From f4b6425c7a00fb1849420f91eea795775fc2f197 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: BodgeMaster <> Date: Wed, 17 Apr 2024 21:46:23 +0200 Subject: [PATCH] 'mc' Welcome Home: continue writing and some revision --- mc-welcome_home.html | 75 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++-------------- 1 file changed, 51 insertions(+), 24 deletions(-) diff --git a/mc-welcome_home.html b/mc-welcome_home.html index 2f32744..063eea0 100644 --- a/mc-welcome_home.html +++ b/mc-welcome_home.html @@ -4,47 +4,74 @@

I smell fire.
- Yes, we're almost there.
+ We're almost there.
Annie is slightly confused by his answer and how seemingly unfazed he is.
Don't you want to do something about it?
Fires out here aren't all bad news. - Sometimes, they are, but I'm gonna guess this one's our - campfire. + Some are, but I'm gonna guess this one's our campfire.

- They walk over a ridge, revealing a view of the small valley beyond. - The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side, in front of it - a small fire with a person sitting next to it.
- Is there a word for a terrain feature like a valley - but a lot smaller? + Annie and Jack walk over a ridge, revealing a view of the small valley + beyond. The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side, + with bushes to the left and right and an open area in front of it that + connects to an old, partially overgrown street. A person is sitting + next to a fire right in front of the door, cooking over the flames.
+ Is there a word for a terrain feature like a very + small valley?

They make their way across and Jack introduces Michelle and Annie to each other.
So you join us out here after all?
- Things kinda went south quickly.
+ Yeah, things kinda went south quickly. +
They all sit down around the fire and Annie recounts the events of the - recent past. Idk, something needs - to happen here. They start making food or whatever. + recent past while the meal continues cooking.

- Michelle tilts her head, then turns around. Is - that a dog? There's a dog here!
- A medium-sized dog runs out of the bushes, barks and then turns around - and runs back. A moment latrer, it reappears, followed by an - unkempt? dude wearing a long coat - that has been patched a couple times. He holds a long staff, using it as - a Wanderstab?. + A noise in the bushes around the bunker entrance gets their attention. + Michelle tilts her head, then turns around.
+ Is that a dog? There's a dog here! +
+ A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, barks and then runs back into the + bushes. A moment later, it reappears, followed by a guy wearing a long, + dark green coat that has been patched a few times. He holds a long staff, + using it as a Wanderstab? Cane?.

- Good evening, people! - realistic?
- Michelle replies: Evening.
- Dora, sit!
- The others greet the stranger as well. He asks for directions to the - Sentinel Shores observatory.
+ Good evening!
+ They greet the stranger back and Michelle and Jack invite him to stay. +
+ Gladly. He comes closer. + I'm James, the green wizard of + Siren's Edge.
+ Michelle, time traveller. Can you show us + some of your magic?
+ Well, currently no, my staff is broken. + He swings it around and makes some funny noises. + See? Not working.
+ They all have a laugh and Annie and Jack introduce themselves in a more + normal manner. Michelle asks:
+ What leads you to the area?
+ I am searching for...    Dora! + C'mere, sit!
+ The dog stops sniffing the pots over the fire and returns to James.
+ As I was saying, I am looking for pictures + from the old world like this one...
+ He shows an old, crumpled photo that, while faded and discolored, still + clearly depicts a nebula and some stars.
+ ... and maybe the means to take them. + I heard there is a quite well-preserved observatory near + Sentinel Shores.
+ This is a new lead for Michelle and Jack. +

+

+ Michelle takes the pots off the fire and Jack gets dishes from inside + the bunker.
+ (Some of) The food is unfamiliar to Annie.
+ While eating, they discuss their mission.

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