered by a thick glass pane.
+  that is facing the windows and an opening in the floor covered by a thick
+  glass pane.
 </p>
+<p>
   They set down their things and roam around the room. Out of nowhere,
   Michelle asks:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Jack, what&apos;s the status on that dome city
   you&apos;re building? You guys only have two years to finish that
   project.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Oh no, I guess we&apos;re gonna have to slack
-  less while waiting for bureaucracy to take its course. I sure hope we
+  less while waiting for bureaucracy to take its course.</span><br />
-  get these plans approved by the end of the month.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Look, the power lines are gonna get hooked up
   to the battery bank in a couple days. Aren&apos;t you excited for
   that?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Not my department but I sure hope we&apos;re
-  no longer gonna habe to rely on batteries down there. Having a working
+  no longer gonna need these portable batteries down there. Having a working
   power grid is gonna be so nice.</span><br />
   They are looking at a calendar on the wall and laughing. It shows October
-  1991 with a bunch of crossed-out days and a few entries over the rest of
+  1991 with a few entries and crossed-off days.
-  the month.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Annie steps onto the glass pane in front of the center console and looks
+  Jack notices that Annie has unwittingly stepped onto the glass pane.
-  down.
+  
-<p>
 </p>
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