'zz' One Step For A Child: revision
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The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
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the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
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where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
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where Emily would land, they had decided to wait atop one of the
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tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
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setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
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while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
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<span class="quote speech">It's time. Emily will be entering the
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atmosphere right about now.</span><br />
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They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does
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the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her
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the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing
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disappointment.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Don't worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
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as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
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<span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
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Jack says <span class="quote speech">Don't worry, I got you.</span>
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as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Oooh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
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start walking towards the edge.
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handing them back to him.<br />
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It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size.
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For a few minutes, not much seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
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bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
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disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer.
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bigger, slowly turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
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disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shields as it comes closer.
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Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above
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are pretty slim, but something's not right.</span><br />
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As if on cue, the rear end of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
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cloud of fragments. The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
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multiple buildings down with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says
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anything for a while as they watch the buildings around the impact
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crumble and the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a
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mix of shock and awe.
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down multiple buildings along with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody
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says a word as they watch the buildings around the impact crumble and
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the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a mix of shock
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and awe.
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<p>
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Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over
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