(many files): minor revision (mostly fixing language problems)

Many of my comments like "translate this" or "what's the right word" have
been filled in.

Also, an honestly embarassing amount of spelling errors, missing words,
double words, and special characters that I normally replace (like using
– for a slightly longer dash instead of -).

I proofread everything. How this happens is beyond me but it does.
Regularly.

01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@
   door properly... Doesn't matter, too late now.
 </p>
 <p>
-  As he passes each of the presevation chambers, he looks into them. Empty,
+  As he passes each of the preservation chambers, he looks into them. Empty,
   empty, empty - nothing unexpected here. The others would have been woken
   up over time. His own chamber... He presses a few buttons to fully shut
   it down. The lamp in the ceiling turns off, the door closes, the status

02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html

@@ -126,13 +126,12 @@ Thank you. Appreciate it.
   are arranged in a strange order... Annie looks around. Lots of cables,
   a pile of paper, an empty cup, some pens and pencils, a screwdriver and
   other tools, a rubber duck – what an odd place to find a rubber
-  duck... A phone! She picks it up &ndash; no signal. <span class="comment">
+  duck... A phone! She picks it up &ndash; no dial tone. Weird. Maybe, it
-  Freizeichen?</span> Weird. Maybe, it isn&apos;t connected. She looks on
+  isn&apos;t connected. She looks on the floor and, sure enough, there is
-  the floor and, sure enough, there is the plug &ndash; not for much
+  the plug &ndash; not for much longer as she finds a phone socket and
-  longer as she finds a phone socket and plugs it in. Strange electrical
+  plugs it in. Strange electrical noises. She tries to dial a number but
-  noises. She tries to dial a number but nothing happens. She drops the
+  nothing happens. She drops the receiver on the cradle and turns back to
-  receiver on the cradle and turns back to the terminal. A couple random
+  the terminal. A couple random characters appear.
-  characters appear.
 </p>
 <pre class="terminal">
 %s;  i cant call anyone the phone is only making weird noises
@@ -163,7 +162,7 @@ AgriWorks Login: &#9608;
 <p>
   Annie is greeted by the friendly voice of an old man. After
   <span class="comment">a short exchange of &quot;Hello, how are
-  you?&quot;</span>, she begins explain the situation. He interrupts her
+  you?&quot;</span>, she begins to explain the situation. He interrupts her
   while relaying what Jack had written:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Cryo&nbsp;Facility? Are you sure?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Yes, it says here: Cryo Facility 53.</span><br />
@@ -353,10 +352,10 @@ AgriWorks Login: &#9608;
 <p>
   Annie reaches the corner. She looks left and right before crossing the
   street but not a single car is in sight. As she enters the station and
-  walks up the stairs, she glances at the display - 21 minutes until the
+  walks up the stairs, she glances at the display &ndash; 21 minutes until the
   next train arrives, that&apos;s a long wait... The station is completely
   devoid of life, nobody else is out here this late. Annie walks up to the
-  vending machine at the upper end of the staircase -
+  vending machine at the upper end of the staircase &ndash;
   <span class="quote non-speech">OUT&nbsp;OF&nbsp;ORDER</span>... Hrm.
   Mildly frustrated, she sits down on one of the benches and and starts
   rummaging in her bag. She finds her headphones and puts them on. At the

05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html

@@ -167,7 +167,7 @@
   you're here, we were about to discuss the call we had
   yesterday.</span><br />
   He introduces Annie and the othe group members and everyone sits down
-  at the table. Karl <span class="comment">ergreift das Wort</span>:
+  at the table. Then, addressing Annie, he begins to speak:
 </p>
 <p class="quote speech">
   <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@
   He reaches into his pocket and pulls out a key chain.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">If you want, you can try getting it - I
   can&apos;t because I disappeared from a birthday party with an excuse
-  and they are probably waiting for me to be back.</span><br />
+  and they&apos;re waiting for me to be back.</span><br />
   He places the keys in the center of the table.<br />
   Karl says: <span class="quote speech">I would love to, but I&apos;m
   afraid I can&apos;t run if things go south.</span><br />

