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or be annoyed. Also, this place,
<span class="quote non-speech">Cryo&nbsp;Facility&nbsp;53</span>, she had
never heard of it. The only one who might know more about it is her
grandpa, as he used to work for the power company and had studied the
plans of the city very thoroughly. So she dials his number...
grandpa, as he had studied the plans of the city very thoroughly during
his time at the power company. So she dials his number...
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Annie is greeted by the friendly voice of an old man. After
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the start.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">How?</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Cryogenic sleep - it&apos;s a way to preserve
people for a log time. It was thought to be impossible for a long time
but they somehow made it work just before the apocalypse happened.</span>
people for a log time by essentially freezing them. It was thought to be
impossible for a long time but they made it work just before the
apocalypse happened.</span>
<br />
<span class="quote speech">He&apos;s one from the old world? Doesn&apos;t
that mean that he&apos;s way over a hundred years old?</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">He&apos;s one from the old world?</span><br />
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A cup of juice and two cookies later, she hears the telephone ring in the
basement. Annie grabs another cookie and hurries back down the stairs.
She makes it to the desk just in time for the phone to stop ringing. The
text on the terminal disappears. She looks back and forth between the
phone and the terminal for a moment. A new message appears. She sits down
and replies:
She makes it to the desk just in time for it to stop ringing. The text on
the terminal disappears. She looks back and forth between the phone and
the terminal for a moment. A new message appears. She sits down and
replies:
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Annie closes the door behind herself and locks it. As she takes a breath
of the slightly humid air, she steps back onto the sidewalk to look at
the clock above the entrance... 8:25 PM - the realization of how much
time had passed hits: Normally she&apos;d be at home already. She starts
walking towards the metro station at the corner. The buildings here are
similar to the ones in <span class="comment">Wohngebieten?</span> - three
to four story houses painted in different colors - but they are lacking
the clock above the entrance... 8:25 PM &ndash; the realization of how
much time had passed hits: Normally she&apos;d be at home already. She
starts walking towards the metro station at the corner. The buildings
here are similar to the ones in residential areas &ndash; three to four
story houses painted in different colors &ndash; but they are lacking
balconies and, instead of being homes, they mostly house offices. On the
other side of the street is an embankment that holds the rails for the
metro and beyond that is the outer wall of the dome. The street lights