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<p>
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<p>
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Annie walks down the stairs and steps onto the square. It is brightly
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Annie walks down the stairs and steps onto the square. It is brightly
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illuminated by a large glowing sphere made of yellow and brown glass
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illuminated by a large glowing sphere made of yellow and brown glass
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tiles, suspended on steel cables hanging from four office complexes
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tiles, suspended on steel cables that hang from four office complexes
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that tower over the rest of the buildings. The other buildings around the
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at the corners of the square, towering over the rest of the buildings.
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square are more in line with the rest of the city but they each have a
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The other buildings around the square are more in line with the rest of
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very unique look. <span class="comment">Add a description of some
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the city but they each have a very unique look. There's the town
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buildings</span> To the right is the library, a large building with a
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hall <span class="comment"> city hall?</span>, a building of dark red
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facade of sandstone blocks. The front features large pillars and a
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and yellow bricks, arranged to form beautiful patterns. Next to it is
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staircase spanning the entire width of the building giving it the look
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the Museum of the Last Days, a dystopian-looking building with black
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of an ancient temple. The wall behind the pillars has multiple rows of
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metal plates as a facade. Other buildings of note include the courthouse,
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windows.
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a theater, <span class="comment">Does that word also apply to what the
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German word means?</span> and the cathedral - the only religious building
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in the city.
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</p>
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<p>
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To her right is the library, a large building with a facade of sandstone
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blocks. The front features large pillars and a staircase spanning the
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entire width of the building giving it the look of an ancient temple.
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The wall behind the pillars has multiple rows of windows.
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</p>
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</p>
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<p>
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Annie makes her way up the stairs and enters through the large wooden
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Annie makes her way up the stairs and enters through the large wooden
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Michelle pokes her head out from underneath the train.<br />
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Michelle pokes her head out from underneath the train.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">I think that's it.</span><br/>
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<span class="quote speech">I think that's it.</span><br/>
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She puts a large piece of leftover hose aside and crawls out.<br >
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She puts a large piece of leftover hose aside and crawls out.<br >
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<span class="quote speech">That was quick – nice work.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">That was quick – nice job.</span><br />
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Jack walks over to the compartment holding the batteries, takes the
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Jack walks over to the compartment holding the batteries, takes the
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cables off the terminals, and hooks them up to his makeshift power
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cables off the terminals, and hooks them up to his makeshift power
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supply. Then, he starts the generator and climbs into the train.
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supply. Then, he starts the generator and climbs into the train.
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Michelle follows him and they go to the driver's cabin. Jack turns
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Michelle follows him and they go to the driver's cabin. Jack turns
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the key switch and parts of the dashboard light up. Then, he pushes the
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a key switch and parts of the dashboard light up. Then, he pushes the
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engine start button. While holding it, he points to the fuel pressure
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engine start button. While holding it, he points to the fuel pressure
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gauge and, raising his voice to talk over the noise, he says:<br />
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gauge and, slightly raising his voice to talk over the noise of the
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engine turning over, he says:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">That's progress already.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">That's progress already.</span><br />
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The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right as the engine turns
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The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right.<br />
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over.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Too slow though</span>, he adds after a
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<span class="quote speech">Too slow though</span>, he adds after a
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moment.<br />
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moment.<br />
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He holds the button for a while, the engine keeps turning over,
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He holds the button for a while, the engine keeps turning over,
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but it doesn't start.
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but it doesn't seem to fire even once.
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</p>
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<p>
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Michelle suggests they take a look at the carburetor. Jack turns the key
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Michelle suggests they take a look at the fuel injection. Jack turns
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switch off again and they go to the middle of the railcar. The floor
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the key switch off again and they go to the middle of the railcar.
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panels above the engine bay are already missing, they had removed them
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The floor panels above the engine bay are already missing, they had
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earlier to replace the bits of rotting hose in the fuel line. Jack grabs
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removed them earlier to replace the bits of rotting hose in the fuel
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the manual from one of the seats and starts flipping through the pages
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line. Jack grabs the manual from one of the seats and starts flipping
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while Michelle jumps out and stops the generator. He begins to undo the
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through the pages while Michelle jumps out and stops the generator.
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bolts holding the case of the carburetor together. The gasket crumbles
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He begins to undo <span class="comment">knowledge gap here: How
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as he removes the top of the case.
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does that work? What do you undo to fix a gunked-up fuel injection?
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<span class="comment">Hey car people, how'd you describe this?</span>
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Also, do/did diesel engines have a carb?</span>
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</p>
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After cleaning the carburetor and replacing the gasket with a makeshift
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After <span class="comment">cleaning out gunk and doing some makeshift
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one made from <span class="comment">what?</span>, they try again.
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fix</span>, they try again.
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The engine attempts to start a few times but it still doesn't run.
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The engine attempts to start a few times but it still doesn't run.