06-Library_At_Night.html

@@ -85,8 +85,8 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Maybe this one?</span>
   She points at a key switch with multiple positions.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Only one way to find out.</span><br />
-  Isabelle grabs the keys and hands them to her. One of them fits and
+  Isabelle grabs the keys and tries them one by one until one of them fits
-  turns.
+  and turns.
 </p>
 <p>
   Fans come on; they hear the loud noise of air rushing through the
@@ -108,7 +108,12 @@
   and to enter something into the terminal. And then there&apos;s a list
   of hints and commands that might help us, and
   <span class="quote non-speech">Good luck!</span>...</span><br />
-  Isabelle pushes the buttons and they walk over to the terminal.
+  Isabelle pushes the buttons and Annie walks over to the terminal.
+</p>
+<p class="comment">
+  missing section, probably a &lt;pre class=&quot;terminal&quot;&gt;
+  where Annie, following the steps, enters a few hex codes followed by
+  &quot;hd2,vminux&quot;
 </p>
 <p>
   After a lot of typing into the terminal and figuring things out the hard
@@ -139,10 +144,9 @@
   struggles for a moment to get onto the crate. After she finally manages
   to get up, Isabelle pulls her through the window - not a moment too soon.
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">You, stop!</span>, <span class="comment">
+  <span class="quote speech">Stop! Stay where you are!</span>, a man yells
-  rephrase!!</span> a man yells at them from inside,
+  at them from inside.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Stay where you are!</span><br />
+  They start running.<br />
-  They start running. <br />
   <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m gonna catch you.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
@@ -150,17 +154,19 @@
   ledge on the side of a building, helping Annie up after herself. They
   continue running on the ledge until reaching a wall at the end of the
   alley. Isabelle jumps, grabs hold of the railing at the top, pulls
-  herself up, and climbs over it. <br />
+  herself up, and climbs over it.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Wait here.</span> She disappears. <br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Wait here.</span><br />
-  Annie looks around nervously. What if she was caught now? <br />
+  She disappears. Annie looks around nervously. What if she was caught now?
+  <br />
   A moment later, Isabelle returns with a ladder. Annie climbs up and
   pulls it up after herself. Isabelle takes it and stashes it on the other
   side of the embankment. They find themselves on the metro tracks.
   Annie looks around nervously.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">We need to get off of here.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s fine, we&apos;ll hear any approaching
+  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s fine, we&apos;ll hear any train
-  train long before we see it.</span> Isabelle points towards a close by
+  long before we see it.</span> Isabelle points towards a close-by
-  station and says <span class="quote speech">Central Square</span>.<br />
+  station and says <span class="quote speech">Central&nbsp;Square</span>.
+  <br />
   They run towards it along the tracks. Just as they make their way onto
   the platform, the rails start ringing.<br />
   Isabelle says with a smirk on her face:

ja-erosion-michelle_wakeup.html

@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@
   potatoes. Want some?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Now that you ask, I&apos;m slowly getting
   hungry. Did you make your usual spicy dip?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Yup.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Well, as best I could...</span><br />
   He gets up and walks over to the kitchen area, grabs a small bowl filled
   with a dark red-ish paste, and sets it on the table.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I had to improvise a little due to
@@ -91,8 +91,9 @@
   <span class="quote speech">The flakes they left us just aren&apos;t
   the same as fresh peppers. I had to add <i>a lot</i> to get even close
   to the usual spiciness.</span><br />
-  He grabs the <span class="comment">Backblech?</span> with potatoes
+  <!-- Or maybe, I just like pain lately. -->
-  and puts it back in the oven to re-heat.
+  He grabs the baking sheet with potatoes and puts it back in the oven to
+  re-heat.
 </p>
 <p>
   After the meal, they go to the bunker entrance and Jack opens the door
@@ -109,8 +110,7 @@
   The two decide to walk up to a <span class="comment">crest? ridge?</span>
   not far from them on the other side of the valley. Beyond it is Ivydale,
   once a large city housing just over a million people &ndash; only one of
-  <span class="comment">who? whom? which?</span> remains to behold its
+  whom remains to behold its overgrown ruins.
-  overgrown ruins.
   <br />
   <span class="comment">Jack is from Sentinel Shores.</span><br />
   Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I mean I knew it already but
@@ -123,12 +123,13 @@
   After a long while, she says: <span class="quote speech">Okay,
   let&apos;s go take a look at that uplink.</span><br />
   The two get up and walk back towards the bunker, looking for a path
-  somewhere to the left of it.<br />
+  somewhere to the left of it. Jack points to a structure a decent bit up
-  Jack points to a structure a decent bit up the mountain and says:
+  the mountain.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I think that&apos;s it.</span><br />
+  He says: <span class="quote speech">I think that&apos;s one of
+  the staircases.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Oh wow, there isn&apos;t much left.</span>
   <br />
-  Jack points at a few other things below it.<br />
+  Jack points at a few other things below it:
   <span class="quote speech">I think these are also part of it.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
@@ -143,9 +144,9 @@
   the uplink is down &ndash; it literally ...<i>is&nbsp;down</i>...</span>
   <br />
   Michelle reaches the edge and and sees what Jack had stopped for:
-  A large <span class="comment">wash?</span> extends downwards
+  A landslide and the erosion afterwards had left a deep wash extending
-  from the top of the mountain where a landslide had left nothing but
+  downwards from the top of the mountain, leaving nothing but a cliff and
-  a cliff and a huge pile of rubble. At the top of the mountain, teetering
+  a huge pile of rubble. At the top of the mountain, teetering
   on the edge, are two buildings &ndash; all that&apos;s left of the ground
   station. The rest of the buildings and the dish lay strewn around
   in pieces down below.

