'ra' <Emily first contact>: minor wording changes

Tried to continue writing but found inspiration for something else
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<p> <p>
Emily closes the cage and puts the &lt;whatever they feed the mice&gt; Emily closes the cage and puts the <span class="comment">whatever they
back into the cupboard. She <span class="comment">does something related feed the mice</span> back into the cupboard. She double-checks that the
to taking care of the mice</span>, steps out into the hallway, and cage is really closed, then she steps out into the hallway, and starts
starts walking. The entire habitat is eerily quiet. Apart from her steps, walking. The entire habitat is eerily quiet. Apart from her own
just the hum of the electrical systems and the quiet whirr of the air footsteps, she hears just the hum of the electrical systems and the
circulation are audible. quiet whirr of the air circulation.
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
3 &ndash; 5 &ndash; 2 &ndash; 1 &ndash; Enter. The keypad beeps with 3 &ndash; 5 &ndash; 2 &ndash; 1 &ndash; Enter. The keypad beeps with
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<span class="quote speech">Access authorized</span> and the door slides <span class="quote speech">Access authorized</span> and the door slides
up. She steps through into the main control center. The module contains up. She steps through into the main control center. The module contains
one large room with rows of integrated computer equipment desks arranged one large room with rows of integrated computer equipment desks arranged
<span class="comment">need a fitting description of what a mission in a <span class="comment">Mondsichel</span> shape with the
control rom looks like</span>. The wall to the left that most of the <span class="comment">W&ouml;lbung</span> to the left. Most of the seats
seats are facing is completely taken up by a panorama window into the are facing that way, allowing a view of the biotope through a huge
biotope, an even larger module with a ceiling of glass and support beams, panorama window taking up the entire wall. The biotope is an even larger
completely filled with plant life, trees, small animals, and a big pond. module with a ceiling of glass and support beams, completely filled with
The wall to the right holds a large status panel with some seven-segment plant life, trees, small critters, and a big pond. The walls across from
her and to the right hold large status panels with some seven-segment
displays for information and lots of big status indicator symbols. displays for information and lots of big status indicator symbols.
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
Emily walks down the shallow stairs towards the panorama window. In Emily walks down the shallow stairs towards the panorama window. In
front of the window are tables and chairs that were moved there recently front of the window are tables and chairs that were moved there recently
as the room had become more of a general hangout spot for the remaining as the room had become more of a general hangout spot for the remaining
people when there still more than just Lena and her. Lena sits at one of people. Now, it&apos;s just Lena and her.
them, cutting a bread into slices while waiting for her. </p>
<p>
Lena sits at one of the tables, cutting a piece of bread into slices.
In front of her is a bowl with fruit and a honey jar.
</p> </p>
<p class="comment"> <p class="comment">
missing dialog about food and starting to eat missing dialog about food and starting to eat