Jack is driving the truck towards a dried-out river. On the other side,
a bit in the distance, is a group of houses that – while they
- certainly have? have certainly? seen better
- days – don't look abandoned. Jack says
- Hold on!
- Festhalten? and drives into the
- river bed.
-
- TODO: mention Annie in this paragraph
+ have certainly seen better days – don't look abandoned.
+ Jack says to Annie: Hold on!
+ translate: Festhalten!
+ Then, he drives into the river bed.
- The truck struggles to get traction while driving up the other river
- bank, eventually getting stuck in the sand. He backs up and turns into
- the river, accelerates, then steers back onto the bank – to no
- avail, the truck gets stuck again.
+ The truck struggles to get traction in the sand while driving up
+ the other river bank. It gets stuck. Jack backs up and
+ turns into the river, accelerates, then steers back onto the bank
+ – to no avail, the truck gets stuck again.
Well... fuck.
He turns back into the river once more. The engine roars and the wheels
fling sand everywhere. Jack shifts gears, the needle on the speedometer
slowly creeps up, then he goes for another attempt. The suspension
- bottoms out as the wheels plow into the river bank, but the truck does
- barely make it out.
-
-
-
+ bottoms out as the wheels plow into the sand, but the truck barely makes
+ it out.
Ouch. Annie holds her shoulder where
the seat belt had dug into it. Can we not do
that again, please?
- I'll... try to keep it in mind,
- sorry.
+ Sorry. I'll... try to keep it in
+ mind.
He turns around and drives onto the overgrown remains of a road leading
towards the settlement.
- Annie throws the stick a few times, then she follows Jack into the store.
+ Annie plays with the dog for a bit, then she follows Jack into the store.
Its shelves are sparsely stocked with a random assortment of things,
roughly sorted into categories:
Hand tools, boxes full of hardware, household chemicals, bars of soap,
a few clocks and watches, books, and more. Half of the store seems to be
- dedicated to food though the shelves are mostly empty. Behind the counter
- is a man who appears to be in his 60s, talking to Jack:
- No, we don't sell food. What you see
- there is strictly rationed. Since the river name
- has changed course, we don't even have enough water to grow
- crops for ourselves. The cisterns and wells simply don't
- cut it.
+ dedicated to food – though the shelves are mostly empty.
+ In the back is a counter. Jack is talking to the man behind it who
+ appears to be in his 60s.
+ The man says: No, we don't sell food.
+ What you see there is strictly rationed. Since the river name has changed course, we don't even have enough
+ water to grow crops for ourselves. The cisterns and wells simply
+ don't cut it.
Okay... What if we supplied you with
water?
The man interrupts the conversation and looks at Annie:
@@ -79,19 +68,18 @@
Listen, the amount of water we need can't
simply be carried here or we'd do it ourselves. And we need it
constantly and consistently, not just once.
- I know you need an industrial quantity of
- water. We can get you an industrial quantity of water. Will you give us
- food if we supply you?
+ I understand that. You need an industrial
+ quantity of water. Will you provide food if we supply it?
He musters Jack for a moment.
Who is we and how do you wanna
accomplish that?
- We are a small group of people living in
+ We're a small group of people living in
a bunker south of Ivydale. Two of us have extensive knowledge of
old world technology that we can put to use.
The man looks at him with skepticism.
Jack continues: Let the how be my
- problem to solve. If we make it happen, will you supply us with
- food?
+ problem to solve. If we make it happen, will you give us food?
+
You're gonna have to discuss that with
the others. Wait outside.
He disappears through a door behind the counter. Annie and Jack leave
@@ -100,17 +88,17 @@
Sounds like you have a grand plan already.
Not really, but I'm pretty sure I will
within the hour. If all else fails, we could fix up a flatbed
- truck, bolt a tank to it, and drive it here.
+ truck, bolt a tank to it, and do supply runs.
- While they wait, the small dog runs up again. They play fetch for a bit
- until a group of people, amongst them the man from the store, approaches
- them. A few handshakes later, Jack repeats his suggestion. A man in his
- 40s, who seems to be in charge, says:
+ While they wait, the small dog runs up again. They play fetch until
+ a group of people approaches, the man from the store among them.
+ A few handshakes later, Jack repeats his suggestion. A man in his 40s,
+ who seems to be in charge, says:
Your intentions are ... ambitious. I doubt
- you can do it but I don't see any harm in agreeing. If you
- manage to restore a permanent water supply, you can have all the food
- you want.
+ you can do it but I don't see why we shouldn't let you try.
+ If you manage to restore a permanent water supply, you can have
+ all the food you want.
Someone else throws in: Within reason.
Yes, within reason. Any objections?
@@ -122,42 +110,41 @@
Jack replies before the one in charge gets a chance:
We need to feed maybe ten people for a few
months while we establish a settlement in the south of Ivydale.
-
-
-
-
The one in charge responds: That's a lot.
- Let's say two months.
- Okay.
- Then we have a deal.
-
- A few people keep questioning the feasibility until Jack puts a stop
- to it:
+ Let's say one month.
+ We'll need at least two.
+ A few members of the group discuss among themselves for a moment.
+ Then, the one in charge turns to Jack again:
+ Okay, we have a deal.
+ A few people keep questioning Jack and the feasibility of his idea.
Ladies and gentlemen, whether it can be done
will be our problem. Now I would like to see what we have to work with.
- Can I have a look at that irrigation system?
- The one in charge turns to a girl:
+ Do you have an irrigation system?
+ The one in charge responds: Yes, old pipes
+ in the ground. He turns to a girl:
Mary, can you go, show them around?
Sure. She takes a step towards Annie
- and Jack. Follow me. The closest access point
- is right there, behind the store.
+ and Jack. Follow me.
+
+ Mary says: The closest access point is right
+ there, behind the store.
They walk around it and onto a field of withering?
plants. A large, partially buried pipe with just the top exposed
goes through it with an access hatch roughly in the center of the field.
Right next to the hatch is a Gestell? with
a boom to lower a large bucket into the access hatch.
- Jack asks: Is it all like this, a net of
- buried pipes?
+ Jack asks: Is it all like this, buried pipes
+ going to fields?
Mostly. In the greenhouses, it's just
an open channel?.
Where do these pipes lead?
They all connect to a large
- round buried tank from where another pipe
- leads to the intake. It's a bit of a walk but I can show you.
-
+ round buried tank from where a tunnel
+ connects to the inlet. It's a bit of a walk but I can show
+ you.
She gestures for them to follow but Jack stops her:
Wait, we can take the truck.
That's your car?