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@@ -3,10 +3,9 @@
 <h1> Wake Up! </h1>
 <!-- perspective: Jack -->
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">Awh fuck!</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Awh fuck!</span> Jack exclaims in pain as he
-  Jack exclaims in pain as he wakes up. He has a terrible headache.
+  wakes up. He has a terrible headache. While moving his hands up to hold
-  While moving his hands up to hold his head, he realizes that his entire
+  his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.
-  body hurts.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Owowowww... Ouch!</span><br />
   An automated voice comes on: <span class="quote speech">Emergency
   defrost complete. Entering low power mode.</span><br />
@@ -30,19 +29,19 @@
   air, and looks around. The light shining out of his chamber reveals a
   dirty floor. The table and chairs in front of him as well as the kitchen
   area across the room are covered in dust and all exposed bits of metal
-  are rusty. The paint is starting to flake off of the walls. Red night
+  have rust. The paint is starting to flake off of the walls. Red night
   lights on the ceiling are dimly illuminating the rest of the bunker.
   He looks to the left: The wall is lined with other preservation chambers,
   all but one of them being powered down. In the corner is the minicomputer
   controlling the bunker, a half-height rack filled to the brim with
   devices, and next to it a teleprinter, a computer-controlled typewriter.
-  Along the rear wall are desks holding a radio and a terminal (a device
+  Along the rear wall are desks holding a radio and a terminal, a device
-  comprised of a keyboard and monitor), and on the wall above them is a
+  comprised of a keyboard and monitor, and on the wall above them is a
   phone; nothing out of the ordinary here &ndash; apart from a few paint
   crumbs sprinkled on everything. He looks to the right: More preservation
   chambers. Instead of a wall, there&apos;s the bunker door &ndash; door
   is a bit of an understatement, it&apos;s a massive gate. A small slither
-  of light passes under it.<br />
+  of light passes under it.
   <span class="quote speech">These fucking idiots... They didn&apos;t
   reseal it properly.</span>
 </p>
@@ -53,55 +52,54 @@
   banging on the panel later, he turns back to the inside of the bunker,
   looking for tools, contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple
   years too soon and getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked
-  inside a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes being unable to
+  inside a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes unable to close a
-  close a door properly... Doesn&apos;t matter now, too late.
+  door properly... Doesn&apos;t matter, too late now.
 </p>
 <p>
   As he passes each of the preservation chambers, he looks into them. Empty,
   empty, empty - nothing unexpected here. The others would have been woken
   up over time. His own chamber... He presses a few buttons to fully shut
-  it down. The lamp in its ceiling turns off, the door closes, the status
+  it down. The lamp in the ceiling turns off, the door closes, the status
   lights turn off. After passing two other empty preservaton chambers, he
   reaches the one that remains active.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Hello Michelle</span>, he says more to himself
+  <span class="quote speech">Hello Michelle.</span><br />
-  than to the frozen person inside.<br />
   He checks the status lights of her chamber.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Looks good to me &mdash; I think I&apos;m
+  <span class="quote speech">I think I&apos;m gonna leave you in there
-  gonna leave you in there until I find a way out...</span><br />
+  until I find a way out of here &mdash; should be fine...</span><br />
   He continues past the remaining empty chambers to the back of the bunker.
 </p>
 <p>
   Jack opens the cabinets under each of the desks while talking to himself:
-  <span class="quote speech">Where is that fucking toolbox?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Where is that fucking toolbox?</span>
+  <span class="comment">Do we have an alternative expletive to use?</span>
   Well, it isn&apos;t there. He continues with the kitchen area. Still
   nothing. He enters the bathroom through a door next to the kitchen area.
-  Nope, not here either.<br />
+  Nope, not here either. <span class="quote speech">Welp, time to
-  <span class="quote speech">Welp, time to improvise.</span>
+  improvise.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Jack returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers
+  Jack returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers to find
-  to find anything useful. He grabs a fork.<br />
+  anything useful. He grabs a fork. <span class="quote speech">Works as a
-  <span class="quote speech">Works as a screwdriver, I guess...</span><br />
+  screwdriver, I guess...</span> He proceeds to jam the handle into a
-  He proceeds to jam the handle into a screw on one of the kitchen cabinets
