mc-welcome_home.html

@@ -4,74 +4,47 @@
 
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">I smell fire.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">We&apos;re almost there.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Yes, we&apos;re almost there.</span><br />
   Annie is slightly confused by his answer and how seemingly unfazed he is.
   <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t you want to do something about
   it?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Fires out here aren&apos;t all bad news.
-  Some are, but I&apos;m gonna guess this one&apos;s our campfire.</span>
+  Sometimes, they are, but I&apos;m gonna guess this one&apos;s our
+  campfire.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Annie and Jack walk over a ridge, revealing a view of the small valley
-  beyond. The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side,
-  with bushes to the left and right and an open area in front of it that
-  connects to an old, partially overgrown street. A person is sitting
-  next to a fire right in front of the door, cooking over the flames.<br />
-  <span class="comment">Is there a word for a terrain feature like a very
-  small valley?</span>
+  They walk over a ridge, revealing a view of the small valley beyond.
+  The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side, in front of it
+  a small fire with a person sitting next to it.<br />
+  <span class="comment">Is there a word for a terrain feature like a valley
+  but a lot smaller?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   They make their way across and Jack introduces Michelle and Annie to each
   other.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">So you join us out here after all?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Yeah, things kinda went south quickly.</span>
-  </br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Things kinda went south quickly.</span></br />
   They all sit down around the fire and Annie recounts the events of the
-  recent past while the meal continues cooking.
+  recent past. <span class="comment">Idk, something needs
+  to happen here. They start making food or whatever.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  A noise in the bushes around the bunker entrance gets their attention.
-  Michelle tilts her head, then turns around.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Is that a dog? There&apos;s a dog here!</span>
-  <br />
-  A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, barks and then runs back into the
-  bushes. A moment later, it reappears, followed by a guy wearing a long,
-  dark green coat that has been patched a few times. He holds a long staff,
-  using it as a <span class="comment">Wanderstab? Cane?</span>.
+  Michelle tilts her head, then turns around. <span class="quote speech">Is
+  that a dog? There&apos;s a dog here!</span><br />
+  A medium-sized dog runs out of the bushes, barks and then turns around
+  and runs back. A moment latrer, it reappears, followed by an
+  <span class="comment">unkempt?</span> dude wearing a long coat
+  that has been patched a couple times. He holds a long staff, using it as
+  a <span class="comment">Wanderstab?</span>.
 </p>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">Good evening!</span><br />
-  They greet the stranger back and Michelle and Jack invite him to stay.
-  <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Gladly.</span> He comes closer.
-  <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m James, the green wizard of
-  Siren&apos;s&nbsp;Edge.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Michelle, time traveller. Can you show us
-  some of your magic?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Well, currently no, my staff is broken.</span>
-  He swings it around and makes some funny noises.
-  <span class="quote speech">See? Not working.</span><br />
-  They all have a laugh and Annie and Jack introduce themselves in a more
-  normal manner. Michelle asks:<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">What leads you to the area?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I am searching for... &emsp;&emsp; Dora!
-  C&apos;mere, sit!</span><br />
-  The dog stops sniffing the pots over the fire and returns to James.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">As I was saying, I am looking for pictures
-  from the old world like this one...</span><br />
-  He shows an old, crumpled photo that, while faded and discolored, still
-  clearly depicts a nebula and some stars.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">... and maybe the means to take them.
-  I heard there is a quite well-preserved observatory near
-  Sentinel&nbsp;Shores.</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">This is a new lead for Michelle and Jack.</span>
-</p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Michelle takes the pots off the fire and Jack gets dishes from inside
-  the bunker.<br />
-  (Some of) The food is unfamiliar to Annie.<br />
-  While eating, they discuss their mission.
+  <span class="quote speech">Good evening, people!</span>
+  <span class="comment">realistic?</span><br />
+  Michelle replies: <span class="quote speech">Evening.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Dora, sit!</span><br />
+  The others greet the stranger as well. He asks for directions to the
+  Sentinel Shores observatory.<br />
 </p>
 
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na-Telescope.html

@@ -3,15 +3,14 @@
 <h1>Telescope</h1>
 <p>
   Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I know the way.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Wanna drive?</span><br />
   Jack extends his hand with the keys.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Wanna drive?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Sure.</span><br />
-  She takes them and the four get in the truck. James joins Michelle in
-  the front while Annie and Jack take the rear seats. A few moments later,
-  Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.<br />
-  James asks her: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
+  She takes them and the four get in the truck. A few moments later,
+  Michelle pulls onto the road in front of the bunker.<br />
+  James asks: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
-  highway... If it&apos;s in even somewhat decent shape, I&apos;d say
+  highway. If it&apos;s in even somewhat decent shape, I&apos;d say
   we&apos;re gonna make it there in about that time.</span><br />
   She turns right at an intersection onto the on-ramp, saying:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Gonna find out very soon...</span>
@@ -19,25 +18,12 @@
 <p>
   The pavement is cracked and has potholes, and the highway is partially
   overgrown but, despite this, its condition is somehow good enough.
-  Michelle floors it and the truck rattles and shakes as it accelerates
-  on the uneven asphalt. James <span class="comment">hangs on to the handle
-  </span>in the door as the remains of the city outskirts fly by.
-  Michelle notices it:<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">You don&apos;t need to hold on, that seat
-  belt is gonna hold you.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">How are you not absolutely terrified by the
-  speed you&apos;re going?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">You get used to it after a while... Also,
-  I know the capabilities of this car very well &ndash; I used to drive
-  one like this.</span>
-</p>
-<p>
+  Michelle floors it and the remains of the city outskirts flies by.
   Within a few minutes, they make it out of Ivydale, leaving its valley
-  behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and shallow hills.
-  She takes an exit onto another highway. The large, rusty signs above
-  still indicate the proximity of Sentinel Shores where they haven&apos;t
-  faded completely. <span class="comment">feels like something is missing
-  here</span>
+  behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and
+  <span class="comment">low, smooth</span> hills. She takes an exit onto
+  another highway. The large, rusty signs above it still indicate the
+  proximity of Sentinel Shores where they haven&apos;t faded completely.
 </p>
 <p>
   The highway takes them north, around the western part of Ivydale&apos;s

notes/story.txt

@@ -17,9 +17,9 @@ Story begins on Tue, 2106-06-01
 -> [partial] figures out she (or anyone else for that matter) can't help
    him directly
 -> agrees to get him the manual
--> leaves work for the day
+-> [partial] leaves work for the day
 
-Annie goes to the library
+[needs revision] Annie goes to the library
 -> she doesn't get the manual
 -> instead, she gets a mysterious invite
 
@@ -149,10 +149,11 @@ Annie goes to the library
 -> They make their way to where used to be a bridge and climb down
 -> continue towards the bunker
 
-[partial] James the nomad shows up at the bunker with his dog
--> just after Jack and Annie arrive
+[missing] James the nomad shows up at the bunker with his dog
 -> looking for the Sentinel Shores observatory
 -> decides he's gonna stay for the night
+-> playing with the dog
+-> Jack and Annie arrive
 -> food
 -> talk about the before times
   -> James decides to postpone his trip to Sentinel Shores, the bunker has