01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

@@ -44,12 +44,12 @@
 <p>
   He walks over to the door&apos;s control panel. The paint is flaking off
   revealing the rust underneath. Jack attempts to press a couple buttons
-  but they get stuck and nothing happens. A bunch of expletives and some
+  but they get stuck and nothing happens. A couple expletives and banging
-  banging on the panel later, he turns back to the inside of the bunker,
+  on the panel later, he turns back to the inside of the bunker looking
-  looking for tools, contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple
+  for tools, contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple years
-  years too soon and getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked
+  too soon and getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked inside
-  inside a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes unable to close a
+  a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes unable to close a door
-  door properly... Doesn&apos;t matter, too late now.
+  properly... Doesn&apos;t matter, too late now.
 </p>
 <p>
   As he passes each of the presevation chambers, he looks into them. Empty,
@@ -74,53 +74,52 @@
   improvise.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Jack returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers to find
+  He returns to the kitchen area and rummages through the drawers to find
   anything useful. He grabs a fork. <span class="quote speech">Works as a
   screwdriver, I guess...</span> He proceeds to jam the handle into a
   screw on one of the kitchen cabinets to see if it will turn. It does
   &ndash; barely. Using a slightly rusty knife sharpener
   <span class="comment">sharpening rod?</span> he begins the long and
   arduous process of making the fork handle more suitable as a screwdriver,
-  grinding the end over the sharpener over and over and over. After a
+  grinding its end over it over and over and over. He does this for a long
-  while, he stops to inspect his work. <span class="quote speech">Meh,
+  time. Over and over and over. His fingers start to go sore and he stops
-  could work.</span> He tests it on the kitchen cabinet again.
+  to inspect his work. <span class="quote speech">Meh, could work.</span>
+  He tests it on the kitchen cabinet again.
 </p>
 <p>
-  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, Jack walks back to the control panel
+  His newly gained screwdriver in hand, he walks back to the control panel
   for the door and unscrews it. After a bit of fiddling, the panel lifts
   out of the niche in the wall, pulling cables out of the box under it.
-  He grabs the fork by the handle and bends the <span class="comment">
+  Holding the fork by the handle, he bends the <span class="comment">
-  middle? inner?</span> prongs out of the way to bridge the control
+  middle? inner?</span> prongs out of the way and attempts to bridge the
-  panel&apos;s switches using the outer prongs. Nothing happens.
+  control panel&apos;s switches using the outer prongs. Nothing happens.
-  <span class="quote speech">Of course it wasn't gonna be that easy.</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Of couse it wasn't gonna be that easy.</span>
   He starts to dig into the wires, attempting to find the fault, but
-  realizes after a moment that the wiring is more complex than expected
+  realizes after a while that the wiring is more complex than expected
   and he has no idea what he&apos;s doing.
   <span class="quote speech">Let&apos;s get the manual for this
   thing...</span> <span class="comment">He probably wouldn&apos;t say it
   like that while talking to himself.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Jack walks over to the desk with the terminal and flips the switch on the
+  Jack returns to the desk with the terminal and flips the switch on the
   desk lamp. It flickers for a moment before turning off again. He flips
   the switch back and leans over the terminal to turn it on &ndash;
   Bonk! At least this seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to
   warm up, he walks over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front
   of it. He inspects the status lights on the various devices, thinking
   aloud: <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle,
-  one active cryogenic chamber, primary hard drive is spinning &ndash;
+  cryogenics control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is
-  all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let&apos;s change
+  powered up &ndash; all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down,
-  that...</span> He pushes the power button and hears the fans kick in.
+  let&apos;s change that...</span> He pushes the power button and hears
-  The spin-up button starts blinking. He waits for a moment to let the
+  the spindle motor kick on. The power button blinks. There is some
-  fans blow away any dust that may have settled inside the drive, then he
+  intermittent rattling from the drive, probably a shot bearing.
-  pushes it. The spindle motor kicks on. There is some intermittent
+  He hears the platters inside accelerate for an unusually long time.
-  rattling from the drive, probably a shot bearing. He hears the platters
+  Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be ready.
-  inside accelerate unusually slowly. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits
+  Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a ringing
-  for the drive to be ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the
+  scratching noise. <span class="quote speech">Of course.</span> He
-  heads followed by a ringing scratching noise.
+  quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the
-  <span class="quote speech">Of course...</span> He quickly presses the
+  spindle motor turns off, followed by the platters slowly decelerating.