+  screw on one of the kitchen cabinets to see if it will turn. It does
-  to see if it will turn. It does &ndash; barely. Using a slightly rusty
+  &ndash; barely. Using a slightly rusty knife sharpener
-  sharpening rod he begins the long and arduous process of grinding the
+  <span class="comment">sharpening rod?</span> he begins the long and
-  fork handle flat, dragging it across the rod over and over and over
+  arduous process of making the fork handle more suitable as a screwdriver,
-  again. After a while, he stops to inspect his work.<br />
+  grinding the end over the sharpener over and over and over. After a
-  <span class="quote speech">Meh, could work.</span><br />
+  while, he stops to inspect his work. <span class="quote speech">Meh,
-  He tests it on the cabinet again.
+  could work.</span> He tests it on the kitchen cabinet again.
 </p>
 <p>
-  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, Jack walks back to the control
+  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, Jack walks back to the control panel
-  panel for the door and unscrews it. After a bit of fiddling with it,
+  for the door and unscrews it. After a bit of fiddling, the panel lifts
-  the panel lifts out of its niche in the wall, pulling cables out of the
+  out of the niche in the wall, pulling cables out of the box under it.
-  box under it. He grabs the fork by the handle and bends the inner prongs
+  He grabs the fork by the handle and bends the <span class="comment">
-  out of the way. Then, he bridges the switch contacts using the two outer
+  middle? inner?</span> prongs out of the way to bridge the control
-  prongs. Nothing happens.<br />
+  panel&apos;s switches using the outer ones. Nothing happens.
   <span class="quote speech">Of course it wasn't gonna be that easy.</span>
-  <br />
   He starts to dig into the wires, attempting to find what&apos;s wrong,
   but realizes after a moment that the wiring is more complex than expected
-  and he has no idea what he&apos;s doing.<br />
+  and he has no idea what he&apos;s doing.
   <span class="quote speech">Guess I need the manual for this
   thing...</span>
 </p>
@@ -112,65 +110,51 @@
   Bonk! At least this seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to
   warm up, he walks over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front
   of it. He inspects the status lights on the various devices, thinking
-  aloud:<br />
+  aloud: <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle,
-  <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle, one active
+  one active cryogenic chamber, primary hard drive is spinning &ndash;
-  preservation chamber &ndash; all good. Primary hard drive is up, second
+  all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let&apos;s change
-  hard drive is ... powered off? Let&apos;s change that...</span><br />
+  that...</span> He pushes the power button and hears the fans blow air
-  He pushes the power button and hears the fans blow air through the drive.
+  through the drive. The spin-up button starts blinking. He waits for a
-  The spin-up button starts blinking. He waits for a moment to let the fans
+  moment to let the fans blow away any dust that may have settled inside
-  blow away any dust that may have settled inside the drive, then he pushes
+  the drive, then he pushes the button. The spindle motor kicks on. There
-  it. The button lights up solid and the motor inside kicks on. There
+  is some intermittent rattling from the drive, probably a shot bearing.
-  is some intermittent rattling from the drive,
+  He hears the platters inside accelerate unusually slowly. Impatiently
-  <span class="quote non-speech">probably a shot bearing</span>, he thinks.
+  sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be ready. Clicking from the
-  He hears the spindle inside accelerating unusually slowly. Impatiently
+  mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a ringing scratching noise.
-  sitting there, he waits for the drive to be ready. Clicking from inside
+  <span class="quote speech">Of course...</span> He quickly presses the
-  the drive followed by a ringing scratching noise.<br />
+  power button again. The scratching stops and the spindle motor turns off,
-  <span class="quote speech">Of course!</span><br />
+  the spindle still rattling occasionally as the platters spin down.
-  He quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and
-  the motor turns off, the spindle still rattling occasionally as it spins
-  down.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s gonna be an ugly head crash.
   No manuals for me, I guess...</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  He gets up and returns to the terminal, thinking there might be
+  He gets up and returns to the terminal. Maybe, there is a backup copy or
-  something useful, maybe even a backup, on the primary drive.
+  anything useful on the primary hard drive. He sits down in front of it
-  He pulls a nearby chair in front of it and sits down.
+  and logs on.
 </p>
 <pre class="terminal">
-EARTH-53 INUX v8.4 SMP
+Tue, 2106-06-01, 18:01
 
