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This has been in the works for two weeks now and it still isn't done. For now, I'm probably gonna turn my attention elsewhere.master
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<h1> Overdue Maintenance </h1>
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<h1> Overdue Maintenance </h1>
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Jack parks the truck just before the exit of a tunnel and they get out.
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Jack parks the truck just before the exit of a tunnel and the four get
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Roaring water echoes from somewhere deep below. Annie grabs her bag and
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out. Roaring water echoes from somewhere in the distance. Annie grabs
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goes ahead. The tunnel wall to the right features doors, large gates,
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her bag and follows the others towards the end of the tunnel. The wall
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and windows that allow a peek into abandoned offices, storage spaces, and
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to the right features doors, large gates, and a few windows that allow
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control rooms. The end of the tunnel connects to a balcony with rusted
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a peek into abandoned offices, storage spaces, and a machine shop.
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metal walkways going to either side, extending into a narrow ravine.
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The end of the tunnel connects to a large balcony extending into
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She steps onto it, making sure to keep her distance to the rusty railing,
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a narrow ravine with rusted metal walkways going to either side.
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and looks around. The walkway to the right connects to the top of a dam
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blocking the ravine. A couple bushes, flowers, and a small tree grow
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there, partially concealing the rusty <span class="comment">armatures?
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</span> and the wall is green from moss and small ferns. Water flows
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over the spillway, falling into the depths below where it joins a
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torrent of water rushing out of two big pipes at the bottom of the
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ravine. The other walkway leads to a freestanding staircase going all
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the way down.
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Jack walks up next to her, grabbing hold of the railing, trying to
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They walk onto it and take a look around: The walkway to the left
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shake it but it doesn't budge.<br />
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goes to a freestanding staircase tower that leads down and is just
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<span class="quote speech">Looks like it's gonna hold.</span><br />
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as rusty as the walkway itself. The walkway to the right connects
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He turns to the right and steps onto the walkway before having an idea.
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to the top of a concrete dam blocking the ravine. A couple bushes,
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He turns to Annie and Michelle:<br />
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flowers, and a small tree grow there, partially hiding rusty cranks
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<span class="quote speech">Ladies first.</span><br />
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and levers, and the dam is green from moss and small ferns growing
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While Annie is still thinking about a response, Michelle's response
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all over its side. Water flows over the spillway, falling into the
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is immediate:<br />
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depths below. To the right of the dam and walkway, inset into
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<span class="quote speech">Thanks but you can go ahead.</span><br />
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the same side of the ravine as the tunnel exit, is a wall with
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<span class="quote speech">You two are lighter though.</span>
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a front of windows.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Annie, check this out!</span><br />
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Jack gestures for her to come to the railing. She hesitates.<br />
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They walk to the dam, look into the windows
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<span class="quote speech">That railing is gonna hold, yeah?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Idunno?...</span> He attempts to push
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<span class="comment">shove?</span> it and bangs agains it –
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Some events have changed, this needs to be tied together again.
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it doesn't budge. <span class="quote speech">Probably?</span><br />
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She walks over and cautiously leans on it to peer down. The water
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flowing over the spillway joins a torrent of water rushing out of
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two big pipes deep below, at the bottom of the ravine.
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<span class="quote speech">Annie?</span> Michelle calls
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Michelle and James go ahead, using the walkway towards the dam.
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<span class="comment">?</span> her. They are standing by one of the doors
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About half-way, as Michelle walks onto the next section of walkway,
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in the tunnel wall. Jack pulls a wire through the latch and opens it.
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it starts making scary <span class="comment">foreboding?</span> creaking
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Inside is the main control room. The wall to the right is lined with
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noises. The moment James reaches it, the creaking turns into cracking
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metal cabinets that have levers, buttons, switches, and large gauges on
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and the panel of <span class="comment">grid floor</span> beings
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them. The wall to the left features a front of windows, allowing a view
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to give out underneath his feet. He grabs on to one of the railings and
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of the spillway and the top of the dam. Some of the windows have cracks
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quickly <span class="comment">hops? Idk some word between "step"
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but somehow none are broken. In front of the windows is a collection of
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and "jump"</span> onto the beam holding it, leaving the
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random furniture, mostly desks and chairs. The center of the room is
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section of floor barely hanging on.<br />
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taken up by a large console with more buttons, switches, and gauges that
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Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">You okay?</span><br />
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is facing the windows and an opening in the floor covered by a thick
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<span class="quote speech">Yeah – less so the floor...</span>
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glass pane. They roam around the room for a moment. Annie looks outside,
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admiring the flowering lilypads floating in the water that is held back
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The two walk the rest of the way across, meanwhile Annie and Jack stay
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by the dam.
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on the balcony.
