'qa' Overdue Maintenance: minor revision

qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html

@@ -38,25 +38,25 @@
   noises. The moment James reaches it, the creaking turns into cracking
   and the panel of <span class="comment">grid floor</span> beings
   to give out underneath his feet. He grabs on to one of the railings and
-  quickly <span class="comment">hops? Idk some word between &quot;step&quot;
-  and &quot;jump&quot;</span> onto the beam holding it, leaving the
-  section of floor barely hanging on.<br />
+  quickly steps onto the beam holding it, leaving the section of floor
+  barely hanging on.<br />
   Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">You okay?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Yeah &ndash; can&apos;t say the same for
   the floor...</span><br />
   The two walk the rest of the way across, meanwhile Annie and Jack stay
   on the balcony.
 </p>
-<p class="comment">TODO: Change this so Michelle and James explore the
-dam first, then turn their attention to the windows.</p>
 <p>
   After the <span class="comment">Aufregung?</span> dies down, Michelle
-  and James start looking around.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Would you look at that!</span><br />
-  Michelle is looking through the windows. A few of them have cracks but
-  most are somehow intact.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I think I found what we&apos;re looking
-  for.</span><br />
+  and James start looking around. They walk across the dam, looking for
+  cracks and inspecting the rusty controls.<br />
+  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a small
+  fracture on the other side of where this tree is growing. It doesn&apos;t
+  look great but it&apos;s not an immediate danger.</span><br />
+  The two turn back and focus their attention to the windows.
+  A few of them have cracks but most are somehow fully intact.<br />
+  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">Would you look at that!&emsp;I
+  think I found what we&apos;re looking for.</span><br />
   Jack asks: <span class="quote speech">The control room?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Yea, it&apos;s right here.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Guess we&apos;re gonna have to climb
@@ -170,7 +170,7 @@ dam first, then turn their attention to the windows.</p>
 <p>
   In the meantime, Michelle has gone around and flipped some switches on
   the control panel cabinets to the left. The gauges are lit up and their
-  needles no longer sit at their resting points. Jack flips a switch on
+  needles have moved from their resting positions. Jack flips a switch on
   the center console and it lights up like a christmas tree. He gives it
   a once-over, then he presses some buttons on his watch and gets up.
 </p>