jc-night_watch.html

@@ -16,8 +16,7 @@
   She runs back. Platform 6 is nowhere to be seen.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Someone grabs her by
+  Someone grabs her by the shoulder.<br />
-  the shoulder.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Michelle?</span><br />
   She opens her eyes and lifts her head, looking around in confusion.
   It&apos;s dark. A tiny bit of flickering light illuminates the room
@@ -93,5 +92,14 @@
   for this wonderful dialog. :)<br />
   I&apos;m not sure if I should keep it though, because this isn&apos;t
   gonna go anywhere.</span>
+  <!--
+    Jack&apos;s reaction could possibly be modified to be explicitly
+    non-romantic.
+
+    Or break the fourth wall and say:
+      "Editor's note: Yup, they cringed about it."
+    I would rather not do that though, at least not without it being a
+    <span class="comment"> which is not part of the story.
+  -->
 </p>
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km-ran_when_parked.html

@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ going with this so I'll just leave it in here, commented out.
   to the fuel pressure gauge, slightly raising his voice to talk over
   the engine:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s progress already.</span><br />
-  The needle on the gauge slowly creeps to the right.<br />
+  The needle on the gauge slowly creeps towards the right.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Too slow though</span>, he adds after a
   moment.<br />
   He holds the button for a while, the engine keeps turning over,

ma-Escape-from_dome_city.html

@@ -156,10 +156,15 @@
   might take a while to get used to the sunlight.</span><br />
   The train begins to move up a slight incline. An automated announcement
   comes on:<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Dear passengers, welcome to the combined
+  <span class="quote speech">Welcome to the combined Sentinel&nbsp;Shores
-  Sentinel&nbsp;Shores and Ivydale local transit zone! Please keep in mind
+  and Ivydale regional transit zone! Please note: the last train back to
-  that the last train returning to Sunside Cove for today
+  Sunside Cove departs from Ivydale&nbsp;South at 8:15PM.
-  departs from Ivydale&nbsp;South at 10:15PM. Enjoy your travel!</span>
+  We wish you a pleasant journey.</span>
+  <!--
+  Herzlich willkommen im Verkehrsverbund Sentinel Shores und Efeuthal!
+  Bitte beachten Sie: Der letzte Zug zurück nach Sunside Cove fährt
+  um 20:15 Uhr. Wir wünschen Ihnen eine gute Reise.
+  -->
 </p>
 <p>
   The train leans into a curve; Annie hears the screeching of the wheels
@@ -186,9 +191,17 @@
   <span class="quote speech">We are now approaching Ivydale South. Your
   next connections are Metro line 7 to Ivydale Distillery from platform 5,
   HST1511 to Siren&apos;s Edge from platform 14, HST815 to Nova Metropolis
-  from platform 11. This train will continue on line 5 to
+  from platform 11. This train terminates here and will continue as line 5
-  Sentinel&nbsp;Shores Sea&nbsp;Market via Ivydale&nbsp;West,
+  to Sentinel&nbsp;Shores Sea&nbsp;Market via Ivydale&nbsp;West,
   Sentinel&nbsp;Shores Central Station.</span><br />
+  <!--
+  Wir erreichen in Kürze: Efeuthal Südbahnhof. Ihre nächsten Anschlüsse:
+  S7 nach Efeuthal Brauereiviertel von Bahnsteig 5, HST1511 nach
+  Siren's Edge von Bahnsteig 14, HST815 nach Nova Metropolis
+  von Bahnsteig 11. Dieser Zug endet hier und fährt weiter als S5 nach
+  Sentinel Shores Fischermarkt über Efeuthal Westkreuz,
+  Sentinel Shores Hauptbahnhof. Ausstieg in Fahrtrichtung rechts.
+  -->
   After a moment, Jack says quietly:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I wonder how much of these places is
   left...</span> Raising his voice back to a normal level, he adds:

mb-First_Steps_Outside.html

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 
 <h1> First Steps Outside</h1>
 <p>
-  The station is is much larger than any of the metro stations inside the
+  The station is much larger than any of the metro stations inside the
   dome. It has many platforms. Portions of the tall roof, supported by
   large stone pillars and rusty steel beams, have caved in and what&apos;s
   still standing has holes. Rays of light poke through the roof and holes
@@ -123,16 +123,13 @@
   to follow. After what feels like an eternity, she manages to get half-way
   down the wall.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">You can jump from there.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Are you sure? <span class="comment">translate:
+  <span class="quote speech">Are you sure?</span><br />
-  Ich trau mich nicht.</span></span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Just don&apos;t try to land standing up.
-  <span class="comment">Winkel&apos; Deine Knie etwas an</span> and
+  Bend your knees a bit and you&apos;ll be fine.</span><br />
-  you&apos;ll be fine.</span><br />
   Annie hesitates. She climbs down another one of the sandstone blocks.
   She looks down, looks back to the wall, looks down again, and finally
-  pushes herself off. Annie lands <span class="comment">adverb?</span>
+  pushes herself off. She lands with a heavy thud and Jack helps her up.
-  and Jack helps her up. They make their way across the fast-flowing river
+  They make their way across the fast-flowing river by stepping on large
-  by stepping on large stones in the water, and continue through the bushes
+  stones in the water, and continue through the bushes towards the bunker.
-  towards the bunker.
 </p>
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mc-welcome_home.html

