01 Wakr up: extensive revision, remove obsolete outline

01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

@@ -2,18 +2,18 @@
 
 <h1> Wake Up! </h1>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">Ahh fuck!</span> Jack exclaims in pain as he
+  <span class="quote speech">Awh fuck!</span> Jack exclaims in pain as he
   wakes up. He has a terrible headache. While moving his hands up to hold
-  his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.<br />
+  his head, he realizes that his entire body hurts.
-  <span class="quote speech">Owwowwowwowwoww... Ouch!</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Owowowww... Ouch!</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Emergency defrost complete. Entering low power
+  An automated voice announces: <span class="quote speech">Emergency
-  mode.</span> announces an automated voice. <br />
+  defrost complete. Entering low power mode.</span><br />
-  He thinks: <span class="quote non-speech">Get it together, Jack!
+  Jack thinks: <span class="quote non-speech">Get it together, Jack!
   You knew this was gonna happen. You have trained for this. Where are the
   meds again? ...</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  Waiting for the painkillers to kick in, Jack stays in his preservation
+  Waiting for the painkillers to kick in, he stays in his preservation
   chamber until he is fully awake. As he stands there, looking out of the
   small window in the door, he notices something off. The bunker looks
   different from yesterday - not yesterday! That was years ago, probably
@@ -24,30 +24,31 @@
 <p>
   The pressurized air hisses in the lines as the door of the preservation
   chamber swings aside. Jack steps out into the bunker, breathes the musty
-  air, and looks around. The light shining out of his chamber reveals the
+  air, and looks around. The light shining out of his chamber reveals a
-  dirty floor. The table and chairs in front of him, as well as the kitchen
+  dirty floor. The table and chairs in front of him as well as the kitchen
-  across the room, are covered in dust and all exposed bits of metal have
+  across the room are covered in dust and all exposed bits of metal have
   rust. The red night lights on the ceiling are dimly illuminating the rest
   of the bunker. He looks to the left: The wall is lined with other
   preservation chambers, all but one of them being powered down.
-  In the corner is a minicomputer in a half-height rack and next to it a
+  In the corner is the minicomputer controlling the bunker, a half-height
-  teleprinter. Along the rear wall are desks holding a radio, a terminal,
+  rack filled to the brim with devices, and next to it a teleprinter, a
-  and some boxes &ndash; and above them a phone on the wall &ndash; nothing
+  computer-controlled typewriter. Along the rear wall are desks holding a
-  out of the ordinary here. He looks to the right: More preservation
+  radio and a terminal, a device with a keyboard and a screen, and above
-  chambers. Instead of a wall, there&apos;s the bunker door &ndash; door is
+  them a phone on the wall &ndash; nothing out of the ordinary here.
-  a bit of an understatement, it&apos;s a massive gate. A small slither of
+  He looks to the right: More preservation chambers. Instead of a wall,
-  light passes under it. <span class="quote speech">These fucking idiots...
+  there&apos;s the bunker door &ndash; door is a bit of an understatement,
-  They didn&apos;t reseal it properly.</span>
+  it&apos;s a massive gate. A small slither of light passes under it.
+  <span class="quote speech">These fucking idiots... They didn&apos;t
+  reseal it properly.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   He walks over to the door&apos;s control panel. The paint is flaking off
   revealing the rust underneath. Jack attempts to press a couple buttons
-  but they get stuck and nothing happens.
+  but they get stuck and nothing happens. A couple expletives and banging
-  <span class="quote speech">Fuck.</span>
+  on the panel later, he turns back to the inside of the bunker looking
-  He turns back to the inside of the bunker looking for tools,
+  for tools, contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple years
-  contemplating the tradeoff between waking up a couple years too soon and
+  too soon and getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked inside
-  getting slowly poisoned by the air, and being locked inside a bunker due
+  a bunker due to a bunch of apparent troglodytes unable to close a door
-  to a bunch of apparent troglodytes who are unable to close a door
   properly... Doesn&apos;t matter, too late now.
 </p>
 <p>
@@ -63,7 +64,8 @@
   He continues past the remaining empty chambers to the back of the bunker.
 </p>
 <p class="comment">
-  Jack opens the boxes on the desks looking for tools. He also rummages
+  Jack notices the toolbox is missing.
