mc-welcome_home.html

@@ -38,9 +38,8 @@
   <br />
   A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, barks and then runs back into the
   bushes. A moment later, it reappears, followed by a guy wearing a long,
-  dark green coat that has been patched a few times. He is wearing a
+  dark green coat that has been patched a few times. He holds a long staff,
-  backpack and holds a long staff, using it as a
+  using it as a <span class="comment">Wanderstab? Cane?</span>.
-  <span class="comment">Wanderstab? Cane?</span>.
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Good evening!</span><br />

na-Telescope.html

@@ -4,11 +4,11 @@
 <p>
   Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I know the way.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Wanna drive?</span><br />
+  Jack extends his hand with the keys.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Sure.</span><br />
-  Jack hands her the keys and the four get in the truck. James joins
+  She takes them and the four get in the truck. James joins Michelle in
-  Michelle in the front, Annie and Jack take the rear seats.
+  the front while Annie and Jack take the rear seats. A few moments later,
-  A few moments later, Michelle pulls onto the street in front of
+  Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.<br />
-  the bunker.<br />
   James asks her: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
   highway. If it&apos;s in even somewhat decent shape, I&apos;d say
@@ -22,14 +22,15 @@
   Michelle floors it and the truck rattles and shakes as it accelerates
   on the uneven asphalt. James <span class="comment">hangs on to the handle
   </span>in the door as the remains of the city outskirts fly by.
-  Michelle takes notice:<br />
+  Michelle notices it:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">James, relax, that seat belt is gonna hold
   you.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">How are you not absolutely terrified by the
-  speed?</span><br />
+  speed you&apos;re going?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">You get used to it after a while... Also,
   I know very well what I can or can&apos;t do with this car &ndash;
-  I used to drive the same back then.</span>
+  I used to drive the same model.</span>
+  <span class="comment">wording?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   Within a few minutes, they make it out of Ivydale, leaving its valley
@@ -44,65 +45,36 @@
   Sentinel&nbsp;Shores and Michelle takes an exit, getting them onto
   a rural road. The observatory is located on a hill, now ahead of them
   &ndash; a small group of buildings in the distance.
-  As they get closer, the buildings take distinct shapes. Two of them
+  As they get closer, the buildings take distinct shapes. Two of them stand
-  stand out: The one in the center holds a large geodesic dome and another
+  out: The one in the center holds a large geodesic dome and another one
-  one off to the side behind it is a smooth round dome with a slot cut out
+  off to the side is a smooth round dome with a slot cut out of it for
-  of it for a telescope to peek through. Well, it <i>was</i> smooth at one
+  a telescope to peek through. Well, it <i>was</i> smooth at one point
-  point &ndash; now, it has many holes with a tree growing out of the
+  &ndash; now, it has many holes with a tree growing out of the largest
-  largest one. The geodesic dome has ivy vines clinging to it but looks
+  one. The geodesic dome has ivy vines clinging to it but looks otherwise
-  otherwise surprisingly intact. The other buildings look like mostly
+  surprisingly intact. The other buildings look like mostly unremarkable
-  unremarkable ruins in various stages of decay.
+  ruins in various stages of decay.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Michelle says:<br />
+  Michelle says to James:<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">James, I&apos;m sorry, but it doesn&apos;t
+  <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m sorry but it doesn&apos;t look
-  look like you&apos;ll be able to look through that telescope &ndash; or
+  like your idea of using telescope is gonna pan out.</span><br />
-  anyone for that matter...</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Oh well, still worth checking it out &ndash;
-  <span class="quote speech">Aww, what a let-down. Might still find
+  maybe, there are old photos left behind... Didn&apos;t you say you also
-  pictures there... Didn&apos;t you say you also need a telescope?</span>
+  need the telescope?</span><br />
-  <br />
+  <span class="quote speech">We need the <i>radio</i> telescope. That&apos;s
-  <span class="quote speech">There are two telescopes here: The optical one
+  a very different beast. It&apos;s in that ball made of triangles in the
-  back there and the radio telescope in that ball of triangles in the
+  middle there.</span>
-  middle there. That&apos;s essentially just a really big antenna.</span>
-  <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">How does that work?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Stars emit light, but also other kinds of
-  radiation. Radio telescopes were used to image that.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Can we do that?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">A lot of things would have to go right for
-  that.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  She drives through what remains of an open gate, onto a large,
+  She drives onto what remains of the large paved space inbetween the
-  overgrown paved area inbetween the buildings. She drives around
+  buildings and parks the truck next to the entrance to the optical
-  the radio telescope and parks the truck between it and the optical
   telescope. They get out and look around. Trees and bushes grow all over
-  the place, some even out of the buildings&apos; walls. Dora runs up
+  the place, some even out of the buildings. Dora runs up to a bush and
-  to one of the bushes and barks at it. A young fox jumps out and runs
+  barks at it. A young fox jumps out and runs away.<br />
-  away.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Dora, c&apos;mere!</span>
 </p>
-<p>
-  They start by exploring the optical telescope. The lower part of the
-  building is filled with <span class="comment">some technology stuff,
-  preferably not all computers</span> and filing cabinets. Most of their
-  contents are rotting sheets of paper holding documents and logs.
-  Annie finds a folder with photos that are partially stuck together.
-  The ones in the front depicting the outside of the observatory but
-  there is at least one depicting a nebula.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">James, look what I found.</span><br />
-  He puts it into his backpack.
-</p>
-<p>
-  Meanwhile, Jack has found a way upstairs. The stairs are partially
-  collapsed so he moves one of the filing cabinets in their place and
-  climbs to the next floor.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech"></span>
-</p>
 <p class="comment">
-  Plot hole: geodesic dome bad.
+  What now? They start exploring but where to they begin?
-  They start exploring in the optical telescope building - not wasting
-  too much time there. Then, they go into the radome.
 </p>
 