@@ -32,8 +32,7 @@
   <span class="comment">research todo: radio protocol</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Michelle, we&apos;re just entering the
   valley.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">We? Someone came along?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">We? You got company?</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">wording? translate: mitgekommen</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Annie.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">I see. Am cooking &ndash; any food allergies
   or other dietary restrictions I should watch out for?</span><br />
@@ -64,8 +63,6 @@
   more minutes and reach the bunker. As they approach, the person they saw
   earlier &ndash; presumably Michelle &ndash; comes out of the bunker and
   adds some ingredients to a pot on a tripod over the flames.
-  <span class="comment">Is there a word for these metal rings with three
-  legs?</span>
   Jack introduces the two to each other &ndash; it <i>is</i> Michelle.
   <br />
   <span class="quote speech">So you join us out here after all?</span>
@@ -83,11 +80,10 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Is that a dog? There&apos;s a dog here!</span>
   <br />
   A medium-sized, brown dog runs out, sniffs them all, barks and then runs
-  off on the road, disappearing around a <span class="comment">translate:
+  off on the road, disappearing around an outcrop. A moment later, it
-  Felsvorsprung</span>. A moment later, it comes back, followed by a guy
+  comes back, followed by a guy wearing a long, dark green coat that has
-  wearing a long, dark green coat that has been patched a few times.
+  been patched a few times. He is wearing a backpack and holds a long
-  He is wearing a backpack and holds a long staff, using it as a
+  staff, using it as a walking stick.
-  <span class="comment">Wanderstab? Cane?</span>.
 </p>
 <p>
   The stranger says: <span class="quote speech">Good evening!</span><br />

na-Telescope.html

@@ -7,10 +7,9 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Wanna drive?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Sure.</span><br />
   He puts the map back, hands her the keys, and the four get in the truck.
-  James joins Michelle in the front and has Dora jump in
+  James joins Michelle in the front and has Dora jump into the footwell at
-  <span class="comment">translate: in seinen Fu&szlig;raum</span>, Annie
+  his feet, Annie and Jack take the rear seats. A few moments later,
-  and Jack take the rear seats. A few moments later, Michelle pulls onto
+  Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.<br />
-  the street in front of the bunker.<br />
   James asks her: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
   highway. If it&apos;s in even somewhat decent shape, I&apos;d say
@@ -52,9 +51,9 @@
   one off to the side behind it is a smooth round dome with a slot cut out
   of it for a telescope to peek through. Well, it <i>was</i> smooth at one
   point &ndash; now, it has many holes with a tree growing out of the
-  largest one. The geodesic dome has ivy vines clinging to it but looks
+  largest one. The geodesic dome is partially covered in ivy vines but
-  otherwise surprisingly intact. The other buildings look like mostly
+  looks otherwise intact. The other buildings look like mostly unremarkable
-  unremarkable ruins in various stages of decay.
+  ruins in various stages of decay.
 </p>
 <p>
   Michelle says:<br />
@@ -73,7 +72,8 @@
   <span class="quote speech">It works similarly, just for imaging a much
   lower part of the electromagnetic spectrum. Stars give off a bunch more
   than just visible light.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Can we try that one?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">I have no idea what you just said but can we
+  try that one?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">A lot of things would have to go right for
   that.</span>
 </p>

oa-Lab_Rat-Emily_lab_incident.html

@@ -14,9 +14,8 @@
   Lena shakes her head.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">I don&apos;t want to spend my remaining days
   alone. Just don&apos;t do it, please.</span><br />
-  Emily gets up and paces around the module. <span class="comment"> Is that
+  Emily gets up and paces around the module. Her eyes fall on the drawers
-  proper grammar?</span> Her eyes fall on the drawers in the adjacent
+  in the adjacent maintenance module. An idea forms in her head...<br />
-  maintenance module. An idea forms in her head...<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Emily, where are you going?</span><br />
   She steps inside and rummages through a bunch of drawers, leaving them
   open as she opens the next one.<br />

pa-Bare_Necessities.html

@@ -49,9 +49,9 @@
   roughly sorted into categories:
   Hand tools, boxes full of hardware, household chemicals, bars of soap,
   a few clocks and watches, books, and more. Half of the store seems to be
-  dedicated to food – though the shelves are mostly empty.
+  dedicated to food – though these shelves are mostly empty.
-  In the back is a counter. Jack is talking to the man behind it who
+  In the back is a counter, overlooking the whole store. Jack is talking
-  appears to be in his 60s.<br />
+  to the man behind it who appears to be in his 60s.<br />
   The man says: <span class="quote speech">No, we don&apos;t sell food.
   What you see there is strictly rationed. Since the <span class="comment"
   >river name</span> has changed course, we don&apos;t even have enough
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@
 <p>
   While they wait, the small dog runs up again. They play fetch until
   a group of people approaches, the man from the store among them.
-  A few handshakes later, Jack repeats his suggestion. A man in his 40s,
+  A few handshakes later, Jack repeats his pitch. A man in his 40s,
   who seems to be in charge, says:
   <span class="quote speech">Your intentions are ... ambitious. I doubt
   you can do it but I don&apos;t see why we shouldn&apos;t let you try.
@@ -116,6 +116,9 @@
   <span class="quote speech">We&apos;ll need at least two.</span><br />
   A few members of the group discuss among themselves for a moment.
   Then, the one in charge turns to Jack again:<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">If you can do it within two weeks, we&apos;ll
+  provide food for two months.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Challenge accepted.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Okay, we have a deal.</span><br />
   A few people keep questioning Jack and the feasibility of his idea.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Ladies and gentlemen, whether it can be done