+  Jack opens the drawers on the desks looking for tools. He also rummages
   through the cabinets and drawers in the kitchen area.
   After finding some object that he could use as a screwdriver, he returns
   to the door, taking off the control panel. He realizes that he has no
@@ -72,25 +74,25 @@
 </p>
 <p>
   Jack returns to the desk with the terminal. He flips the switch on the
-  desk lamp. It flickers for a moment and turns off again. He leans over
+  desk lamp. The lamp flickers for a moment and turns off again. He flips
-  the terminal and pushes the power switch &ndash; Bonk! At least this
+  the switch back and leans over the terminal to turn it on &ndash;
-  seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to warm up, he walks
+  Bonk! At least this seems to work. While waiting for the picture tube to
-  over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front of it. He inspects
+  warm up, he walks over to the rack and sits down on the floor in front
-  the status lights on the various devices thinking aloud:
+  of it. He inspects the status lights on the various devices, thinking
-  <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle, cryogenics
+  aloud: <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle,
-  control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is powered up
+  cryogenics control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is
-  &ndash; all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let&apos;s
+  powered up &ndash; all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down,
-  change that...</span>
+  let&apos;s change that...</span> He pushes the power button and hears
-  He pushes the power button and hears the spindle spinning up. The power
+  the spindle motor kick on. The power button blinks. There is some
-  button blinks. There is some intermittent rattling from the drive,
+  intermittent rattling from the drive, probably a shot bearing.
-  probably a shot bearing. He hears the platters inside accelerate for an
+  He hears the platters inside accelerate for an unusually long time.
-  unusually long time. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive
+  Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be ready.
-  to be ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by
+  Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a ringing
-  a ringing scratching noise. <span class="quote speech">Of course.</span>
+  scratching noise. <span class="quote speech">Of course.</span> He
-  He quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the
+  quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the
   spindle motor turns off, followed by the platters slowly decelerating.
-  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s gonna be an ugly head
+  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s gonna be an ugly head crash.
-  crash.</span>
+  No manuals for me, I guess...</span>
 </p>
 <p>
   He gets up and walks over to the phone. Maybe, the lines to
@@ -101,8 +103,9 @@
   <span class="quote speech">Welp, that&apos;s that.</span> He puts it
   back on the wall.
 </p>
-<p class="comment">
+<p>
-  TODO: tie this together
+  In an attempt to find anything useful, he sits down at the terminal and
+  logs on.
 </p>
 <pre class="terminal">
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@@ -115,41 +118,9 @@ Welcome to INUX!
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 </pre>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote thought">Over a hundred years, hm...</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">So it&apos;s been over a hundred years,
+  hm...</span> He starts going through the files, hoping he misremembered
+  where the manuals were stored, but to no avail, they are gone.
 </p>
 
-<p class="comment">
-  Outline of missing section(s):
-</p>
-<ul>
-  <li class="comment">
-    Jack checks on the food and clothes and that the kitchen and bathroom
-    are in working order and that he really has no tools and manuals
-    <ul>
-      <li class="comment">
-        he could find things that he could turn into tools but that ofc
-        doesn&apos;t solve his problem if he doesn&apos;t have a manual
-        for fixing the door
-      </li>
-    </ul>
-  </li>
-  <li class="comment">
-    Jack tries to dial into a bunch of known modems, finally succeeding
-    when reaching AgriWorks
-    <ul>
-      <li class="comment">
-        &quot;They changed the host name... I wonder if this is still the
-        same computer. Lemme try my login... Yup, it is.&quot;
-      </li>
-      <li class="comment">
-        Neotek Dynamics, and more specifically Jack himself, was somehow
-        involved in setting that up
-      </li>
-    </ul>
-  </li>
-  <li class="comment">
-    Annie conversation setup (duh)
-  </li>
-</ul>
-
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