-Login: &#9608;
+EARTH-53 Login: jack
-</pre>
-<p>
-  Jack logs on and issues a command:
-</p>
-<pre class="terminal">
-EARTH-53 INUX v8.4 SMP
-
-Login: jack
 Password:
 
 Welcome to INUX!
-Last login Wed, 1994-07-20 11:34:08
 
-$ date
-Tue, 2106-06-01 18:01:55
 $ &#9608;
 </pre>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">So it&apos;s been over a hundred years...
+  <span class="quote speech">So it&apos;s been over a hundred years.
-  Hm.</span><br />
+  Hm...</span><br />
-  He goes through the files but nothing useful turns up. He does, however,
+  He goes through the files but to no avail, no backup turns up. Nothing
-  find a note from 2030 saying that the inhabitants of the dome city
+  useful either. He does, however, find a note from 2030 saying that the
-  have proven to be unhelpful when asked for assistance. Too bad they are
+  inhabitants of Sunside&nbsp;Cove have proven to be unhelpful when asked
-  the ones that have a full backup of everything &ndash; assuming there is
+  for assistance. Too bad they are the ones that have a backup of the
-  anyone still living there.
+  secondary hard drive &ndash; assuming there is anyone still living there.
 </p>
 <p>
   He gets up and reaches for the phone. It lifts off the cradle with a
   quiet click. Jack holds it to his ear and starts dialing but there is no
-  dial tone.<br />
+  dial tone.
   <span class="quote speech">Welp, that&apos;s that.</span>
 </p>
 

html_resources/index_template.html

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 <!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> New Dawn </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><svg class="hidden_filter"><filter id="crunchy_blur" x="0" y="0"><feFlood x="4" y="4" height="2" width="2"/><feComposite width="6" height="6" in2="SourceGraphic"/><feTile result="a"/><feComposite in="SourceGraphic" in2="a" operator="in"/><feMorphology operator="dilate" radius="1.4"/><feGaussianBlur stdDeviation="2.2"></feGaussianBlur></filter></svg>
 <h1> New Dawn </h1>
+<p class="comment">
+  Now with 100% more title! It might be a bit too on-the-nose tho, Idk.
+</p>
 <p>
   Welcome, reader! This website is basically a book that I am working
   on during my commute to work. It&apos;s an adventure story with sci-fi
@@ -11,7 +14,7 @@
   <b>Please give feedback.</b> I need it to turn what looks good to me into
   something that is actually passable. You find me as @bodgemaster on
   Discord, please direct your feedback to my DMs or to the story channel
-  if you have access to that (you know who you are...).
+  if you have access to that (you know who you are :] ...).
 </p>
 <p>
   As the story is quite incomplete at this point, it might be helpful to
@@ -25,11 +28,10 @@
   course of the story.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Another thing worth mentioning here: Parts of the story rely heavily
+  Another thing worth mentioning here: While parts of the story involve
-  on the use of computers. I plan on making these segments more
+  computers, intimate knowledge of them shouldn&apos;t be required. I make
-  self-explanatory so that deep knowledge will not be required.
+  an effort to explain what&apos;s going on through context. If you find
-  As of right now, it&apos;s a mixed bag. If anything is unclear,
+  something unclear, let me know.
-  let me know.
 </p>
 <p>
   Below, in the table of contents, you find links to all the (already
@@ -38,7 +40,9 @@
   so they show up in the right order but there is an unknown amount of
   chapters inbetween them.
 </p>
-<h2> Table of Contents: </h2>
+<p>
+  Table of Contents:
+</p>
 <ul>
   <!-- chapter_list_here -->
 </ul>

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