-  power button again. The scratching stops and the spindle motor turns off,
-  the spindle still rattling occasionally as the platters spin down.
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s gonna be an ugly head crash.
   No manuals for me, I guess...</span>
 </p>

06-Library_At_Night.html

@@ -9,42 +9,38 @@
   flashlights.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Following the description Lucas had given, they find their way down to
+  Following the description Lucas had given, they find their way into a
-  the basement and into a small room. They close the door behind themselves
+  small room in the basement. They close the door behind themselves and
-  and look around. To the left is a desk holding a terminal and a bunch of
+  look around. To the left is a desk with a terminal and a bunch of small
-  small devices. Across from the door is a row of five racks almost as tall
+  devices connected together using many cables. The wall in front of them
-  as the room itself, filled with computer equipment. A thick trunk of
+  is lined with racks that are almost as tall as the room itself and filled
-  cables comes out of a hole in the ceiling and leads to the center rack
+  with computer equipment. To the right is a shelf with boxes.
-  where it splits up and the cables connect to a few panels in the top.
-  To the right is a shelf holding various boxes, stacks of flat, round
-  cases, and other random things.
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
   Again, request for formatting suggestions below...
 </p>
 <p>
-  <span class="comment">TODO: change Karl&apos;s note -&gt; Karl&apos;s
-  note<b>s</b></span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">I guess this is it. Let&apos;s take a look at
-  Karl&apos;s note</span>, Isabelle says in a hushed voice.
+  the instructions Karl gave you</span>, Isabelle says in a hushed voice.
   <br />
-  Annie pulls it out of her bag.<br />
+  Annie pulls the note out of her bag.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">It says to find a terminal connected to the
+  <span class="quote speech">First step is turning on the terminal...
-  computer first... By the way, Lucas said something about taking a new
+  Hey, Lucas said something about using a new floppy disk, can you search
-  floppy disk from the shelf, can you search for that?</span><br />
+  for that?</span><br />
-  Annie goes over to the terminal; Isabelle turns to the boxes. Annie puts
+  Annie walks over to the terminal; Isabelle turns to the boxes on the
-  the keys on the desk and inspects the terminal for cables.<br />
+  shelf. Annie puts the keys on the desk and inspects the terminal for a
+  power switch.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a box with cookies back
   here.</span><br />
-  She pulls it out from behind the terminal. <br />
+  She pulls it out from behind the terminal. They giggle. <br />
   <span class="quote speech">I want one</span>, says Isabelle. <br />
-  They giggle. Both end up taking a cookie before stashing the box behind
+  Both end up taking a cookie before stashing the box behind the terminal
-  the terminal again.
+  again.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Annie reaches around the side and flips the power switch. The terminal
+  Annie flips the power switch. The terminal makes a bonk sound and a
-  makes a bonk sound and a crackling noise. She feels the hairs on her arm
+  crackling noise. She feels the hairs on her arm stand up as she
-  stand up as she inadvertently moves it in front of the screen. <br />
+  inadvertently moves it in front of the screen. <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Whoa...</span><br />
   The screen begins to light up.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">... I guess this is supposed to happen.</span>
@@ -54,71 +50,70 @@
   computer&apos;...</span>, she mumbles to herself.<br />
   She looks at the racks. They are mostly filled with what looks like
   large drawers with buttons on them. The one in the center is different.
-  It has a bunch of panels with all sorts of cables plugged into them, most
+  It has a bunch of empty panels, some panels with buttons and lights on
-  of which are part of the trunk from the ceiling. Below that are a couple
+  them, and some other devices.
-  panels with buttons and lights, and a few other devices.
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">I found you a new floppy disk.</span> Isabelle
   interrupts her.<br />
   She pulls a large, square, floppy thing, half-wrapped in a paper sleeve,
-  out of one of the boxes. She lifts it out of the sleeve. Turns out,
+  out of one of the boxes. She pulls the paper sleeve off. Turns out,
-  it&apos;s another sleeve made of thin plastic with openings that
+  it&apos;s another sleeve made out of thin plastic with some openings
-  were previously covered by the paper. The openings reveal something black
+  that were previously covered by the paper. They reveal parts of the thin
-  and shiny.<br />
+  black circle inside.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Lucas said to put it in the computer and push
   a lever down.</span><br />
   They look back and forth between the floppy disk and the computer until
-  Isabelle points to a device in the center rack with a large, flat slot.
