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@@ -4,111 +4,62 @@
 
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">I smell fire.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Yup, we&apos;re almost there.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">We&apos;re almost there.</span><br />
   Annie is slightly confused by his answer and how seemingly unfazed he is.
   <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t you want to do something about
   it?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Gonna guess that&apos;s our campfire &ndash;
-  nothing to worry about.</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">response?</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Fires out here aren&apos;t all bad news.
+  Some are, but I&apos;m gonna guess this one&apos;s our campfire.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   Annie and Jack walk over a <span class="comment">crest? ridge?</span>,
-  revealing a view of the small valley beyond.
-  <span class="comment">Is there a distinct word for a terrain feature
-  like a very small valley?</span><br />
-  The bunker is set into the mountain on the other side, the large open
-  door visible from afar. There is a small cleared space between it and
-  the road, surrounded by bushes. Someone is sitting there, next to
-  a fire.<br />
-  <span class="comment">lay of the land info (for Jack opening the door
-  scene): from their current PoV, there is a road below them, coming from
-  the right, crossing the the valley over a bridge, and turning back
-  to the right where it passes the bunker and continues around the other
-  mountain</span><br />
-  They start making their way down to the road.<br />
-  Jack takes a radio off his belt and speaks into it:
-  <span class="comment">research todo: radio protocol</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Michelle, we&apos;re just entering the
-  valley.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">We? Someone came along?</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">wording? translate: mitgekommen</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Annie.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I see. Am cooking &ndash; any food allergies
-  or other dietary restrictions I should watch out for?</span><br />
-  Annie shakes her head.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">She says no.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Okay, see you in a bit.</span><br />
-  Jack puts the radio away and the two continue downwards.
+  revealing a view of the small valley
+  beyond. The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side,
+  with bushes to the left and right and an open area in front of it that
+  connects to an old, partially overgrown street. A person is sitting
+  next to a fire right in front of the door, cooking over the flames.<br />
+  <span class="comment">Is there a word for a terrain feature like a very
+  small valley?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  It takes them a while to get to the road. The pavement is cracked with
-  plants growing out of it. Ahead of them is a bridge over a small river.
-  They cross it about half-way where Annie stops and turns to the railing.
-  She almost leans against it, before the thought
-  <span class="quote non-speech">What if it breaks?</span> shoots into her
-  head. She grabs on to it and shakes ... herself. The railing stands firm.
-  <br />
-  <span class="comment">At some point soon-ish after this, Annie will try
-  this and the floor under her will give out. From then on, she will be
-  afraid of going too close to railings / edges.</span><br />
-  Jack joins her looking down at the small river below and says:
-  <span class="quote speech">Learning quickly, huh?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech"></span>
-  <span class="comment">What she got to say? What she seeing?</span>
-</p>
-<p>
-  After a moment, they continue along the road. It makes a sharp turn to
-  the right into a slight incline along the hillside. They walk for a few
-  more minutes and reach the bunker. As they approach, the person they saw
-  earlier &ndash; presumably Michelle &ndash; comes out of the bunker and
-  adds some ingredients to a pot on a tripod over the flames.
-  <span class="comment">Is there a word for these metal rings with three
-  legs?</span>
-  Jack introduces the two to each other &ndash; it <i>is</i> Michelle.
-  <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">So you join us out here after all?</span>
-  <br />
+  They make their way across and Jack introduces Michelle and Annie to each
+  other.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">So you join us out here after all?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Yeah, things kinda went south quickly.</span>
   </br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Well then, welcome to your new home for the
-  time being.</span>
   They all sit down around the fire and Annie recounts the events of the
   recent past while the meal continues cooking.
 </p>
 <p>
-  The ensuing conversation is interrupted by a noise in the bushes.
+  A noise in the bushes around the bunker entrance gets their attention.
   Michelle tilts her head, then turns around.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Is that a dog? There&apos;s a dog here!</span>
   <br />
-  A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, sniffs them all, barks and then runs
-  off on the road, disappearing around a <span class="comment">translate:
-  Felsvorsprung</span>. A moment later, it comes back, followed by a guy
-  wearing a long, dark green coat that has been patched a few times.
-  He is wearing a backpack and holds a long staff, using it as a
+  A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, barks and then runs back into the
+  bushes. A moment later, it reappears, followed by a guy wearing a long,
+  dark green coat that has been patched a few times. He is wearing a
+  backpack and holds a long staff, using it as a
   <span class="comment">Wanderstab? Cane?</span>.
 </p>
 <p>
-  The stranger says: <span class="quote speech">Good evening!</span><br />
-  They greet him back and Michelle and Jack invite him to join them around
-  the fire.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Good evening!</span><br />
+  They greet the stranger back and Michelle and Jack invite him to stay.
+  <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Gladly.</span> He comes closer.
   <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m James, the green wizard of
   Siren&apos;s&nbsp;Edge.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Michelle, time traveling witch. Show us some
-  of your magic, wizard.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Well, unfortunately, my staff is broken.</span>
-  <br />
-  He swings it around and makes some funny noises.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Michelle, time traveller. Can you show us
+  some of your magic?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Well, currently no, my staff is broken.</span>
+  He swings it around and makes some funny noises.
   <span class="quote speech">See? Not working.</span><br />
   They all have a laugh and Annie and Jack introduce themselves in a more
-  normal manner.<br />
-  Michelle asks:
+  normal manner. Michelle asks:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">What leads you to the area?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">I am searching for... &emsp;&emsp; Dora!
   C&apos;mere, sit!</span><br />
-  The dog stops sniffing the pot over the fire and returns to James.<br />
+  The dog stops sniffing the pots over the fire and returns to James.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">As I was saying, I am looking for pictures
   from the old world like this one...</span><br />
   He shows an old, crumpled photo that, while faded and discolored, still
@@ -119,7 +70,7 @@
   <span class="comment">This is a new lead for Michelle and Jack.</span>
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
-  Michelle takes the pot off the fire and Jack gets dishes from inside
+  Michelle takes the pots off the fire and Jack gets dishes from inside
   the bunker.<br />
   (Some of) The food is unfamiliar to Annie.<br />
   While eating, they discuss their mission.