pb-Fine_Print.html

@@ -0,0 +1,76 @@
+<!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> Fine Print </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><svg class="hidden_filter"><filter id="crunchy_blur" x="0" y="0"><feFlood x="4" y="4" height="2" width="2"/><feComposite width="6" height="6" in2="SourceGraphic"/><feTile result="a"/><feComposite in="SourceGraphic" in2="a" operator="in"/><feMorphology operator="dilate" radius="1.4"/><feGaussianBlur stdDeviation="2.2"></feGaussianBlur></filter></svg><div class="back"><a href="index.html">&lt;</a></div>
+
+<h1>Fine Print</h1>
+
+<p>
+  <!--
+    the fact that Mary sits in the front is already a given
+  -->
+  They drive on a dirt road alongside the dried-out <span class="comment">
+  river name</span>. The road is in pretty poor condition and they get
+  shaken thoroughly.<br />
+  Mary appears to be having a blast:
+  <span class="quote speech">Faster! Faster!</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">I don&apos;t think Annie would appreciate
+  that.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Aww.</span><br />
+  Annie says <span class="quote speech">thanks</span> from the rear seats.
+</p>
+<p>
+  <!--
+    assumptions:
+    - walking speed: 5km/h
+    - driving speed: 20 km/h
+    - walking time: 30 min
+
+    -> distance is 2.5km
+
+    -> speed = distance / time
+    -> time * speed = distance
+    -> time = distance / speed
+
+    -> time = 2.5km / 20 km/h
+    -> time = 0.125h
+    -> time = 7.5 min
+  -->
+  After a bit less than ten minutes of driving, Mary points to a structure
+  extending into the river bed and says:
+  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s it.</span><br />
+  Jack pulls over and parks the truck, and they get out. They walk through
+  the tall grass towards the structure. A bridge further upstream catches
+  Jack&apos;s attention.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Is that a road or a railway?</span><br />
+  Mary says: <span class="quote speech">Railway &ndash; why?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">What&apos;s the condition like?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Not sure, it&apos;s been a while...
+  We used to play there as kids, we even got a railcar to move once.</span>
+  <br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Sounds like serviceable enough to me. Do you
+  know where it goes?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a train station a bit that way,
+  with a bunch of other ruins in the area.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">And the other direction?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">I don&apos;t know. We followed it pretty far,
+  the only thing we found is a switch.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Okay. Would be incredibly useful if that ended
+  up somewhere in Ivydale.</span>
+</p>
+<p>
+  They reach the structure. It&apos;s the entrance to a tunnel
+  with a few walls that pertrude into the river and two
+  <span class="comment">weers? translate: Stauwehre / Wehre</span>, one for
+  controlling the <span class="comment">inflow? tanslate: Zufluss</span>,
+  one for a bypass. The floor of the tunnel sits significantly beneath
+  the river bed and, while the river bed is completely dry, there is still
+  some water inside.
+  
+  <!--
+    - trockenes Wehr am Einlass
+    - water in the tunnel
+    - bridge nearby
+    - look at the large buried tank / branching point
+    - go upstream to see where the river has gone
+  -->
+</p>
+
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ph-diesel_creek.html