+  Isabelle points to a device in the center rack with a large, flat slot
-  <br />
+  and says:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">It could fit in there.</span><br />
-  She walks up to it and pushes the disk into it. It fits perfectly. Then,
+  She walks up to it and inserts the disk. Then, she pushes on the
-  she pushes on the mechanism in the center of the slot. It latches in
+  mechanism in the center of the slot. It latches in place.<br />
-  place.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">What&apos;s next?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">The note says to turn on the
+  <span class="quote speech">The note says to turn on the &apos;main power
-  <span class="quote non-speech">main power switch</span></span> &ndash;
+  switch&apos;</span>, Annie repeats while inspecting one of the panels
-  Annie repeats while inspecting one of the panels with buttons &ndash;
+  with buttons.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Maybe this one?</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Maybe this one?</span><br />
   She points at a key switch. <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Only one way to find out.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Let&apos;s try.</span><br />
-  Isabelle picks up the keys and hands them to her. One of them fits and
+  Isabelle hands her the keys. One of them fits and turns.
-  turns.
 </p>
 <p>
   Fans come on; they hear the loud noise of air rushing through the
   computer. Some of the lights and buttons light up. Annie looks at the
   note again: <br />
-  <span class="quote speech"><span class="quote non-speech">Spin up boot
+  <span class="quote speech">&#8216;Spin up boot hard drive&apos;... Lucas
-  drive</span>... Lucas has also written here:
+  has also written here: &apos;Number 2&apos;</span><br />
-  <span class="quote non-speech">HDD number two</span></span><br />
   The two look back at the racks.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">These drawer thingies here have numbers on
   them, maybe that&apos;s what they mean?</span><br />
-  Isabelle presses the power button on number two. It lights up and the
+  Isabelle presses the power button on number two. It starts blinking.
-  button next to it starts blinking. She presses it. The device makes a
+  The device makes a loud clonk noise followed by a motor accelerating
-  loud clonk noise followed by a motor accelerating inside. Clicking and
+  inside. Clicking and more mechanical noises. The power switch stops
-  more mechanical noises. The button stops blinking and stays lit up.<br />
+  blinking and stays lit up.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">The last step on the note is to press
   &#8216;reset&apos; and &#8216;load&apos; and to enter something into the
   terminal. They also wrote down a list of commands that might help us to
-  find and copy the manual, and
+  find and copy the manual, and &#8216;Good luck!&apos;...</span><br />
-  <span class="quote non-speech">Good luck!</span>...</span><br />
   Isabelle pushes the buttons and they walk over to the terminal.
 </p>
 <p>
   After a lot of typing into the terminal and figuring things out the hard
-  way &ndash; and maybe a couple more cookies disappearing &ndash; they
+  way - and maybe a couple more cookies disappearing - they find the
-  find the manual on one of the hard drives and manage to get it onto the
+  manual on one of the hard drives and manage to get it onto the floppy
-  floppy disk. They follow the instructions to turn the computer off and
+  disk. They follow the instructions to turn the computer off and Annie
-  Annie takes the disk out of the computer.
+  puts the floppy disk back into its sleeve.
+</p>
+<p class="comment">
+  might want to add that Annie takes the disk out of the drive before
+  putting it back into its sleeve
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Shhh.</span><br />
   Isabelle gestures for Annie to be quiet. She whispers:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Do you hear that?</span><br />
-  Footsteps. Annie nods. Someone is in the building &ndash; and probably
+  Footsteps. Annie nods. Someone is in the building - and probably heard
-  heard them. Quickly, she puts the disk into her bag.
+  them. Quickly, she puts the disk into her bag.
 </p>
 <p>
   Opening and closing the door as quietly as possible, they sneak out of
@@ -129,38 +124,36 @@
   into a room filled with crates that has small windows near the ceiling.
   The footsteps are making their way down the stairs. Annie reaches for
   one of the windows and opens it as quietly as possible while Isabelle
-  pushes one of the crates under it - not quite as quietly. The person on
+  moves one of the crates under it - not quite as quietly. The person on
   the stairs starts running. Isabelle jumps onto the crate and quickly
   climbs through the window. Annie, trying to follow her example,
   struggles for a moment to get onto the crate. After she finally manages
   to get up, Isabelle pulls her through the window - not a moment too soon.