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<p class="comment">TODO: Change this so Michelle and James explore the
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dam first, then turn their attention to the windows.</p>
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After the <span class="comment">Aufregung?</span> dies down, Michelle
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and James start looking around.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Would you look at that!</span><br />
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Michelle is looking through the windows. A few of them have cracks but
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most are somehow intact.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">I think I found what we're looking
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for.</span><br />
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Jack asks: <span class="quote speech">The control room?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Yea, it's right here.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Guess we're gonna have to climb
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across...</span><br />
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Annie says: <span class="quote speech">I'm not doing that.</span>
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James walks up to one of the windows saying:
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<span class="quote speech">Looks like there might be a way back to
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the tunnel from inside. We could let you in that way.</span><br />
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Jack replies: <span class="quote speech">That would work
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but we probably don't wanna break these windows.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Nobody said anything of
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<i>breaking</i>...</span><br />
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James takes a screwdriver out of his pocket. He jams it inbetween
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the window and its frame, then quickly pulls on it. The window jumps
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open with a bang.<br />
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Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">Jack, what's the status
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Jack and Annie are waiting in the tunnel next to a door.
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on that dome city you're building? You guys only have two years to
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The handle moves down and they hear the deadbold retracting with
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finish that project.</span><br />
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a click. The door creaks as it gets pulled inward, revealing a hallway.
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Michelle is on the other side, leading the way. James is standing in
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a door to the left, holding it open. They go through and enter the
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control room, a somewhat large room packed with equipment. Across the
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room is the wall with the window front, allowing a view of the spillway
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and the top of the dam. In front of it is a random collection of
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electronics and furniture, mostly desks and chairs and terminals,
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<span class="comment">zusammengeschoben? piled up?</span> for storage.
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In the center is a large
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console with more buttons, switches, and gauges that is facing the
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windows and an opening in the floor behind it, covered with a thick
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glass pane.
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The wall to the left is lined with metal cabinets with buttons,
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switches, large gauges and levers on them.
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The wall to the right is taken up by storage
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<span class="comment">cabinets? the drawer thingies...</span>
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and an assortment of large devices and contraptions.
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<p class="comment">TODO: They take a brief look at the control room
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and then climb outside onto the dam, returning to the control room
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afterwards.</span>
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<span class="comment">This needs to be tied together again as the
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beginning of the chapter has been rewritten.</span>
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They roam around the room for a while. Annie looks outside, admiring
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the flowering lilypads floating in the water held back by the dam.
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Meanwhile, Michelle looks at an old calendar.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Jack, what's the status on that dome
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city you're building? You guys only have two years to finish that
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project.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Oh no, I guess we're gonna have to slack
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<span class="quote speech">Oh no, I guess we're gonna have to slack
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less while waiting for bureaucracy to take its course.</span><br />
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less while waiting for bureaucracy to take its course.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Look, the power lines are gonna get hooked up
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<span class="quote speech">The power lines are gonna get hooked up
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to the battery bank in a couple days. Aren't you excited for
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to the battery bank in a couple days. Aren't you excited for
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that?</span><br />
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progress?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Not my department but I sure hope we're
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<span class="quote speech">Not my department but I sure hope we're
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no longer gonna need these portable batteries down there. Having a working
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no longer gonna need these portable batteries down there. Having a
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power grid is gonna be so nice.</span><br />
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working power grid is gonna be so nice.</span><br />
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They are looking at a calendar on the wall and laughing. It shows October
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They are laughing. The calendar shows October 1991 with a few entries
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1991 with a few entries and crossed-off days.
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and crossed-off days.
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Jack looks at a clipboard that was placed on the control panel on the
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Jack looks at a clipboard that was placed on the control panel on the
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<span class="quote speech">The next maintenence expedition is scheduled
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<span class="quote speech">The next maintenence expedition is scheduled
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for 2011... I don't think anyone ever stepped foot in here after
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for 2011... I don't think anyone ever stepped foot in here after
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Sunside Cove was sealed off.</span><br />
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Sunside Cove was sealed off.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">It wouldn't surprise me.</span> Annie
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Annie turns around and leans against the center console.<br />
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turns around and leans against the center console.
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<span class="quote speech">It wouldn't surprise me. Many people are
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<span class="quote speech">Apart from a small group, the entire city is
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legitimately scared of the outside world.</span><br />
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legitimately scared of the outside world.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">I mean they're probably right, the
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<span class="quote speech">I mean they're probably right, the
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outside world is dangerous. Look down, by the way.</span><br />
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outside world is pretty dangerous. Watch your step, by the way...</span>
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<span class="quote speech">Whoa!</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Whoa!</span><br />
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She stumbles backwards. Without noticing it, she had walked onto the
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She stumbles backwards. Without noticing it, she had walked onto the
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glass pane. It allows a view down into a hall filled with machinery.
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glass pane. It allows a view down into a hall filled with machinery.
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Jack turns the key and the gate starts to move up, scrathcing and
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Jack turns the key and the gate starts to move up, scrathcing and
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squeeking as it does, revealing a bunch of crates. About half-way
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squeeking as it does, revealing a bunch of crates. About half-way
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up, it gets stuck, making a buzzing noise. Jack lets go of the key, it
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up, it gets stuck, making a buzzing noise. He lets go of the key and it
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stops. They duck under the gate and look around. They find themselves in
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stops. They duck under the gate and look around. They find themselves in
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a warehouse much larger than the gate and windows facing the tunnel would
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a warehouse much larger than the gate and windows facing the tunnel would
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lead to assume.<br />
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lead to assume.<br />
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