@@ -29,21 +29,26 @@
   over there – and preferably without trees growing out of
   it...</span><br />
   He points to a small excavator that sits askew on a thick tree trunk
-  that had grown thrugh the floor and out the side.
+  that had grown through the floor and out the side.
-  <span class="comment">Do these tiny excavators with large glass cabs
+  <span class="comment">Compact excavator? Tiny excavator?</span><br />
-  have a specific name?</span><br />
   James asks: <span class="quote speech">Why not just use this one?
   What&apos;s wrong with it?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">This thing&apos;s just done for. Apart from it
-  being a pile of rust, it&apos;s missing its tracks <span class="comment">
+  being a pile of rust, it&apos;s missing its tracks, the hydraulics for
-  treads?</span>, the hydraulics for moving the bucket, and it looks like
+  moving the bucket, and it looks like the inside of the cab got completely
-  the inside of the cab got completely dismantled.</span><br />
+  dismantled.</span><br />
   They take a quick look at the other machines around them. There is the
-  other, much smaller excavator, a <span class="comment">Kipper?</span>,
+  other, much smaller excavator, a dump truck, a <span class="comment">
-  a <span class="comment">Wie hei&szlig;t diese Maschine mit
+  what's the name of that machine with a conveyor belt that sorts
-  F&ouml;rderband, die Material sortiert?</span>, and two
+  large rocks and rubble from sand?
-  <span class="comment">Radlader? Baccos?</span>. All of them are rusted
+  <!--
-  beyond repair and missing integral parts.<br />
+    ChatGPT says "screening plant" but also refers to it as a
+    "vibrating belt sorter". Research that.
+    It also gives a good description of what it does:
+    "splits rubble into chunks, fines, and dust."
+  -->
+  </span>, and two loaders. All of them
+  are rusted beyond repair and missing integral parts.<br />
 </p>
 <p>
   A bit further down the valley, they approach a much larger collection of
@@ -56,10 +61,9 @@
   <span class="quote speech">So these machines dug out the dome?</span>
   <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Well... no. That was mostly done using
-  explosives, conveyor belts, and trains. They used <span class="comment">
+  explosives, conveyor belts, and trains. They used loaders to get the
-  Radlader? Baccos?</span> to load stuff onto the conveyors but most of
+  stuff onto conveyors but most of the machines here were used in
-  the machines here were used in construction after the digging was
+  construction after the digging was done.</span><br />
-  done.</span><br />
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
   research that needs to be done:
@@ -74,15 +78,31 @@
   Annie calls the others over to one of the buildings.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Look what I found...</span><br />
   Michelle arrives before Jack and she laughs. He arrives a moment
-  later and peeks inside. There sits a <span class="comment">
+  later and peeks inside. There sits a cable shovel, partially covered
-  cable shovel?</span>, partially covered in rubble from the caved-in
+  in rubble from the caved-in roof &ndash; rusty but surprisingly intact.
-  roof &ndash; rusty but surprisingly intact.<br />
+  <br />
   Jack says: <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s ... uhhh ... kind of
   a historical artifact.</span><br />
   <!--
+  "I mean, everything here is a historical artifact."
+  "Fair enough, but this especially so."
+
   There is also a kinda small hydraulic excavator.
   They decide to make both work.
-   -->
+
+  This is for another chapter but here is a list of things they might do:
+  - strip parts off of other machines
+  - modify or create parts at the Ivydale train yard
+  - swap out a beyond-repair engine - with a different one that
+    doesn't fit ofc
+  - weld things to the machines for botched but improved
+    structural integrity
+  - maybe come up with an alternative for hydraulic fluid if it isn't too
+    far fetched, alternatively scavenge it from other machines or trade
+    for it
+  - find a grabber attachment for the excavator
+  - DIY electronics
+  -->
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="comment">missing section</span>

pk--lena_first_contact.html

@@ -40,10 +40,10 @@
 </p>
 <p>
   After a while, she gets it loose and it falls towards her.
-  She struggles to keep her balance for a moment as the cover lands wedged
+  She struggles to keep her balance for a moment as the cover lands
-  between her legs and the central <span class="comment">post? beam?</span>
+  wedged between her legs and the central support beam holding the dish.
-  holding the dish. With some effort, she manages to wrangle it to th other
+  With some effort, she manages to wrangle it to the other side of the
-  side of the cable.<br />
+  cable.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">James, Annie, can you catch this? Careful,
   it&apos;s heavy.</span><br />
   The two stand across from each other and extend their arms. Michelle

qb-Banished.html

@@ -13,22 +13,21 @@
   said.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">...ohhhhh. Congrats!</span><br />
   The guards grab her by the arms and drag her away.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Move.</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Move!</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   They bring her to a room adjacent to the main court room where a bunch
   of important-looking people in suits are waiting for her. They introduce
   themselves and they all, including herself, sit down around a somewhat
-  large table. One of the suits takes the word:<br />
+  large table. One of the suits addresses her:<br />
-  <span class="comment">Does that work in English?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Before you go to trial, we have something
   to discuss with you. You are being accused of breaking and entering,
   robbery, interfering with law enforcement, compromising operationally
   critical systems, and conspiracy of terrorism. Some of these charges
   alone will land you in prison for a long time &ndash; unless you take
   this deal...</span><br />
-  He grabs few sheets of paper from his bag <span class="comment">
+  He grabs few sheets of paper from his briefcase and slides them over.
-  Aktentasche?</span> and slides them over.<br />
+  <br />
   <span class="quote speech">Basically admit to everything you&apos;re
   accused of and you will be banished instead of going to prison.</span>
   <br />
@@ -46,8 +45,7 @@
   <span class="quote speech">And in practical terms?</span><br />
   Another one of the suits answers:
   <span class="quote speech">There is an ongoing power outage to parts
-  of the city. We will have to send a group of people
+  of the city. We will have to send an expedition outside to fix it.
-  <span class="comment">delegation?</span> outside to fix it.
   You will join them and not return.</span><br />
   She looks back at the pages.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Okaay.</span><br />