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Michelle notices the fuel pressure is back down to zero so they pull
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Michelle notices the fuel pressure is back down to zero so they pull
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the line out to see what's going on. Michelle waits next to
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the line out to see what's going on. Michelle waits next to
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He presses the button for a few seconds, then he leans out of the window
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He presses the button for a few seconds, then he leans out of the window
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looking at Michelle and the bucket. She looks up at him and says:<br />
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looking at Michelle and the bucket. She looks up at him and says:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Barely a few drips. But there's pressure
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<span class="quote speech">Barely a few drips. But there's pressure
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back here.</span><br />
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on the other side of the fuel filter.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">So we need a new filter?</span>
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<span class="quote speech">So we need a new one?</span>
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</p>
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He walks over to the closest door and jumps out. Michelle begins
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He walks over to the closest door and jumps out. Michelle begins
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undoing the <span class="comment">clamps?</span> holding the fuel line
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undoing the clamps holding the fuel line to the filter while Jack
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to the filter while Jack starts searching all drawers and boxes in the
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starts searching all drawers and boxes in the vicinity for a
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vicinity for a replacement. One side of the filter comes loose and
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replacement. One side of the filter comes loose and Michelle starts
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Michelle starts with the other side.
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with the other side.
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</p>
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<span class="quote speech">Not the right one but I found this.</span>
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<span class="quote speech">Not the right one but I found this.</span>
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Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.<br />
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Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.<br />
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James asks her: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
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James asks her: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
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<span class="quote speech">A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
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highway... If it's in even somewhat decent shape, I'd say
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highway. If it's in even somewhat decent shape, I'd say
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we're gonna make it there in about that time.</span><br />
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we're gonna make it there in about that time.</span><br />
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She turns right at an intersection onto the on-ramp, saying:<br />
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She turns right at an intersection onto the on-ramp, saying:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Gonna find out very soon...</span>
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<span class="quote speech">Gonna find out very soon...</span>
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on the uneven asphalt. James <span class="comment">hangs on to the handle
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on the uneven asphalt. James <span class="comment">hangs on to the handle
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</span>in the door as the remains of the city outskirts fly by.
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</span>in the door as the remains of the city outskirts fly by.
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Michelle notices it:<br />
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Michelle notices it:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">You don't need to hold on, that seat
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<span class="quote speech">James, relax, that seat belt is gonna hold
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belt is gonna hold you.</span><br />
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you.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">How are you not absolutely terrified by the
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<span class="quote speech">How are you not absolutely terrified by the
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speed you're going?</span><br />
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speed you're going?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">You get used to it after a while... Also,
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<span class="quote speech">You get used to it after a while... Also,
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I know the capabilities of this car very well – I used to drive
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I know very well what I can or can't do with this car –
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one like this.</span>
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I used to drive the same model.</span>
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<span class="comment">wording?</span>
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Within a few minutes, they make it out of Ivydale, leaving its valley
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Within a few minutes, they make it out of Ivydale, leaving its valley
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behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and shallow hills.
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behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and shallow hills.
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She takes an exit onto another highway. The large, rusty signs above
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The large, rusty signs above still indicate the proximity of
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still indicate the proximity of Sentinel Shores where they haven't
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Sentinel Shores where they haven't faded completely. Following
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faded completely. <span class="comment">feels like something is missing
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them, Michelle takes an exit onto another highway that takes them north,
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here</span>
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around the western part of Ivydale's lower side.
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The highway takes them north, around the western part of Ivydale's
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lower side. After a while, they approach what used to be the outskirts of
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Sentinel Shores and Michelle takes an exit, getting them onto a rural
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road. The observatory is located on a hill, now ahead of them; a small
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group of buildings in the distance.
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<span class="comment">What symbol to put where that semicolon is?
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Keep the semicolon? A comma? A dash?</span>
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After a while, they approach what used to be the outskirts of
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Sentinel Shores and Michelle takes an exit, getting them onto
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a rural road. The observatory is located on a hill, now ahead of them
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– a small group of buildings in the distance.
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As they get closer, the buildings take distinct shapes. Two of them stand
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As they get closer, the buildings take distinct shapes. Two of them stand
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out: The one in the center holds a large geodesic dome and another one off
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out: The one in the center holds a large geodesic dome and another one
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to the side <span class="comment">elegant description of an optical
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off to the side is a smooth round dome with a slot cut out of it for
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observatory?</span>. The other buildings look mostly unremarkable.
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a telescope to peek through. Well, it <i>was</i> smooth at one point
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– now, it has many holes with a tree growing out of the largest
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one. The geodesic dome has ivy vines clinging to it but looks otherwise
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surprisingly intact. The other buildings look like mostly unremarkable
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ruins in various stages of decay.
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Michelle parks the truck on what remains of the large paved area between
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Michelle says to James:<br />
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the buildings and they get out. Trees and bushes grow all over the place,
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<span class="quote speech">I'm sorry but it doesn't look
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some even out of the windows and through the roofs of the buildings.
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like your idea of using telescope is gonna pan out.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Oh well, still worth checking it out –
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maybe, there are old photos left behind... Didn't you say you also
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need the telescope?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">We need the <i>radio</i> telescope. That's
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a very different beast. It's in that ball made of triangles in the
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middle there.</span>
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She drives onto what remains of the large paved space inbetween the
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buildings and parks the truck next to the entrance to the optical
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telescope. They get out and look around. Trees and bushes grow all over
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the place, some even out of the buildings. Dora runs up to a bush and
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barks at it. A young fox jumps out and runs away.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Dora, c'mere!</span>
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What now? They start exploring but where to they begin?
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What now? They start exploring but where to they begin?
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