qc-the_floor_is_water.html

@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@
   <br />
   James follows them and also says <span class="quote speech">clear</span>
   as he reaches the platform. Annie hesitates.<br />
-  Jack looks up at her from the next platform down and says:
+  Jack looks up to her from the next platform down and says:
   <span class="quote speech">Come on Annie, you got this, it&apos;s gonna
   hold.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m scared.</span><br />
@@ -46,36 +46,15 @@
   <span class="quote speech">We just need to get past the door, the water
   inside will be moving a lot slower.</span><br />
   Michelle and Annie decide to stay back, Jack and James approach the door
-  from the side. The two pick up a large rock and throw
-  <span class="comment">huck?</span>
-  it right in
+  from the side. The two pick up a large rock and throw it right in
   front of the door. It starts rolling immediately and, within seconds,
   tumbles off the edge.<br />
   Jack calls out to the girls:
-  <span class="quote speech">Looks like you were right.</span><br />
-  Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">Can you say that again?</span>
-  <br />
-  He says <span class="quote speech">no</span>, failing to
-  suppress a smile.<br />
-  James notices an access hatch a few meters up on the other side of
-  the door.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Look, up there, that thing seems
-  almost reachable.</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">You were right.</span><br />
 </p>
-<p>
-  The guys back away from the door and make their way over to the railing
-  at the edge of the platform. From there, they try to wade to the other
-  side. James goes ahead, taking a few cautious steps forward before the
-  current gets too strong. He attempts to hold on to the desolate railing
-  It breaks instantly, leaving hime with a roughly 20 centimeter long
-  piece of rust in his hand. Jack pulls him back from the strongest part
-  of the current.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Welp, I guess that&apos;s that. Not gonna
-  try this again.</span><br />
-  They return to the girls and they all decide to head back up.
-</p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Missing paragraph
+
+<p class="comment">this is in the middle of the chapter after they went
+  downstairs and tried to explore the turbine hall, back up in the tunnel
 </p>
 <p>
   Jack turns the key and the gate starts to move up, scrathcing and