va-Alone-Lena_death.html

@@ -175,7 +175,7 @@
   thinking about them. She walks to the <span class="comment">???</span>
   module and lays down on the floor staring into the sky.
   <span class="comment">This module has to be described at some point
-  before this. It has panorama windows to all sides and a glass ceiling.
+  before this. It has panorama windows to all sides and a ceiling of large
-  </span>
+  glass panels.</span>
 </p>
 <p class="copyright">Copyright &#169; 2023-2025 Jan Danielzick (aka. BodgeMaster) &ndash; All rights reserved.</p><script>let spans = ["<span class=\"paper green\">", "<span>"]; let pre_texts = document.getElementsByTagName("pre"); for (let i = 0; i < pre_texts.length; i++) {if (pre_texts[i].className != "paper") continue; let lines = pre_texts[i].innerHTML.split("\n"); let result = ""; for (let j = 0; j < lines.length; j++) {if (lines[j].length >= 80) result = result + spans[j%2] + lines[j] + "</span>\n"; else result = result + spans[j%2] + lines[j] + " ".repeat(80-lines[j].length) + "</span>\n";} pre_texts[i].innerHTML = result;}</script></body></html>

vb--Emily_incoming_call.html

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
   drrrrrrrrinnng
 </p>
 <p>
-  Emily finds herself laying on the floor, still staring into the sky.
+  Emily finds herself lying on the floor, still staring into the sky.
   She has no idea how long she had been laying here, but it must have been
   many hours.
 </p>
@@ -34,11 +34,11 @@
 </p>
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">On my way, I&apos;m on my way.</span> she
-  says in a soft <span class="comment">matten?</span> voice as she starts
+  says in a soft, faint voice as she starts walking. The phone rings a few
-  walking. The phone rings a few more times but stops before she can make
+  more times but stops before she can make it there. She enters the main
-  it there. She enters the main control room and heads over to the
+  control room and heads over to the communications section where she finds
-  communications section where she finds the terminal lit up. She sits
+  the terminal lit up. She sits down and, without reading the message
-  down and, without reading the message there, starts typing.
+  there, starts typing.
 </p>
 <pre class="terminal">
 <span class="blur">Incoming connection. This is blurred text. You shouldn&apos;t be able to read it.</span>
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ MICHELLE @ EARTH-53 <b>&gt;</b> Ok. Ctrl+B us a few times when you&apos;re back.
   rack. She hesitates for a moment before grabbing one. With the other
   hand, she opens the tap. It starts spitting a brown liquid with clumps.
   <span class="quote speech">Ugh.</span> She opens it up fully and waits
-  for the water to clear up &ndash; and then waits a bit more just to be
+  for the water to clear up &ndash; and then waits a bit longer just to be
   sure. Finally, she fills up the beaker and takes a cautious sip.
   Tastes fine.
 </p>

zb-Pancakes-reaching_nova_metropolis.html

@@ -5,10 +5,10 @@
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Good morning, Annie! Pancakes are ready.</span>
   <br />
-  Jack takes his hand off her shoulder. She pushes herself up from her bed
+  Jack takes his hand off her shoulder. She pushes herself up from
-  and looks around in confusion. James is driving the bus on a surprisingly
+  her bed and looks around in confusion. James is driving the bus on
-  very intact highway through a seemingly endless landscape of sand and
+  a surprisingly very intact highway through a seemingly endless landscape
-  sparse vegetation. The sun is already high up in the sky and
+  of sand and sparse vegetation. The sun is already high in the sky and
   yesterday&apos;s mountains are in the distance far behind them. Jack goes
   to wake up Michelle, then he tells James who stops the bus and turns off
   the engine.
@@ -20,18 +20,15 @@
   He also places a few jars on the table:
   Honey, Chocco <span class="comment">TODO: Add an advert for Chocco
   somewhere earlier in the story. It&apos;s the in-universe equivalent
-  of Nutella.</span>, and cinnamon with sugar <span class="comment">Is that
+  of Nutella.</span>, and cinnamon sugar. James gets up from the driver's
-  combination as ubiquitous worldwide as it is in Germany? If so, does it
+  seat and Dora follows him, wagging her tail. They all sit down around
-  have a proper name?</span>. James gets up from the driver's seat and Dora
+  the table, including Dora who sits on the floor and gives them big puppy
-  follows him, wagging her tail. They all sit down around the table,
+  eyes.<br />
-  including Dora who sits on the floor and <span class="comment">macht
+  <span class="quote speech">Dora, down.&emsp;&emsp;&emsp;Good girl!</span>
-  gro&szlig;e augen</span>.<br />
-  <span class="comment">What is the English command for a dog to lay
-  down?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">So when are we gonna reach
-  the &lt;mining company&gt; pit?</span><br />
+  the <span class="comment">mining company</span> pit?</span><br />
   Jack looks at James. James tilts his head slightly and shrugs.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Like five hours ago?</span><br />
   <!-- Jack's shift until midnight, James' shift until 6AM, plan was for
@@ -66,8 +63,8 @@
 </p>
 <p>
   James returns inside and yawns.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">The idea of a nap is very entising
+  <span class="quote speech">The idea of a nap is very enticing right
-  <span class="comment">spelling?</span> right about now...</span><br />
+  about now...</span><br />
   Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">Well, you&apos;ve earned
   it.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Thinking about it but not yet...</span><br />

