01 Wake Up: more revision

01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

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   seems to work. While waiting for the tube to warm up, he walks over to
   the rack and sits down on the floor in front of it. He inspects the
   status lights on the various devices thinking aloud:
-  <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle, primary hard
-  drive is powered up &ndash; all good. Secondary hard drive is powered
-  down, let&apos;s change that...</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">CPU is idle, serials are idle, cryogenics
+  control unit sees one active chamber, primary hard drive is powered up
+  &ndash; all good. Secondary hard drive is powered down, let&apos;s
+  change that...</span>
   He pushes the power button and hears the spindle spinning up. The power
   button blinks. There is some intermittent rattling from the drive,
-  probably a shot bearing. It takes an unusually long time for it to get
-  up to speed. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive to be
-  ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by a
-  ringing scratching noise. <span class="quote speech">Of course.</span>
+  probably a shot bearing. He hears the platters inside accelerate for an
+  unusually long time. Impatiently sitting there, Jack waits for the drive
+  to be ready. Clicking from the mechanism unlocking the heads followed by
+  a ringing scratching noise. <span class="quote speech">Of course.</span>
   He quickly presses the power button again. The scratching stops and the
   spindle motor turns off, followed by the platters slowly decelerating.
   <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s gonna be an ugly head
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     </ul>
   </li>
   <li class="comment">
-    Annie conversation (duh)
-  </li>
-  <li class="comment">
-    something? Idk
+    Annie conversation setup (duh)
   </li>
 </ul>