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oa-Lab_Rat-Emily_lab_incident.html

@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@
   She storms off into the hallway; Lena jumps up and runs after her.
 </p>
 <p>
-  As she runs through the door to the lab module, Emily smashes the hammer
+  As she runs through the door to the lab module, she smashes the hammer
   into its control panel. Arcing noises, the hissing of air pressure
   getting released, the broken equipment alarm beeps. The door comes
   falling down behind her, slamming into the floor and latching with a
@@ -54,7 +54,7 @@
   drinks the liquid. It has a pungent smell and burns in her throat but she
   downs it in two gulps. The door moves up a bit. Through the opening, she
   hears Lena struggling on the other side. A foot appears in the door,
-  followed by her hands. Emily begins to feel dizzy, she sets the
+  followed by Lena&apos;s hands. Emily begins to feel dizzy, she sets the
   beaker onto the center workbench and holds on to the edge of the work
   surface. Lena slowly lifts the door and pushes it back into the ceiling,
   holding a screwdriver in her mouth. The panel covering the latching
@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@
 <p>
   She wakes up briefly while getting carried down the hallway. The pain is
   unbearable. In an attempt to scream, she sighs before everything goes
-  dark again. The next time she regains awareness is while throwing up
+  black again. The next time she regains consciousness is while throwing
-  in her bed. She gasps for air, and drifts away into unconsciousness.
+  up in her bed. She gasps for air, then she drifts away again.
 </p>
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pm--emily_wake_up_again.html

@@ -1,25 +0,0 @@
-<!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> &lt;Emily wake up again&gt; </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><div class="back"><a href="index.html">&lt;</a></div>
-
-<h1>&lt;Emily wake up again&gt;</h1>
-<p>
-  Emily wakes up in her bed, laying on her side. Lena is sitting on the
-  floor in front of her, leaning against the window, with her arms over
-  her knees and her head resting on them. She looks very pale. A few
-  thoughts flash through Emily&apos;s mind in quick succession:
-  <span class="quote non-speech">asleep or dead &mdash; she moved a tiny
-  bit, she&apos;s breathing &mdash; asleep, phew.</span><br />
-  Emily moves into a more comfortable position. Lena
-  <span class="comment">schrekt hoch</span> and looks disoriented for
-  a moment.<br />
-  She says in a weak voice: <span class="quote speech">So you will
-  live.</span><br />
-  Emily sits up.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">How long has it been?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">About three days.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Have you slept at all?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Here and there a little bit.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">You need to sleep.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Funny you should say that...</span>
-</p>
-
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ra--Emily_first_contact.html

@@ -73,12 +73,12 @@
   </li>
 </ul>
 <p>
-  Emily closes the cage and puts the <span class="comment">whatever they
+  Emily closes the cage and puts the &lt;whatever they feed the mice&gt;
-  feed the mice</span> back into the cupboard. She double-checks that the
+  back into the cupboard. She <span class="comment">does something related
-  cage is really closed, then she steps out into the hallway, and starts
+  to taking care of the mice</span>, steps out into the hallway, and
-  walking. The entire habitat is eerily quiet. Apart from her own
+  starts walking. The entire habitat is eerily quiet. Apart from her steps,
-  footsteps, she hears just the hum of the electrical systems and the
+  just the hum of the electrical systems and the quiet whirr of the air
-  quiet whirr of the air circulation.
+  circulation are audible.
 </p>
 <p>
   3 &ndash; 5 &ndash; 2 &ndash; 1 &ndash; Enter. The keypad beeps with
@@ -86,24 +86,20 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Access authorized</span> and the door slides
   up. She steps through into the main control center. The module contains
   one large room with rows of integrated computer equipment desks arranged
-  in a <span class="comment">Mondsichel</span> shape with the
+  <span class="comment">need a fitting description of what a mission
-  <span class="comment">W&ouml;lbung</span> to the left. Most of the seats
+  control rom looks like</span>. The wall to the left that most of the
-  are facing that way, allowing a view of the biotope through a huge
+  seats are facing is completely taken up by a panorama window into the
-  panorama window taking up the entire wall. The biotope is an even larger
+  biotope, an even larger module with a ceiling of glass and support beams,
-  module with a ceiling of glass and support beams, completely filled with
+  completely filled with plant life, trees, small animals, and a big pond.
-  plant life, trees, small critters, and a big pond. The walls across from
+  The wall to the right holds a large status panel with some seven-segment
-  her and to the right hold large status panels with some seven-segment
   displays for information and lots of big status indicator symbols.
 </p>
 <p>
   Emily walks down the shallow stairs towards the panorama window. In
   front of the window are tables and chairs that were moved there recently
   as the room had become more of a general hangout spot for the remaining
-  people. Now, it&apos;s just Lena and her.
+  people when there still more than just Lena and her. Lena sits at one of
-</p>
+  them, cutting a bread into slices while waiting for her.
-<p>
-  Lena sits at one of the tables, cutting a piece of bread into slices.
-  In front of her is a bowl with fruit and a honey jar.
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
   missing dialog about food and starting to eat