zd-Nova_Metropolis.html

@@ -11,11 +11,10 @@
 <p>
   Michelle gets her attention: <span class="quote speech">Look, almost
   there!</span><br />
-  She getures to the left. Annie leans out of her seat and back to see what
+  She gestures to the left. Annie looks in the direction. An undefined
-  Michelle is pointing to. An undefined shape is visible in the far
+  shape is visible in the far distance. Michelle takes an exit onto another
-  distance. Michelle takes an exit onto another highway in that direction.
+  highway towards it. After not too long, the undefined shape turns into
-  After not too long, the undefined shape turns into the unmistakable
+  the unmistakable skyline of a large city.
-  skyline of a large city.
 </p>
 <p>
   They pass a huge sign with completely washed-out colors that still
@@ -32,7 +31,7 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Why are you going so slow?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Im going exactly speed limit - 50 km/h.</span>
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">50? That's faster than the speed limit in
+  <span class="quote speech">50? That&apos;s faster than the speed limit in
   Sunside Cove yet this feels so slow...</span><br />
   Michelle chuckles.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">This is what it feels like coming off the
@@ -43,8 +42,8 @@
   The buildings around them get taller and taller. The mix of smaller and
   medium-sized houses turns into blocks of five-story buildings which in
   turn turn into blocks of even taller buildings until the sides are lined
-  with sky scrapers with facades of glass, concrete, and steel towering
+  with skyscrapers with facades of glass, concrete, and steel towering
-  over over the road. Annie points them out:<br />
+  over the road. Annie points them out:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Looks like this was all abandoned just
   recently. Not even a smashed window.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Over there.</span><br />
@@ -60,7 +59,8 @@
   is Nova Metropolis. Well, all of them but Jack.<br />
   Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I thought sleep was for
   the weak?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I'm just gonna own that one today.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">I&apos;m just gonna own that one today.</span>
+  <br />
   He throws himself onto his bed, not even making an effort to lay down in
   a comfortable position. His words are muffled through the mattres:
   <span class="quote speech">Good night.</span>

zy-Landing_Troubles.html

@@ -1,9 +1,8 @@
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 <h1>Landing Troubles</h1>
 <p>
-  The escape pod <span class="comment">Is there a word that makes this sound
+  The emergency escape vehicle enters the atmosphere with a jolt.
-  more like it&apos;s the technical term?</span> enters the atmosphere with
+  <span class="comment">Honestly, I have no idea what it is like to
-  a jolt. <span class="comment">Honestly, I have no idea what it is like to
   enter the atmosphere. Needs research.</span> The displays on the control
   panel flicker and start showing random symbols. Error messages start
   scrolling over the screen. <span class="quote speech">Uh oh.</span>
@@ -15,13 +14,14 @@
   keyboard. The screen clears and shows the word &quot;HALTED&quot;.
   <!-- TODO: replace this with SPARCstation Stop+A -->
   Then, she flips a bunch of switches to unlock the controls. Clicking and
-  clanging under the control panel. <span class="comment">Throttle lever and
+  clanging under the control panel. The throttle levers and position
-  position controls start floating</span> Looking at the next page of her
+  controls start floating. Looking at the next page of her notes, she
-  notes, she realizes that the order has been messed up. Again, she
+  realizes that the order has been messed up. Again, she scrambles through
-  scrambles through the pages until she finds the next instructions.
+  the pages until she finds the next instructions.
-  &quot;Wait until the external pressure gauge reads &lt;xyz&gt; and release
+  <span class="quote non-speech">Wait until the external pressure gauge
-  the heat shield.&quot; She looks at the analog gauges at the top of the
+  reads <span class="comment">xyz</span> and release the heat shield.</span>
-  panel - there it ts. &lt;less than xyz value&gt;.
+  She looks at the analog gauges at the top of the panel - there it is.
+  <span class="comment">barely less than xyz value</span>.
 </p>
 <p>
   The shield detaches with a bang. Emily flips the switch for the fuel

zz--end.html

@@ -63,9 +63,8 @@
   Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over
   there!</span> She points into the sky behind them.
   <span class="quote speech">A parachute...</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">Jack: She has more luck than sense.</span><br />
+  Jack says: <span class="quote speech">This girl has more luck than
-  <span class="comment">reaction needed &ndash; something along the lines
+  sense.</span><br />
-  of &quot;Sie hat mehr Gl&uuml;ck als Verstand&quot;</span><br />
   They watch as it disappears between the buildings.
 </p>
 <p>
@@ -73,14 +72,14 @@
   Jack had insisted on bringing.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Maybe, she can hear us from here...</span>
   <br />
-  She hooks up the battery, flips the power switch, and turns the frequency
+  She hooks up the battery, flips the power switch, and nudges the frequency
-  dial until the needle is in the position that Jack had marked.<br />
+  dial until the needle is in the position Jack had marked.<br />
   <span class="comment">Note to self: The battery is a car battery. Make
   that clear at some point before this chapter. Maybe include the part where
   Jack insists on bringing it.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Emily, can you hear us? Are you okay?</span>
   <br />
-  They hear a slightly distorted but clearly happy response through the
+  They hear a slightly distorted but audibly relieved response through the
   noise:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Yes... Yes. I&apos;m alive... I made it.</span>
   <br />