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--- a/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html
+++ b/01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html
@ -6,9 +6,9 @@
  wakes up. He has a terrible headache. While moving his hands up to hold
  his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.
  <span class="quote speech">Owowowww... Ouch!</span><br />
-  An automated voice comes on: <span class="quote speech">Emergency
+  An automated voice announces: <span class="quote speech">Emergency
  defrost complete. Entering low power mode.</span><br />
-  He thinks: <span class="quote non-speech">Get it together, Jack!
+  Jack thinks: <span class="quote non-speech">Get it together, Jack!
  You knew this was gonna happen. You have trained for this. Where are the
  meds again? ...</span>
 </p>
@ -19,7 +19,7 @@
  different from yesterday - not yesterday! That was years ago, probably
  decades... Besides the point. It looks different. Not just
  <span class="quote non-speech">things have moved around</span> different,
-  it gives off the vibe of a full-on lost place. Unexpected but whatever...
+  it has the vibe of a full-on lost place. Unexpected but whatever...
 </p>
 <p>
  The pressurized air hisses in the lines as the door of the preservation
@ -63,42 +63,14 @@
  until I find a way out of here &mdash; should be fine...</span><br />
  He continues past the remaining empty chambers to the back of the bunker.
 </p>
-<p>
+<p class="comment">
-  Jack opens the cabinets under each of the desks while talking to himself:
+  Jack notices the toolbox is missing.
-  <span class="quote speech">Where is that fucking toolbox?</span>
+  Jack opens the drawers on the desks looking for tools. He also rummages
-  <span class="comment">Do we have an alternative expletive to use?</span>
+  through the cabinets and drawers in the kitchen area.
-  Well, it isn&apos;t there. He continues with the kitchen area. Still
+  After finding some object that he could use as a screwdriver, he returns
-  nothing. He enters the bathroom through a door next to the kitchen area.
+  to the door, taking off the control panel. He realizes that he has no
-  Nope, not here either. <span class="quote speech">Welp, time to
+  idea what he's doing so he attempts (and fails) to get the manual from
-  improvise.</span>
+  the computer.
 </p>
 <p>
  He returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers to find
  anything useful. He grabs a fork. <span class="quote speech">Works as a
  screwdriver, I guess...</span> He proceeds to jam the handle into a
  screw on one of the kitchen cabinets to see if it will turn. It does
  &ndash; barely. Using a slightly rusty knife sharpener
  <span class="comment">Wetzstahl?</span> he begins the long and arduous
  process of making the fork handle more suitable as a screwdriver,
  grinding its end over it over and over and over. He does this for a long
  time. Over and over and over. His fingers start to go sore and he stops
  to inspect his work. <span class="quote speech">Meh, could work.</span>
  He tests it on the kitchen cabinet again.
 </p>
 <p>
  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, he walks back to the control panel
  for the door and unscrews it. After a bit of fiddling, the panel lifts
  off the wall, pulling cables out of the box behind it. Jack holds the
  fork by the handle and bends the <span class="comment"> middle?
  inner?</span> prongs out of the way and attempts to bridge the control
  panel&apos;s switches using the outer prongs. Nothing happens.
  <span class="quote speech">Of couse it wasn't gonna be that easy.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
  He starts to dig into the wires, attempting to find the fault. After a
  while, he realizes that the wiring is more complex than expected and he
  has no idea what he&apos;s doing. <span class="quote speech">Let&apos;s
  get the manual for this thing...</span>
 </p>
 <p>
  Jack returns to the desk with the terminal. He flips the switch on the
--- a/na-Telescope.html
+++ b/na-Telescope.html
@ -1,45 +0,0 @@
 <!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> Telescope </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><a href="index.html"><button class="back">&lt;</button></a>
 <h1>Telescope</h1>
 <p>
  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I know the way.</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Wanna drive?</span> <span class="comment">make
  it clear that Jack says this</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Sure.</span><br />
  The four of them get in the truck and she pulls onto the road in front of
  the bunker.<br />
  James asks: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">A decent bit. About an hour if the highway is
  in good shape.</span> She turns right at an intersection onto the
  on-ramp <span class="comment">Is that a word? I&apos;m 80% sure...</span>
  of said highway.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">We&apos;re gonna find out very soon...</span>
  she adds.
 </p>
 <p>
  The highway has potholes and is partially overgrown but its condition is
  somehow good enough to drive fast. Michelle floors it and the city
  outskirts fly by. Within a couple minutes, they make it out of Ivydale,
  leaving its valley behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains.
  Michelle takes an exit onto another highway. The large, rusty signs above
  the road still indicate the proximity of Sentinel Shores where they
  haven&apos;t faded completely.
 </p>
 <p>
  The highway takes them north, around the western part of Ivydale&apos;s
  lower side. After a while, they approach Sentinel Shores and Michelle
  takes an exit onto a rural road. The observatory is located on a hill
  ahead of them. It&apos;s a small group of buildings around a large round
  building with a dome for a roof. Off to the side is a group of four
  towers, three of them still holding small geodesic domes.
 </p>
 <p>
  Michelle parks the truck on what remains of the large paved area between
  the buildings and they get out. Trees and bushes grow all over the place,
  some even out of the windows of the buildings.
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
  What now? They start exploring but where to they begin?
 </p>
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--- a/zd--Nova_Metropolis.html
+++ b/zd--Nova_Metropolis.html
@ -68,15 +68,15 @@
  <span class="quote speech">Good night</span>.
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
-  missing section (and maybe a missing chapter of Jack getting the radio)
+  missing section
 </p>
 <p>
  <span class="quote speech">Jack is gone</span>, Annie notices while
  entering the bus. She goes to the kitchen area.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a note on the table: &quot;Will
  be back at 6:30&quot;</span><br />
-  Michelle looks at her watch. <span class="quote speech">It <i>is</i>
+  Michelle looks at her watch.<br />
-  6:30.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">It <i>is</i> 6:30.</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">I guess there&apos;s nothing to do but wait.
  He&apos;ll show up soon enough.</span> James chimes in.<br />
  They place their bags full of found goodies on the floor and sit down
@ -84,24 +84,12 @@
 </p>
 <p>
  After a while, they hear a fast car approaching. Looking outside, they
-  see an oldtimer <span class="comment">zoom</span> by. Michelle says:
+  see an oldtimer &lt;zoom&gt; by. A moment later, it returns, braking so
-  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s him.</span> A moment later, the
+  hard that it leaves tire marks on the road. Jack gets out and waves at
-  car returns, braking so hard it leaves tire marks on the road. Jack gets
+  them. He turns off the engine and walks to the front of the bus. Annie
-  out and waves at them. He turns off the engine and walks to the front of
+  opens the door.<br />
  the bus. Annie opens the door.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">Where have you been?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I went on my own little adventure and may or
+  <span class="comment">Jack has misremembered where they parked the bus so
-  may not have forgotten where the bus was parked.</span><br />
+  he was searching for them.</span>
  <span class="quote speech">Didn&apos;t you go to sleep?</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Well yeah... And then I had a dream that
  inspired me to go looking for a radio.</span> He points to the car he
  arrived in. <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s in the trunk.</span><br />
  <span class="comment">said dream is him running a radio station talking
  to Emily</span><br />
  Michelle facepalms. Annie and James look at both of them in confusion.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">Is it one of these radios?</span> Michelle
  makes a gesture like turning a dial.<br />
  <span class="comment">Yes, it is. Make this clear when Jack picks it
  up.</span>
 </p>
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