   <br />
   <span class="quote speech">You, stop!</span>, <span class="comment">
-  rephrase!!</span> a man yells at them from inside,
+  rephrase?? </span> a man yells at them from inside,
   <span class="quote speech">Stay where you are!</span><br />
   They start running. <br />
   <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m gonna catch you.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   Isabelle runs ahead, leading Annie into a dark alley. She climbs onto a
-  ledge on the side of a building, helping Annie up after herself. They
+  ledge on the side of a building, pulling Annie up after herself. They
   continue running on the ledge until reaching a wall at the end of the
   alley. Isabelle jumps, grabs hold of the railing at the top, pulls
   herself up, and climbs over it. <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Wait here.</span> She disappears. <br />
   Annie looks around nervously. What if she was caught now? <br />
-  A moment later, Isabelle returns with a ladder. Annie climbs up and
+  A moment later, Isabelle returns holding a ladder. Annie climbs up and
-  pulls it up after herself. Isabelle takes it and stashes it on the other
+  pulls the ladder up after herself. Isabelle takes it and stashes it on
-  side of the embankment. They find themselves on the metro tracks.
+  the other side of the embankment. Annie finds herself between the tracks
-  Annie looks around nervously.<br />
+  of the metro. The Central Square station is close by, they run towards
-  <span class="quote speech">We need to get off of here.</span><br />
+  it along the tracks. Just as they make their way onto the platform, the
-  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s fine, we&apos;ll hear any approaching
+  rails start ringing. <br />
-  train long before we see it.</span> Isabelle points towards a close by
-  station and says <span class="quote speech">Central Square</span>.<br />
-  They run towards it along the tracks. Just as they make their way onto
-  the platform, the rails start ringing.<br />
   Isabelle says with a smirk on her face:
-  <span class="quote speech">I don&apos;t think he expects us to have a
+  <span class="quote speech">I don&apos;t think he expects our getaway
-  getaway vehicle...</span>
+  vehicle to be yellow and red...</span>
+  <span class="comment"> alternative wording: Ketchup and mustard express
+  XD </span>
 </p>
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html_resources/index_template.html

@@ -5,43 +5,24 @@
 </p>
 <p>
   Welcome, reader! This website is basically a book that I am working on
-  during my daily commute. It&apos;s an adventure story with sci-fi elements
+  on the metro during my daily commute. It&apos;s an adventure story set
-  set in a post-apocalyptic, retro-futuristic world. Progress is kinda slow
+  in a post-apocalyptic, retro-futuristic world. Progress is kinda slow due
-  due to my limited time but if you&apos;re into this kind of stuff, feel
+  to my limited time but if you&apos;re into this kind of stuff, feel free
-  free to hang around, I&apos;d appreciate it.
+  to hang around, I&apos;d appreciate it.
 </p>
 <p>
   <b>Please give feedback.</b> I need it to turn what looks good to me into
-  something that is actually passable. You find me as @bodgemaster on
+  something that is actually passable. You will find me as @bodgemaster on
-  Discord, please direct your feedback to my DMs or to the story channel
+  Discord, please direct your feedback to my DMs or to the story channel if
-  if you have access to that (you know who you are :] ...).
+  you have access to that (you know who you are :] ...).
-</p>
-<p>
-  As the story is quite incomplete at this point, it might be helpful to
-  know about the three main story lines:<br />
-  The first one revolves around Jack who finds himself trapped in a bunker.
-  In an attempt to get out, he establishes contact with the people in an
-  underground dome city. The second story line follows Annie who finds
-  Jack&apos;s message and sets out to help him which ultimately leads to her
-  joining Jack in the outside world. The third story line begins in a space
-  colony on the moon that they establish contact with over the course of
-  the story.
-</p>
-<p>
-  Another thing worth mentioning here: While parts of the story involve
-  computers, intimate knowledge of them shouldn&apos;t be required. I make
-  an effort to explain what&apos;s going on through context. If you find
-  something unclear, let me know.
 </p>
 <p>
   Below, in the table of contents, you find links to all the (already
-  written) chapters. A good portion is incolmplete and a lot of them will be
+  written) chapters. Many don&apos;t have numbers because there is an
-  revised over time. The ones that don&apos;t have numbers are named so they
+  unknown amount of chapters inbetween them but they are named so they show
-  show up in the right order but there is an unknown amount of chapters
+  up in the right order. There is also a <a href="./notes/">collection of
-  inbetween them. You can also take a look at my
+  notes</a> that, while not particularly well-maintained, might be
-  <a href="./notes/">collection of notes</a> that, while not particularly
+  interesting (in case you missed the link: <a href="./notes/">here</a>).
-  well-maintained, might be interesting (in case you missed the link:
-  <a href="./notes/">here</a>).
 </p>
 <p>
   Table of Contents: